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A product you bought and was dissatisfied about. v.1

A product you bought and was dissatisfied about. v. 1
A product you bought and was dissatisfied about. You should say:  what the product was  where you purchased it from what you did with the product and explain why you were not satisfied with the product.   Model Answer 1: I try not to be a very picky person when it comes to choosing or buying a product. But, that may not always be a wise thing to do because it leaves us enough room for dissatisfaction just like it did for me when I bought a product last month. It was a travel bag which I bought from one of the popular and prestigious shopping centres in my city. I could have bought that travel bag from some other stores, but since one of my cousins convinced me to visit that shopping centre, because it was selling some beautiful travel bags on discount, I decided to oblige. I must say that I never really visited that super centre because I was under the impression that they didn’t have a collection of enough quality products. But, after visiting that shopping centre, I was proved out to be wrong because they did sell a lot of products, including some top-class travel bags. And, they were being sold on some discounted price also. Naturally, I felt happy and picked up a travel bag for me which looked just too perfect for me at that time. Of course, I had to pay a hefty price for it even though the product was sold on a discount. By the way, the bag was supposed to be water-proof. But, after taking it home, after a few weeks, I found out that it was not waterproof when I accidentally spilt some cold coffee on it. On top of that, I also noticed that the metallic chain looked already loose after using it only for a few times. So, the next day, I took the bag to the store and explained the situation. I also told them that I paid a lot of money for that bag even after getting a good discount. I also argued that the bag was actually made out of poor materials and as such, they should have given me a full refund. Luckily, the manager understood the gravity of the situation and gave me a full refund.
A
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product
you
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bought
and
was dissatisfied
about. You should say:
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what the
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product
was
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where you
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purchased
it from what you did with the
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product
and
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explain
why you were not satisfied with the
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product
.
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Model Answer 1:

I try not to be a
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very
picky person when it
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comes
to choosing or buying a
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product
.
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But
, that may not always be a wise thing to do
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because
it
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leaves
us
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enough
room for dissatisfaction
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just
like it did for me when I
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bought
a
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product
last month.

It was a
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travel
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bag
which I
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bought
from one of the popular and prestigious shopping
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centres
in my city. I could have
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bought
that
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travel
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bag
from
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some
other stores,
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but
since one of my cousins convinced me to visit that shopping
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centre
,
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because
it was selling
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some
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beautiful
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travel
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bags
on discount, I decided to oblige.

I
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must
say that I never
really
visited that super
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centre
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because
I was under the impression that they didn’t have a collection of
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enough
quality
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products
.
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But
, after visiting that shopping
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centre
, I
was proved
out to be
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wrong
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because
they did sell
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a lot of
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products
, including
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some
top-
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class
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travel
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bags
. And, they were
being sold
on
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some
discounted price
also
.

Naturally
, I felt happy and picked up a
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travel
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bag
for me which looked
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just
too perfect for me at that time.
Of course
, I had to pay a hefty price for it
even though
the
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product
was sold
on a discount. By the way, the
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bag
was supposed
to be water-proof.
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But
, after taking it home, after a few weeks, I found out that it was not waterproof when I
accidentally
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spilt
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some
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cold
coffee on it.
On top of that
, I
also
noticed that the metallic chain looked already loose after using it
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only
for a few times.

So
, the
next
day, I took the
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bag
to the store and
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explained
the situation. I
also
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told
them that I paid
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a lot of
money for that
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bag
even after getting a
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good
discount. I
also
argued that the
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bag
was
actually
made out of poor materials and as such, they should have
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given
me a full refund. Luckily, the manager understood the gravity of the situation and gave me a full refund.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS speaking A product you bought and was dissatisfied about. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
6 paragraphs
385 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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