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Describe something that you purchased but had not used much. v.1

Describe something that you purchased but had not used much. v. 1
Describe something that you purchased but had not used much. You should say: what it was where you bought it from why you bought it and explain why you didn’t use it that much.   Model Answer 1: I have seldom bought anything in my life which I didn’t use until they were old and worn out. In fact, many times, I have even tried to upgrade or fix some of the things, which are old or worn out, for further use. But, unfortunately, that was not the case when I bought a very modern exercising machine. I am talking about the “treadmill” machine, which I bought from a local health and fitness stores in my hometown about a few years ago. As per the salesperson at that store, the treadmill was built by one of the best companies in the world, and every part of it was perfectly in sync with the rest of its body. It also was a standard home treadmill, about 7 feet long and 3 feet wide in size, and its frames were made out of heavy-duty steel. All in all, it was a perfect looking treadmill for anybody who wanted to get his or her body in shape.   So, I also bought that treadmill machine because I wanted to get in shape without running outside in some unfavourable weather conditions, associated with uncomfortable heat, humidity or cold. Anyway, after buying the exercising machine, I exercised on it for the first 6 months like there was no tomorrow, whenever I got a chance. In fact, I was so enthusiastic about getting in shape with the help of my newly-bought fitness machine that I even used to wake up in the middle of the night sometimes in order to sweat a little. However, after that, my enthusiasm for exercise died down slowly and eventually stopped using my treadmill that much. Anyway, even though I liked my treadmill machine, I couldn’t use it that much because I got a little busier with my work life and other priorities. Besides, I also felt that it was important for me to go outside and enjoy some outdoor activities also sometimes in order to enjoy some fresh air and mother nature, instead of just staying at home and using the fitness machine, if I really wanted to remain healthy.   Sample Answer 2: I love to have technological devices and gadgets, and sometimes, I purchase them from the attraction rather than necessity. One such device I bought that I have rarely used was the Sony gaming console. I purchased it in 2011 with a good amount of money but have not played games in it more than 10 times!   I bought it from a big Sony showroom from a nearby market. The time I bought it, I had the passion of purchasing it and I did not think about the amount it would cost and how many times I would actually use it. It was like fulfilling a wish rather than purchasing a utilitarian device for daily use. When I bought it, I was fascinated to buy it. In fact, I had a long desire to buy it and after I bought it, I got busy with my study and the new job. I noticed that over time, my fascination of playing games in a gaming device or in a computer has decreased. Moreover, my job, my university and my other interests require the majority time and hence I got very little time for playing the game. With time this device has become a backdated gaming console and I have lost interest in it. And because of that, I did not use it that much.     Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would also enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics as well: Describe something you bought and were not happy about it. Describe a product you rarely use. Describe something you have recently bought. Describe an old thing you have at your home.
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Describe
something that you
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purchased
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but
had not
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used
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much
. You should say: what it was where you
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bought
it from why you
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bought
it and
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explain
why you didn’t
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use
it that
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much
.
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Model Answer 1: I have seldom
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bought
anything in my life which I didn’t
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use
until they were
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old
and worn out. In fact,
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many
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times
, I have even tried to upgrade or
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fix
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some of the
things, which are
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old
or worn out, for
further
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use
.
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But
, unfortunately, that was not the case when I
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bought
a
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very
modern exercising machine.

I am talking about the “treadmill”
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machine
, which I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
from a local health and fitness stores in my hometown about a few years ago. As per the salesperson at that store, the treadmill
was built
by one of the best
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
in the world, and every part of it was
perfectly
in sync with the rest of its body. It
also
was a standard home treadmill, about
Writing for an international audience? Consider adding the metric equivalent.
7 feet
long and
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3 feet
A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
wide in size
, and its frames
were made
out of heavy-duty steel.

All in all, it was a perfect looking treadmill for anybody who wanted to
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get
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his or her
body in shape.
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So
, I
also
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bought
that treadmill
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machine
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because
I wanted to
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get
in shape without running outside in
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some
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unfavourable
weather conditions, associated with uncomfortable heat, humidity or
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cold
.
Anyway
, after buying the exercising
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machine
, I exercised on it for the
first
6 months like there was no tomorrow, whenever I
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got
a chance. In fact, I was
so
enthusiastic about getting in shape with the
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help
of my
newly
-
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bought
fitness
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machine
that I even
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used
to wake up in the middle of the night
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sometimes
in order to sweat a
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little
.
However
, after that, my enthusiasm for exercise
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died
down
slowly
and
eventually
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stopped
using my treadmill that much.

Anyway
,
even though
I liked my treadmill
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machine
, I couldn’t
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use
it that
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much
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because
I
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got
a
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little
busier with my work life and other priorities.
Besides
, I
also
felt that it was
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important
for me to go outside and enjoy
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some
outdoor activities
also
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sometimes
in order to enjoy
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some
fresh air and mother nature,
instead
of
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just
staying at home and using the fitness
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machine
, if I
really
wanted to remain healthy.
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Sample Answer 2: I
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love
to have technological
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devices
and gadgets, and
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sometimes
, I
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purchase
them from the attraction
rather
than necessity. One such
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device
I
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bought
that I have rarely
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used
was the Sony gaming console. I
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purchased
it in 2011 with a
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good
amount of money
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but
have not played games in it more than 10
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times
!
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I
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bought
it from a
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big
Sony showroom from a nearby market. The
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time
I
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bought
it, I had the passion of purchasing it and I did not
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think
about the amount it would cost and how
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many
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times
I would
actually
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use
it. It was like fulfilling a wish
rather
than purchasing a utilitarian
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device
for daily
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
.

When I
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bought
it, I
was fascinated
to
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buy
it. In fact, I had a long desire to
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buy
it and after I
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bought
it, I
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got
busy with my study and the new job. I noticed that over
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time
, my fascination of playing games in a gaming
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device
or in a computer has decreased.
Moreover
, my job, my university and my other interests require the majority
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time
and
hence
I
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got
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very
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little
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time
for playing the game. With
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time
this
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device
has become a backdated gaming console and I have lost interest in it. And
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because
of that, I did not
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use
it that
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much
.
Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
   
Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would
also
enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics as
well
:
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Describe
something you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
and were not happy about it.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Describe
a product you rarely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Describe
something you have recently
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
an
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old
thing you have at your home.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe something that you purchased but had not used much. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
5 paragraphs
677 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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