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Describe a bank/financial institute you have visited. v.1

Describe a bank/financial institute you have visited. v. 1
Describe a bank/financial institute you have visited. You should say: when you visited it why you went there what you did there and explain your experience of the visit.   Model Answer 1: I have always felt that banks are there mostly for rich people or the people who are expecting to be rich. So, I don’t really need to run to a bank, except on some rare occasions, apparently because I am a student, and I fall in neither of these categories of people. Today, I would like to talk about one such occasion when I needed to go to a bank about a few months ago. I have always lived in an extended family, with my uncles, aunts and cousins living together with us, and we always take care of each other as best as we can, including sharing gifts among each other during all kinds of religious festivals. But, a couple of months ago, my family had a unique problem in sharing that gifts with everybody on the eve of one such religious festival because my youngest uncle had to move far away from us and live there because of professional reasons, and a gift needed to be delivered to my uncle as well. But, of course, my father didn’t think that it was a good idea to buy a gift and mail it to him and decided instead to send a “money order” from a bank nearby. So I visited a local branch of Standard Chartered bank. But, after entering the bank, I found a long queue waiting to “welcome” me instead of some “friendly” faces! So, I had no other choice except waiting there until my turn came. However, after waiting for about 20 minutes, while occasionally chatting with an officer, I finally managed to make a “money order”. Anyway, talking about my experience, I wouldn’t exactly say it was very “thrilling” because every customer there seemed to be a bit “agitated” as it was taking a bit way too long to finally reach the bank official. Besides, the behaviour of the bank officials wasn’t very “inviting” either because they weren’t probably expecting that kind of rush at that hour. However, the good thing about that visit was, I actually managed to befriend with one of the officers there because we attended the same high school!   Sample Answer 2: I have visited several banks for different purposes and for this cue card I would like to talk about my visit to the City Bank. I visited this bank for the first time in 2008 when I was a new student at my university. After I finished my first semester, I had to go to this bank to pay my 2nd semester's fee as this bank was the affiliated bank for our university. In the early morning, I went to the bank and found that some of the students were already standing in the queue. I asked the helpdesk officer what I should do to pay my semester fee. He handed over me 2 forms and asked me to fill these forms first and then stay in the line to pay the amount. I filled the forms and then stood in the line. After 20 minutes or so when I was at the front of the line, the cash officer asked me to give the form and then the amount mentioned on it. He took the forms and counted the money both in hands and a cash machine. He then asked me to sign in a part of the form that I overlooked and missed. I signed in it and waited for 2 minutes when he gave me a receipt. I left the line and sat on a sofa for a few minutes as I was waiting for one of my classmates. After he finished paying his fee, we two left the bank. My overall experience of the bank was very good as the bank had a really impressive environment, the staffs were cordial and helpful and my objective to pay the fee was done very quickly.   Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card Topic would also enable you to talk about the following Cue Card Topics as well: Describe an office or company you have visited or worked in. Describe a building in your city. Describe a busy place you went to.
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Describe
a bank/financial institute you have
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visited
. You should say: when you
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visited
it why you went there what you did there and
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explain
your experience of the visit.
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Model Answer 1:

I have always felt that
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banks
are there
mostly
for rich
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people
or the
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people
who are expecting to be rich.
So
, I don’t
really
need to run to a
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bank
, except on
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some
rare occasions,
apparently
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because
I am a student, and I fall in neither of these categories of
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people
.
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Today
, I would like to
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talk
about one such occasion when I needed to go to a
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bank
about a few months ago.

I have always
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lived
in an extended family, with my uncles, aunts and cousins living together with us, and we always take care of each other as
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best
as we can, including sharing
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gifts
among each other during all kinds of religious festivals.
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But
, a couple of months ago, my family had a unique problem in sharing that
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gifts
with everybody on the eve of one such religious festival
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because
my youngest uncle had to
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move
far away from us and
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live
there
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because
of professional reasons, and a
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gift
needed to
be delivered
to my uncle as
well
.
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But
,
of course
, my father didn’t
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think
that it was a
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good
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idea
to
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buy
a
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gift
and mail it to him and decided
instead
to
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send
a “money order” from a
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bank
nearby.

So
I
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visited
a local branch of Standard Chartered
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bank
.
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But
, after entering the
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bank
, I found a long queue
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waiting
to “welcome” me
instead
of
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some
“friendly” faces!
So
, I had no other choice except
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waiting
there until my turn came.
However
, after
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waiting
for about 20 minutes, while
occasionally
chatting with an
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officer
, I
finally
managed to
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make
a “money order”.

Anyway
, talking about my experience, I wouldn’t exactly say it was
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very
“thrilling”
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because
every customer there seemed to be a bit “agitated” as it was taking a bit way too long to
finally
reach the
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bank
official.
Besides
, the
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behaviour
of the
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bank
officials wasn’t
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very
“inviting” either
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because
they weren’t
probably
expecting that kind of rush at that hour.
However
, the
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good
thing about that visit was, I
actually
managed to befriend with one of the
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officers
there
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because
we attended the same high school!
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Sample Answer 2:

I have
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visited
several
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banks
for
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different
purposes and for this
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cue
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card
I would like to
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talk
about my visit to the City
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Bank
. I
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visited
this
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bank
for the
first
time in 2008 when I was a new student at my university. After I finished my
first
semester, I had to go to this
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bank
to
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pay
my 2nd semester's
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fee
as this
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bank
was the affiliated
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bank
for our university. In the early morning, I went to the
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bank
and found that
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some of the
students were already standing in the queue. I
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asked
the
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helpdesk
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officer
what I should do to
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pay
my semester
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fee
. He handed over me 2
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forms
and
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asked
me to fill these
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forms
first
and then stay in the
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line
to
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pay
the amount. I filled the
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forms
and then stood in the
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line
. After 20 minutes or
so
when I was at the front of the
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line
, the cash
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officer
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asked
me to give the
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form
and then the amount mentioned on it. He took the
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forms
and counted the money both in hands and a cash machine. He then
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asked
me to
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sign
in a part of the
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form
that I overlooked and missed. I signed in it and waited for 2 minutes when he gave me a receipt. I
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left
the
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line
and sat on a sofa for a few minutes as I was
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waiting
for one of my classmates. After he finished paying his
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fee
, we two
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left
the
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bank
. My
overall
experience of the
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bank
was
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very
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good
as the
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bank
had a
really
impressive environment, the staffs were cordial and helpful and my objective to
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pay
the
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fee
was done
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very
quickly
.
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15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
74Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe a bank/financial institute you have visited. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
6 paragraphs
734 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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