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Describe something you like doing during the winter. v.1

Describe something you like doing during the winter. v. 1
Describe something you like doing during the winter. You should say: what it is when and where you usually do it who you usually have with you and explain why you do this activity during the winter.   Model Answer 1: I live in a beautiful country which takes different looks in different seasons just as it takes a different look during the winter season also. In fact, I prefer winter season a bit more to the other seasons because I can do a lot of things during this time. One such thing that I really like doing during this season is to attend a special cake festival. This cake festival is undoubtedly one of the most popular food festivals of my country since people from all over of my county gather at a certain place in the city, where I live, with all kinds of “pitha” ( “cake” in plain English) which are mostly made from date palm jaggery. This particular festival takes place mostly during the late afternoon time and can continue until mid night. The participants of this festival make so many different kinds of cakes with so many different shapes and sizes that it will be almost impossible to try them all in just one day. Needless to say, all of the cakes there taste just so delicious as they all have different taste, flavour and aroma. By the way, it must be mentioned here that a lot of efforts and times go behind preparing these delicious cakes. Anyway, apart from date palm jaggery, regular sugar and brown sugar are also used to make other kinds of cakes which also taste good. However, these cakes by no means are cheap, so one has to be ready to pay a handsome amount of money to try those delicious cakes. But, of course, I and my friends don’t really have to pay much money because we all have been given some kind of discount cards to buy them at a cheaper rate. Lucky us! Anyway, I like this particular activity during the winter time, mainly because I just love to eat those delicious cakes which are not normally made at my home. Besides, it also offers me an opportunity to meet different kinds of interesting people from different parts of my country and build some kind of friendship with them.   Sample Answer 2: Winter usually lasts for three months in our country and apart from the extreme winter days, people enjoy this season to a great extent. Lifestyles and activities of people between summertime and winter seasons differ noticeably, and we often do things in winter that we do not like to do in the summer season. One activity that I particularly enjoy doing during the winter season is playing badminton. It has become a custom in our country to play the badminton during the winter season. At the beginning of the winter season, I ask some of my friends to prepare a badminton court near our home and then arrange other equipment and tools that we need to play this game. Usually, after 8: 00 we gather in the playground and play for about two hours. Playing badminton is a good way of exercising and I love to play this game. This is a great way of physical exertion as well as an enjoyable game. Apart from that, it helps our friends to have a reason to get together even in our tight and busy schedule. For all these reasons, I like this particular activity during the winter season.   Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as well: Describe an activity you like doing. Describe an evening you remember enjoying. Describe a winter day you remember. Describe an outdoor activity you enjoy doing.
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something you like
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doing
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winter
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do it who you
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have with you and
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activity
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Model Answer 1:

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live
in a
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beautiful
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country
which takes
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different
looks in
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seasons
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as it takes a
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different
look during the
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winter
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also
. In fact, I prefer
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winter
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a bit more to the other
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seasons
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because
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a lot of
things during this
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. One such thing that I
really
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during this
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is to attend a special
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cake
festival.

This
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is
undoubtedly
one of the most popular food
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festivals
of my
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since
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people
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live
, with all
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kinds
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pitha
”
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(
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“cake”
in plain English) which are
mostly
made from date palm
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jaggery
.

This particular
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festival
takes place
mostly
during the late afternoon
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and can continue until mid night. The participants of this
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festival
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kinds
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with
so
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different
shapes and sizes that it will be almost impossible to try them all in
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just
one day.
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,
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all of the
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there taste
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so
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as they all have
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taste,
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flavour
and aroma.

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.
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, apart from date palm
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, regular sugar and brown sugar are
also
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which
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good
.
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, these
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cakes
by no means are
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cheap
,
so
one
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has to
be ready to pay a handsome amount of money to try those
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delicious
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.
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, I and my friends don’t
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kind
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them at a cheaper rate. Lucky us!

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, I like this particular
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activity
during the
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winter
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,
mainly
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because
I
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love
to eat those
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cakes
which are not
normally
made at my home.
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, it
also
offers me an opportunity to
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meet
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kinds
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people
from
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different
parts of my
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country
and build
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some
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kind
of friendship with them.
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Sample Answer
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2: Winter
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usually
lasts for three months in our
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country
and apart from the extreme
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winter
days,
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people
enjoy this
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season
to a great extent. Lifestyles and
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activities
of
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people
between
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summertime
and
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winter
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seasons
differ
noticeably
, and we
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often
do things in
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that we do not like to do in the summer
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season
. One
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activity
that I
particularly
enjoy
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doing
during the
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winter
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season
is playing badminton.

It has become a custom in our
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country
to
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play
the badminton during the
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winter
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season
. At the beginning of the
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, I ask
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some
of my friends to prepare a badminton court near our home and then arrange other equipment and tools that we need to
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play
this game.
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Usually
, after 8: 00 we gather in the playground and
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play
for about two hours.

Playing badminton is a
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good
way of exercising and I
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love
to
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play
this game. This is a great way of physical exertion as
well
as an enjoyable game. Apart from that, it
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helps
our friends to have a reason to
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get
together even in our tight and busy schedule. For all these reasons, I like this particular
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activity
during the
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winter
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.
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Describe
an
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activity
you like
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doing
.
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Describe
an evening you remember enjoying.
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a
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day you remember.
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an outdoor
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you enjoy
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doing
.
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100Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
19Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe something you like doing during the winter. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
9 paragraphs
643 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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