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Describe a photograph that you remember well. v.1

Describe a photograph that you remember well. v. 1
Describe a photograph that you remember well. You should say:   when it was take   who took it   what is in the photograph and explain why you remember this photograph so well. Model Answer 1: I want to talk to you about a favourite photograph of mine. I’ll explain when and where it was taken and why it is important and memorable to me. The photograph is quite old now. I took it myself using what would now be thought of as an old-fashioned camera with traditional film. I can’t remember exactly what year it was, but it was probably around 2005. The photograph is of my uncle and aunt with their daughter, my niece. My uncle was born in the UK but ended up working in America, eventually taking American citizenship. I didn’t get to see him very often. Unfortunately, just before this photo was taken my uncle found out he was very ill, so I travelled out to America to visit him and his family, knowing that I might not get the chance to see him again. Because it was my first time in America, they took me out and about to see the sights. The photograph was taken on a day we went to New York. It was pouring with rain, and really blustery. In the picture, my uncle and aunt are both holding black umbrellas, and the one my uncle is hanging onto has turned inside out in the wind. My niece, who was probably in her late teens then, is standing between them, and they are all laughing because the torrential rain had thoroughly drenched everyone. In the background is a yellow cab, and the streets are awash with water. It ought to have been a miserable day, but we had to see the funny side because the atrocious weather was so extreme, and it was madness for us to pick such a day to go exploring in the city! I really like the photo because in it everyone looks happy and relaxed. Although the photo was a bit posed – they knew I was photographing them, the weather was so appalling it has a spontaneous feel to it, my relatives were reacting to the rain rather than to me the photographer. It was also incredibly lucky that the photo came out so well. In the days before digital cameras, you would just take one snapshot of an occasion and hope for the best. This is a brilliant photo, it’s flattering everyone, and captures each individual animated and amused by the elements. I have very few photos of my uncle, but I keep this one of him with his family on display in my flat. It reminds me of a really happy time and is how I want to remember him too. Looking at the photo makes me smile rather than feel sad – he looks so joyful with his family - and what better way to celebrate someone’s life than to remember them with affection, laughter and celebration long after they have gone? This photograph is special, as it enables me to do that every day! [ Written by - Lucy Marris |  Careers Adviser (UK), TEFL teacher (Vietnam) ]
Describe
a
photograph
that you
remember
well
. You should say:
 
when it was take
 
who took it
 
what is in the
photograph
and
explain
why you
remember
this
photograph
so
well
.

Model Answer 1:

I want to talk to you about a
favourite
photograph
of mine. I’ll
explain
when and where it
was taken
and why it is
important
and memorable to me. The
photograph
is quite
old
now
. I took it myself using what would
now
be
thought
of as an
old
-fashioned camera with traditional film. I can’t
remember
exactly what year it was,
but
it was
probably
around 2005. The
photograph
is of my
uncle
and aunt with their daughter, my niece. My
uncle
was born
in the UK
but
ended up working in America,
eventually
taking American citizenship. I didn’t
get
to
see
him
very
often
. Unfortunately,
just
before
this
photo
was taken
my
uncle
found out he was
very
ill,
so
I travelled out to America to visit him and his family, knowing that I might not
get
the chance to
see
him again.
Because
it was my
first
time in America, they took me out and about to
see
the sights. The
photograph
was taken
on a day we went to New York. It was pouring with rain, and
really
blustery. In the picture, my
uncle
and aunt are both holding black umbrellas, and the one my
uncle
is hanging onto has turned inside out in the wind. My niece, who was
probably
in her late teens then, is standing between them, and they are all laughing
because
the torrential rain had
thoroughly
drenched everyone. In the background is a yellow cab, and the streets are awash with water. It ought to have been a miserable day,
but
we had to
see
the
funny
side
because
the atrocious weather was
so
extreme, and it was madness for us to pick such a day to go exploring in the city! I
really
like the
photo
because
in
it everyone
looks happy and relaxed. Although the
photo
was a bit posed
they knew I was photographing them, the weather was
so
appalling it has a spontaneous feel to it, my relatives were reacting to the rain
rather
than to me the photographer. It was
also
incredibly
lucky that the
photo
came out
so
well
. In the days
before
digital cameras, you would
just
take one snapshot of an occasion and hope for the best. This is a brilliant
photo
, it’s flattering everyone, and captures each individual animated and amused by the elements. I have
very
few
photos
of my
uncle
,
but
I
keep
this one of him with his family on display in my flat. It reminds me of a
really
happy time and is how I want to
remember
him too. Looking at the
photo
makes
me smile
rather
than feel sad
he looks
so
joyful with his family
-
and what better way to celebrate someone’s life than to
remember
them with affection, laughter and celebration long after they have gone? This
photograph
is special, as it enables me to do that every day!
[
Written by
-
Lucy
Marris
|
 
Careers Adviser (UK), TEFL teacher (Vietnam)
]
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe a photograph that you remember well. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
3 paragraphs
537 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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