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Describe someone you know who has a lot of responsibilities. v.1

Describe someone you know who has a lot of responsibilities. v. 1
Describe someone you know who has a lot of responsibilities. You should say: Who this person is What s/he does What kind of responsibility that person has And explain how well that person deals with his or her responsibilities. Model Answer: In my opinion, my father is a person who has lots of responsibilities and he has a good quality of balancing these responsibilities with his daily life. First of all, he works in a government organisation and on an average he spends 9 hours a day in his office. Though I don’t know the details of his every job responsibility, I have a good idea of his duties and this is a tough job position to hold. He is responsible for maintaining the education sector of the town and every day he has to spend a busy time at his office. I have visited his office several times and always found him busy meeting with the teachers of different education institutes as well as other government officers. Besides his duty towards the country and the government, he maintains a family of 12 members. I have 3 siblings and two of my uncles live with us. My grandmother lives with us and my father is the only earning member of this big family. Apart from the expenses, he spends his time very wisely to keep in touch with all family members. He takes care of our education, balance nutrition and treatment. He is a hard working person and he does many of our family tasks. He is a social worker as well and often attends the community meetings. As a decision-making members of this welfare community society, he performs many works there as well. One of his greatest responsibilities is to take care of his mother and amazingly he is very good at it. Sometimes I wonder how come he can manage so many things so well! In my opinion, my father is a good-hearted, hard working person who maintains an exemplary life with lots of duties and responsibilities.   Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as well: Describe a relative you like. Describe someone in your family. Describe a person who has many responsibilities.
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someone
you know
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who
has
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a lot of
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responsibilities
. You should say:
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Who
this
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person
is What s/he does What kind of
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responsibility
that
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person
has And
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explain
how
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well
that
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person
deals with
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his or her
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responsibilities
. Model Answer:

In my opinion, my father is a
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person
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who
has lots of
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
responsibilities and
he has a
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good
quality of balancing these
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responsibilities
with his daily life.
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First of all
, he works in a
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government
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organisation
and on an average he spends 9 hours a day in his office. Though I don’t know the
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details
of his every job
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responsibility
, I have a
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good
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idea
of his duties and this is a tough job position to hold. He is responsible for maintaining the education sector of the town and every day he
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has to
spend a busy time at his office. I have visited his office several times and always found him busy meeting with the teachers of
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different
education institutes as
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well
as other
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government
officers.
Besides
his duty towards the country and the
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government
, he maintains a
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family
of 12
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members
. I have 3 siblings and two of my uncles
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live
with us. My grandmother
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lives
with us and my father is the
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only
earning
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member
of this
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big
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family
. Apart from the expenses, he spends his time
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very
wisely
to
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keep
in touch with all
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family
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members
. He takes care of our education, balance nutrition and treatment. He is a
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hard working
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person and
he does
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many
of our
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family
tasks.
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He
is a social worker as
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well
and
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often
attends the community meetings. As a decision-making
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members
of this welfare community society, he performs
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many
works there as
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well
. One of his greatest
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responsibilities
is to take care of his mother and
amazingly
he is
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very
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good
at it.
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Sometimes
I wonder how
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come
he can manage
so
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many
things
so
well
!

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good
-hearted,
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hard working
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person
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who
maintains an exemplary life with lots of duties and
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responsibilities
.
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Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as
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well
:
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Describe
a relative you like.
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Describe
someone in your
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family
.
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Describe
a
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person
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who
has
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many
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responsibilities
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe someone you know who has a lot of responsibilities. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
3 paragraphs
381 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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