Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Describe an outdoor meal or picnic that you had. v.1

Describe an outdoor meal or picnic that you had. v. 1
Describe an outdoor meal or picnic that you had. You should say: Where did it take place What was the occasion What did you eat and drink there and explain whether you enjoyed it or not. Model answer: I can remember so many outdoor picnics with my friends and family members. In fact, we used to go outing and had our meals outside as part of the picnics very frequently even a few years back. One such picnic was a boat trip to a nearby island called (say a name) where we went 3-4 years ago. It was a small island and that island had some old buildings as well as a beautiful relaxing spot surrounded by natures. The water around the island gives the impression that you have come to an exotic land. We had our picnics on this island. There was no particular occasion for the picnic; as far as I recall the community people of our locality were planning for a picnic and they settled the day in the mid-summer. On the day we had a big boat that took us to the island and we spent the whole day there. I remember eating fried rice, roasted mutton, chicken, desert, different cookies fruits and some other food items throughout the whole day during our visit to the island. We drank plenty of waters as the weather was hot. We also drank fruit juices and soft drinks at different times of the day. It was a great occasion for me. All of my family members and neighbours were present in the picnic and that was a really relaxing occasion for me. I enjoyed the boat journey and the picnic spot a lot. I played and chatted with the neighbouring kids and that was a very interesting and enjoyable gathering in my opinion.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Describe
an outdoor meal or
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
picnic
that you had. You should say: Where did it take place What was the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
occasion
What did you eat and drink there and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
whether you enjoyed it or not. Model answer:

I can remember
so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
outdoor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
picnics
with my friends and family members. In fact, we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to go outing and had our meals outside as part of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
picnics
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
frequently
even a few years back. One such
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
picnic
was a boat trip to a nearby
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
island
called (say a name) where we went 3-4 years ago. It was a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
island
and that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
island
had
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
buildings as
well
as a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
beautiful
relaxing spot surrounded by natures. The water around the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
island
gives the impression that you have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to an exotic land. We had our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
picnics
on this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
island
. There was no particular
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
occasion
for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
picnic
; as far as I recall the community
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
of our locality were planning for a
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
picnic and
they settled the day in the mid-summer. On the day we had a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
boat that took us to the
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
island and
we spent the whole day there.

I remember eating fried rice, roasted mutton, chicken,
Possibly confused word: Did you mean "dessert" (= a confectionery course that concludes a main meal) instead of 'desert' (= a barren area of landscape with little precipitation)?
desert
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
cookies fruits and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
other food items throughout the whole day during our visit to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
island
. We drank
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
plenty
of waters as the weather was hot. We
also
drank fruit juices and soft drinks at
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
times of the day.

It was a great
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
occasion
for me. All of my family members and
Possible spelling mistake. 'neighbours' is British English.
neighbours
were present in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
picnic
and that was a
really
relaxing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
occasion
for me. I enjoyed the boat journey and the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
picnic
spot a lot. I played and chatted with the
Possible spelling mistake. 'neighbouring' is British English.
neighbouring
kids and that was a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
interesting and enjoyable gathering in my opinion.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
You can never understand one language until you understand at least two.
Geoffrey Willans

IELTS speaking Describe an outdoor meal or picnic that you had. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts