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Describe a celebration when a number of guests came to your place. v.1

Describe a celebration when a number of guests came to your place. v. 1
Describe a celebration when a number of guests came to your place. You should say: When it was What you did Who came and give details of the celebration. Model Answer: Thank you very much for the topic. There are many occasions that I remember when people came to our houses and among them I would like to talk about my younger sister’s birthday occasion when more than 50 guests came to our house. It was two years ago and I went to my home time three days before my sister’s birthday to celebrate the occasion. It was the mid-January and I had some day offs at that time. I planned to stay for a week there. Initially, my thought was that the birthday would be strictly a family celebration and no other guests would be present. But after I reach home, I learned that many people have been invited and my family is arranging a big party for the birthday occasion. I went to a nearby shop to buy a gift for my sister as well as any last moment shopping needed for the party. I also bought some fancy items to decorate the house and bought a new dress for my sister. I helped my father on some of the pending tasks regarding the party and went to invite 3-4 of my friends. On the celebration day, I greeted many guests, made sure that they have been offered relaxing places to sit and talked to many of them. When my sister cut the birthday cake, I took lots of photos and finally helped my family members to take care of the guests. More than 50 people came to the party including some of our relatives, neighbours, my sister’s friends and 2-3 of my friends. Amazingly I found some of the relatives who I have not met for a long. The feast for the birthday celebration was in the evening and guests was supposed to have dinner at our home. The guest started coming from the early evening and we greeted them. After 1 hour or so, my sister cut the cake and we enjoyed a light food then. The guests enjoyed their stay and some of them gossiped, some of them watched TV and many of them were sitting in different places of our house. At the dinner time, we served the dinner to the guests. The social gathering was the most important part of the party and people seemed like enjoyed each other’s company. At around 9: 00 pm people started leaving our home and once again we greeted then and thanked for their time and lively participation.   Tips for answering this Cue Card topic: For this cue card topic, you can talk about any occasion when a number of people (guests) came to your house to participate the celebration. It can be a birthday celebration of any of your family member, a party thrown by you or your parents, a religious festival, a social gathering for a newborn. Since the cue card is about a celebration when the guests came to your place, avoid circumstances like a funeral, social visit to see a sick member of the family as these are not considered as the celebration. First, say the occasion and if this is not a very common occasion like birthday party, give some details of it. Then say when it was, why this celebration was held, where it was celebrated, your idea of the celebration and say your part of the arrangement of the celebration. After that give details of the guests who came at the celebration. Mention in brief what they do, how you greeted them, what was their observation of the celebration etc. Finally, you need to give details of the celebration and in this part, you can give the details of the celebration from a different perspective than the things you have already said. For instance, in this part, you can mention why your family planned to celebrate it, how you selected the guests, what type of invitation you sent, and a brief detail of the whole celebration. Similar Cue Card topics: 1.     Describe a celebration you recently had. 2.     Describe a family celebration you recently had. 3.     Describe your idea of organising a party. 4.     Describe a gathering your recently enjoyed. 5.     Describe your participation in a family party.
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Describe
a
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celebration
when a number of
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guests
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came
to your
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place
. You should say: When it was What you did Who
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came
and
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give
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details
of the
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celebration
. Model Answer:

Thank you
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very
much for the
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topic
. There are
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many
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occasions
that I remember when
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people
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came
to our
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houses
and among them I would like to talk about my younger
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sister’s
birthday
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occasion
when more than 50
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guests
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came
to our
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house
.

It was two years ago and I went to my home
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time
three days
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before
my
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sister’s
birthday to celebrate the
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occasion
. It was the mid-January and I had
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some
day offs at that
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time
. I planned to stay for a week there.
Initially
, my
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thought
was that the birthday would be
strictly
a
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family
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celebration
and no other
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guests
would be present.
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But
after I reach home, I learned that
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many
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people
have
been invited
and my
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family
is arranging a
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big
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party
for the birthday occasion.

I went to a nearby shop to
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buy
a gift for my
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sister
as
well
as any last moment shopping needed for the
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party
. I
also
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bought
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some
fancy items to decorate the
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house
and
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bought
a new dress for my
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sister
.
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I
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helped
my father on
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some of the
pending tasks regarding the
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party
and went to invite 3-4 of my friends. On the
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celebration
day, I
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greeted
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many
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guests
, made sure that they have
been offered
relaxing
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places
to sit and talked to
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many
of them. When my
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sister
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cut
the birthday cake, I took lots of photos and
finally
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helped
my
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family
members to take care of the guests.

More than 50
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people
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came
to the
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party
including
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some
of our relatives,
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neighbours
, my
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sister’s
friends and 2-3 of my friends.
Amazingly
I found
If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?
some of the
relatives who I have not met for a long.

The feast for the birthday
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celebration
was in the evening and
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guests
was supposed
to have dinner at our home. The
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guest
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started
coming from the early
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evening and
we
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greeted
them. After 1 hour or
so
, my
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sister
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cut
the
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cake and
we
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enjoyed
a light food then. The
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guests
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enjoyed
their stay and
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some
of them gossiped,
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some
of them
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watched
TV and
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many
of them were sitting in
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different
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places
of our
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house
. At the dinner
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time
, we served the dinner to the
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guests
. The social gathering was the most
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important
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part
of the
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party
and
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people
seemed like
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enjoyed
each other’s
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company
. At around 9: 00 pm
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people
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started
leaving our home and once again we
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greeted
then and thanked for their
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time
and lively participation.
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Tips for answering this
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Cue
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Card
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topic
: For this
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cue
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card
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topic
, you can talk about any
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occasion
when a number of
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people
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(guests)
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came
to your
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house
to participate the
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celebration
. It can be a birthday
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celebration
Consider simply using "of" instead.
of any of
your
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family
member, a
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party
thrown by you or your parents, a religious festival, a social gathering for a newborn. Since the
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cue
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card
is about a
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celebration
when the
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guests
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came
to your
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place
, avoid circumstances like a funeral, social visit to
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see
a sick member of the
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family
as these are not considered as the celebration.

First
, say the
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occasion
and if this is not a
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very
common
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occasion
like birthday
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party
,
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give
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some
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details
of it. Then say when it was, why this
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celebration
was held
, where it
was celebrated
, your
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idea
of the
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celebration
and say your
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part
of the arrangement of the
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celebration
.
“After” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
After
that
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give
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details
of the
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guests
who
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came
at the
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celebration
. Mention
in brief
what they do, how you
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greeted
them, what was their observation of the
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celebration
etc.

Finally
, you need to
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give
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details
of the
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celebration
and in this
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part
, you can
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give
the
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details
of the
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celebration
from a
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different
perspective than the things you have already said.
For instance
, in this
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part
, you can mention why your
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family
planned to celebrate it, how you selected the
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guests
, what type of invitation you
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sent
, and a brief
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detail
of the whole celebration.

Similar
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topics: 1
.
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Describe
a
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celebration
you recently had.

2.
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Describe
a
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family
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celebration
you recently had.

3.
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Describe
your
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idea
of
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organising
a
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party. 4
.
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Describe
a gathering your recently
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enjoyed. 5
.
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Describe
your participation in a
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family
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party
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
126Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
19Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a celebration when a number of guests came to your place. v. 1

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  American English
14 paragraphs
734 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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