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Describe an item you would buy if you receive a large amount of money. v.1

Describe an item you would buy if you receive a large amount of money. v. 1
Describe an item you would buy if you receive a large amount of money. You should say: What is it How much it would cost you How you would use it and explain why you would buy it.   Model Answer 1: I am pretty sure if I get a large amount of money right now, I will buy a nice car. The car would be Ford Fusion series latest car with all the latest technology that a car can offer. This would cost around 45 thousand USD and would require some additional cost to own and maintain it. I would mostly use it to go to places I regularly go and the car would give me the freedom to choose my own schedule and my dependency on the local buses. We have a family car that 7-8 persons of our family share and I often have to take a local bus to reach my university/ work place. Since I don’t have a car, I often discard the idea of visiting a friend or relative who stays a long away from our house. My own car would facilitate me to visit these places and travel to my workplace/ university easily and in less time. I often dream of having a car and somehow I have a weakness of purchasing a car from Ford brand. The fusion series cars are really good looking and come with the latest technology a car can offer. So, I will buy this car if I can manage the amount it would require or let’s say I get the amount all of a sudden. Sample Answer 2: I would like to buy a sports car if I receive a large amount of money. In fact, this is a kind of dream to me to have such a sports car with a great speed. Besides, the muscular body and performance of the car are also striking. This is a great topic for discussion and I personally thank you for asking the question to me. I will describe the issue in brief now. Audi is one of the most prominent and muscular brands in the arena of the motor vehicle. This is the finest and gorgeous vehicle I have ever seen in my life. The sports car manufactured by this brand are also strong and performs much better than any other sports car. So, I want to buy Audi R8 2015. This is a stunning sports car with a good number of facilities. Besides, the outlook of the car is also eye catching and the driving experience is extraordinary. This is more expensive than most other sports car. The price range of the car is around $134, 800 to $187, 800. It mostly depends on the configuration of the car. But you can have the chance to get the car at a lower cost if you get the second-hand car. I think this is unwise to get a used car because most of the times the sellers sell such cars for defects or faults. They may not show you the faults but when you will come to know about the defects, it would be difficult for you to drive the car anymore. Hence, it should be considered before purchasing the car. Besides, there are some people who also try to get the cars in instalment which is not also a great issue to consider. If you fail to provide the instalment amount anytime for uncertain reasons, it may bring a disaster for you. Using a sports car is really difficult in the usual roads. Most of the time, the drivers of the sports car cannot drive smoothly in the busy streets. In fact, the cars are manufactured to ply on the race tracks instead of the usual streets. Sometimes, the drivers feel perplexed to drive the sports car. They generate a great speed within a second and this is the greatest weakness of the cars while they are on the ordinary streets. So, I have a plan to drive the car in some places where would be no or fewer crowds. This is a bit trouble to sort out such a location here in Canada. Besides, I can drive the car slowly in the streets. But in that case, I have to be very careful about the other vehicles around me. Controlling the speed with a sports car is a difficult task indeed. I am to complete my graduation here and been using a Ford for the last couple of years to move inside the city. My car has become old enough to be sold at any junkyard. Its performance is also degrading gradually. In fact, I bought the car from a used car gallery. But it has served me very well comparing its price. Now, I am feeling the necessity of another car, and I have a plan to buy a brand new one. Price is a notable fact here but if I wait or get a large amount of money, it becomes easier for me to get the car.   Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as well: Describe something you want to buy in the future. Describe a gift you wish to receive. Describe an expensive gift you gave to someone. Describe a car you want to purchase. Describe something you want to win.
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Describe
an item you would
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buy
if you receive a
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large
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amount
of
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money
. You should say: What is it How much it would
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cost
you How you would
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use
it and
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explain
why you would
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buy
it.
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Model Answer 1:

I am pretty sure if I
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get
a
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large
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amount
of
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money
right
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now
, I will
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buy
a nice
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car
. The
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car
would be Ford Fusion series
A determiner is probably missing here: "the latest".
latest
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car
with all the latest technology that a
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car
can offer.

This would
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cost
around 45 thousand USD and would require
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some
additional
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cost
to
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own
and maintain it. I would
mostly
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use
it to go to
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places
I
regularly
go and the
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car
would give me the freedom to choose my
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own
schedule and my dependency on the local buses. We have a family
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car
that 7-8 persons of our family share and I
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often
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have to
take a local bus to reach my university/ work
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place
. Since I don’t have a
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car
, I
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often
discard the
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idea
of visiting a friend or relative who stays a long away from our
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house
. My
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own
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car
would facilitate me to visit these
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places
and travel to my workplace/ university
easily
and in less time. I
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often
dream of having a
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car
and somehow I have a weakness of purchasing a
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car
from Ford
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brand
. The fusion series
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cars
are
really
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good looking
and
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come
with the latest technology a
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car
can offer.
So
, I will
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buy
this
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car
if I can manage the
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amount
it would require or
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let
’s say I
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get
the
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amount
all of a sudden. Sample Answer 2:

I would like to
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buy
a
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sports
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car
if I receive a
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large
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amount
of
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money
. In
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fact
, this is a kind of dream to me to have such a
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sports
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car
with a
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great
speed.
Besides
, the muscular body and performance of the
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car
are
also
striking. This is a
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great
topic for discussion and I
personally
thank you for
Consider using "asking" instead.
asking the question
to me. I will
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describe
the issue
in brief
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now
.

Audi is one of the most prominent and muscular
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brands
in the arena of the motor vehicle. This is the finest and gorgeous vehicle I have ever
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seen
in my life. The
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sports
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car
manufactured by this
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brand
are
also
strong and performs much better than any other
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sports
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car
.
So
, I
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want
to
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buy
Audi R8 2015. This is a stunning
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sports
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car
with a
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good
number of facilities.
Besides
, the outlook of the
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car
is
also
eye catching and the driving experience is extraordinary.

This is more expensive than most other
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sports
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car
. The price range of the
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car
is around $134, 800 to $187, 800. It
mostly
depends on the configuration of the
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car
.
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But
you can have the chance to
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get
the
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car
at a lower
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cost
if you
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get
the second-hand
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car
. I
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think
this is unwise to
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get
a
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used
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car
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because
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most of the times
the sellers sell such
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cars
for defects or faults. They may not
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show
you the faults
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but
when you will
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come
to know about the defects, it would be difficult for you to
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drive
the
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car
anymore.
Hence
, it should
be considered
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before
purchasing the
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car
.
Besides
, there are
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some
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people
who
also
try to
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get
the
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cars
in
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instalment
which is not
also
a
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great
issue to consider. If you fail to provide the
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instalment
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amount
anytime for uncertain reasons, it may bring a disaster for you.

Using a
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sports
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car
is
really
difficult in the usual roads. Most of the time, the drivers of the
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sports
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car
cannot
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drive
smoothly
in the busy
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streets
. In
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fact
, the
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cars
are manufactured
to
ply
on the race
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tracks
instead
of the usual
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streets
.
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Sometimes
, the drivers feel perplexed to
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drive
the
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sports
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car
. They generate a
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great
speed within a second and this is the greatest weakness of the
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cars
while they are on the ordinary
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streets
.
So
, I have a plan to
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drive
the
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car
in
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some
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places
where would be
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no
or fewer crowds. This is a
It seems that there's a missing preposition after ''.
bit
trouble to sort out such a location here in Canada.
Besides
, I can
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drive
the
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car
slowly
in the
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streets
.
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But
in that case
, I
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have to
be
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very
careful about the other vehicles around me. Controlling the speed with a
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sports
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car
is a difficult task
indeed
.

I am to complete my graduation here and been using a Ford for the last couple of years to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
inside the city. My
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car
has become
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old
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enough
to
be sold
at any junkyard. Its performance is
also
degrading
gradually
. In
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fact
, I
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bought
the
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car
from a
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used
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car
gallery.
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But
it has served me
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very
well
comparing its price.
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Now
, I am feeling the necessity of another
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car
, and I have a plan to
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buy
a
'brand new' seems to be a compound adjective in front of a noun. Use a hyphen: "brand-new".
brand new
one. Price is a notable
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fact
here
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but
if I wait or
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get
a
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large
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amount
of
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money
, it becomes easier for me to
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get
the
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car
.
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Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as
well
:
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Describe
something you
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
want
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buy
in the future.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Describe
a gift you wish to receive.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Describe
an expensive gift you gave to someone.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
you
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want
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
something you
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
want
to win.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
117Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe an item you would buy if you receive a large amount of money. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
8 paragraphs
905 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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