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Describe an interesting historic place. v.2

Describe an interesting historic place. v. 2
Describe an interesting historic place. You should say: what it is where it is located what you can see or do there now and explain why this historic place is so interesting.   Model Answer 1: Historical places always intrigue me, as they almost always carry some kinds of special memories and messages in order to help us understand and respect the people of different eras, which significantly shape up our world one way or another. Today, I would like to talk about one such historical place which probably holds more significance in our part of the world called “India” than any other places because of its devastating political, economic and geographical effects. The name of this historical place is called “Palashi”, anglicised as Plassey, which is located in Nadia district in the Indian state of “West Bengal”. It is particularly well known due to the Battle of Plassey which was fought in June 1757, between the private army of the British East India Company and the army of the last independent king of the then undivided Bengal called Nawab Siraj Ud Daulah. By the way, the name “Palashi”, the name of a village on the bank of a river called “Hooghly”, is derived from the Bengali word for a red-flowered tree named “Pôlash” (but “Butea” in English”).   Anyway, this is the place which witnessed the monumental betrayal of a Bengali army general called “Mir Jafar Ali Khan”, working under king Siraj Ud Daulah, which eventually led to the defeat of a 50000 strong army men of the kingdom of Bengal against an army of only 3000 soldiers, led by an English Lieutenant-general called Robert Clive. By visiting this great historical place, one can see the monument, commonly known as “Palashi” Monument, which is marked with shrines, obelisks and memorials to the fallen generals and soldiers of Siraj Ud-Daulah, who fought to their deaths to save their last independent king. Anyway, this is a very significant and interesting historical place, mainly because it was from the war victory of this place that the British were able to establish their reign all over the Indian subcontinent slowly but surely. Besides, this place also provides a glimpse of a very glorious and rich past of a nation which still hasn’t fully recovered from the setback of a devastating defeat more than 250 years ago.   Model Answer 2: Machu Picchu in southern Peru is a very interesting historic place and I have a great interest in his historic place. Though I have not visited this place in person, I would definitely love to be there someday. I mostly learned about this place from one of my friends who visited there and from TV, internet and newspapers. Machu Picchu is located in Machupicchu District in southern Peru and it is historically connected with the 15th-century Inca civilisation. It is located in 2, 430 meters or around 7, 970 feet area above the sea level. This place lies on top of a mountain and is a very popular destination for tourist all around the world. This place is referred to as the "Lost City of the Incas" and it was named as one of the 7 wonders of the world in 2007. UNESCO nominated it as a world heritage in the year 1983. This historic place was built as an estate for the Pachacuti emperor of the Inca civilisation in around 1450 and is considered as the most significant and familiar icon of the Inca civilisation. A tourist can see the finest work of the Inca civilisation there and can learn many things about this civilisation. Apart from the ruins and cultural icons, one can enjoy the great beauty surrounding this place. The sunset time is awesome and eye-witnessing the hills is something unforgettable. The Inca bridge is interesting to hike, and the scattered stones in the place is a different experience one can get. The Condor, Steps, Falling stairs, Temples, Sacred Rock, Llamas and other Animals, Inca Trail will all blow your mind and would remind you that you are visiting one of the 7 wonders of the world. This is an interesting place due to the vast area and iconic meaning of the Inca civilisation. There is a lot to see, a lot to do and enjoy and being at one of the 7 wonders of the world is something a visitor will never forget. This place takes us to the past, in the time when Inca nation was there and taught us how advanced they were as they have been able to build such a place with virtually no technological advancement of modern technology.
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historic
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place
. You should say: what it is where it is
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located
what you can
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see
or do there
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now
and
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explain
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Model Answer 1:
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places
always intrigue me, as they almost always carry
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some
kinds of special memories and messages in order to
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help
us understand and respect the
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people
of
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different
eras, which
significantly
shape up our
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world
one way or another.
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Today
, I would like to talk about one such
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historical
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place
which
probably
holds more significance in our part of the
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world
called “India” than any other
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places
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because
of its devastating political, economic and geographical effects.

The name of this
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historical
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place
is called
“
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Palashi
”,
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anglicised
as
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Plassey
, which is
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located
in Nadia district in the Indian state of “West Bengal”. It is
particularly
well
known due to the Battle of
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Plassey
which
was fought
in June 1757, between the private
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army
of the British East India
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Company
and the
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army
of the last independent king of the then undivided Bengal called
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Nawab
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Siraj
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Ud
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Daulah
.

By the way, the name “
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Palashi
”, the name of a village on the bank of a river called “
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Hooghly
”,
is derived
from the Bengali word for a red-flowered tree named “
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Pôlash
” (
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but
“
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Butea
” in English”).
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Anyway
, this is the
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place
which witnessed the monumental betrayal of a Bengali
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army
general called “Mir
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Jafar
Ali Khan”, working under king
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Siraj
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Ud
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Daulah
, which
eventually
led to the defeat of a 50000 strong
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army
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men
of the kingdom of Bengal against an
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army
of
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only
3000 soldiers, led by an English Lieutenant-general called Robert Clive. By visiting this great
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historical
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place
, one can
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see
the monument,
commonly
known as “
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Palashi
” Monument, which
is marked
with shrines, obelisks and memorials to the fallen generals and soldiers of
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Siraj
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Ud-Daulah
, who fought to their deaths to save their last independent king.

Anyway
, this is a
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very
significant and
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interesting
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historical
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place
,
mainly
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because
it was from the war victory of this
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place
that the British were able to establish their reign all over the Indian subcontinent
slowly
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but
surely
.
Besides
, this
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place
also
provides a glimpse of a
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very
glorious and rich past of a nation which
still
hasn’t
fully
recovered from the setback of a devastating defeat more than 250 years ago.
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Model Answer 2: Machu Picchu in southern Peru is a
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very
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interesting
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historic
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place
and I have a great interest in his
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historic
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place
. Though I have not visited this
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place
in person, I would definitely
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love
to be there someday. I
mostly
learned about this
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place
from one of my friends who visited there and from TV, internet and newspapers.

Machu Picchu is
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located
in
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Machupicchu
District in southern Peru and it is
historically
connected with the 15th-century Inca
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civilisation
. It is
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located
in 2, 430 meters or around 7,
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970 feet
area above the sea level. This
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place
lies on top of a mountain and is a
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very
popular destination for tourist all around the
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world
. This
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place
is referred
to as the
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"
Lost City of the Incas
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"
and it
was named
as one of the 7 wonders of the
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world
in 2007. UNESCO nominated it as a
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world
heritage in the year 1983.

This
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historic
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place
was built
as an estate for the
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Pachacuti
emperor of the Inca
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civilisation
in around 1450 and
is considered
as the most significant and familiar icon of the Inca
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civilisation
.

A tourist can
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see
the finest work of the Inca
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civilisation
there and can learn
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many
things about this
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civilisation
. Apart from the ruins and cultural icons, one can enjoy the great beauty surrounding this
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place
. The sunset time is awesome and eye-witnessing the hills is something unforgettable. The Inca bridge is
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interesting
to hike, and the scattered stones in the
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place
is a
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different
experience one can
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get
.
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The
Condor, Steps, Falling stairs, Temples, Sacred Rock, Llamas and other Animals, Inca Trail will all blow your mind and would remind you that you are visiting one of the 7 wonders of the world.

This is an
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interesting
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place
due to the vast area and iconic meaning of the Inca
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civilisation
. There is a lot to
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see
, a lot to do and enjoy and being at one of the 7 wonders of the
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world
is something a visitor will never forget. This
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place
takes us to the past, in the time when Inca nation was there and taught us how advanced they were as they have been able to build such a
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place
with
virtually
no technological advancement of modern technology.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
54Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
34Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe an interesting historic place. v. 2

Speaking
  American English
8 paragraphs
774 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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