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Describe an important year in your life. v.1

Describe an important year in your life. v. 1
Describe an important year in your life. You should say: when it was what happened in this year how old you were then and explain why it is an important year in your life. Sample Answer 1: Well, picking an important year was bit header as so many important events took place in different years in my life. However, out of those, I would like to talk about the year 2002 which I consider as one of the most important years in my life. I went to visit my uncle’s house in the year 2000 and stayed there about three weeks. During my visit, I learned a lesson that has changed my perspective of my life and that was probably the most significant turning point in my life. I was 16 years old then. While staying there I went to the sea beach, which was about 5 kilometres away from my uncle’s house, with one of my cousins. We went there without informing our guardians and thought that we would return before the dusk without anyone noticing. While swimming in the sea water, we were enjoying a lot and the big tides of the sea made our experience more enthralling. All of a sudden I noticed that the sands below my feet were no longer presents and at the same time a giant tide hit me. I was quite afraid and was again hit by a giant tide from the reverse direction. That tide took me a long away from the beach and I was really frightened. I am a good swimmer but at that very moment my body froze in terror and I could not move my muscle. I could see the anxious eyes of distant people and for the first time in life I thought that I was going to die. That was an experience I can’t express in words. I had no idea about the time and many things from my childhood were flashing back in my mind. I felt that I was drowning even after my desperate try to survive. Things were becoming blurred and I think I started losing my conscious.      I don’t know how long I had been in this state. All of a sudden I felt like some force was pulling me towards him and the next thing I saw were some curious eyes strangely looking at me. I was actually rescued by some local fishermen who were fishing nearby. This event changed me dramatically. I started realising the reality of life and how fragile our life could be. It was a near death experience that taught me the importance of life, our relationship, the necessity of being humble, prudent, responsible and all other good things an ideal human being should possess. This year had a great influence to help me become who I really am and how I feel about being alive. This is a lesson we experience probably once in a lifetime and from that perspective, the year 2000 is very important to me.
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Describe
an
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in your
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life
. You should say: when it was what happened in this
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year
how
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old
you were then and
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explain
why it is an
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important
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year
in your
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life
. Sample Answer 1:

Well
, picking an
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important
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year
was
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bit
header as
so
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many
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important
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events
took place in
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different
years in my
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life
.
However
, out of those, I would like to talk about the
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year
2002 which I consider as one of the most
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important
years in my
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life
. I went to visit my uncle’s
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house
in the
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year
2000 and stayed there about three weeks. During my visit, I learned a lesson that has
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changed
my perspective of my
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life
and that was
probably
the most significant turning point in my
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life
. I was 16 years
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old
then. While staying there I went to the sea beach, which was about 5
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kilometres
away from my uncle’s
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house
, with one of my cousins. We went there without informing our guardians and
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thought
that we would return
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before
the dusk without anyone noticing. While swimming in the sea water, we were enjoying a lot and the
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big
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tides
of the sea made our
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experience
more enthralling. All of a sudden I noticed that the sands below my feet were no longer presents and at the same time a giant
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tide
hit me. I was quite afraid and was again hit by a giant
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tide
from the reverse direction. That
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tide
took me a long away from the
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beach and
I was
really
frightened. I am a
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good
swimmer
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but
at that
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very
moment my body froze in terror and I could not
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move
my muscle. I could
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see
the anxious eyes of distant
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people
and for the
first
time in
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life
I
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thought
that I was going to
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die
. That was an
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experience
I can’t express in words. I had no
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idea
about the time and
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many
things from my childhood were flashing back in my mind. I felt that I was drowning even after my desperate try to survive. Things were becoming blurred and I
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think
I
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started
losing my conscious.
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I don’t know how long I had been in this state. All of a sudden I felt like
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some
force was pulling me towards him and the
next
thing I
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saw
were
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some
curious eyes
strangely
looking at me. I was
actually
rescued by
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some
local fishermen who were fishing nearby. This
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event
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changed
me
dramatically
. I
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started
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realising
the reality of
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life
and how fragile our
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life
could be. It was a near death
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experience
that taught me the importance of
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life
, our relationship, the necessity of being humble, prudent, responsible and all other
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good
things an ideal human being should possess. This
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year
had a great influence to
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help
me become who I
really
am and how I feel about being alive. This is a lesson we
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experience
probably
once in a lifetime and from that perspective, the
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year
2000 is
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very
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important
to me.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe an important year in your life. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
2 paragraphs
505 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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