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Describe something that you shared with others (or another person). v.1

Describe something that you shared with others (or another person). v. 1
Describe something that you shared with others (or another person). You should say: what you shared when you shared it who you shared it with and explain why you shared it and how you felt when you shared it. Sample Answer 1: Thank you very much for this wonderful topic. I believe that human is a social being and we need to share so many things with our relatives, friends and unknown persons in different occasions. I will talk about a time when I shared my room with one of my cousins who suddenly visited our house a few months ago. I have my personal room where I usually live along. We have two guests room and that’s why I have never shared my room with anyone who stays our house at night. A few months ago when my cousin came to visit our home, we were renovating our second floor and that’s why we had no spare room for the guests. My cousin, Stephen, came to our town all of a sudden and informed us that he would need to stay in our town for a couple of days. He also informed that he is planning to stay in a hotel. My father insisted him to stay with us and I thought I could easily share my room with him for a couple of days. He was 2 years younger to me but we had a friendly relationship from our childhood. Stephen stayed two nights in our house and I shared my room, bed and bathroom with him so that he can stay in our house comfortably. We talked about our grandparents, other cousins, our works and future plans. I enjoyed his company and we had good times together. I am not habituated to share my very personal belongings and rooms with others, but sharing it with my one of the most favourite cousins was not a bad experience at all. In fact, during his stay, we had so many fun events that I invited him to visit our house again.
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Describe
something that you
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shared
with others (or another person). You should say: what you
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shared
when you
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shared
it who you
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shared
it with and
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explain
why you
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shared
it and how you felt when you
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shared
it. Sample Answer 1:

Thank you
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very
much for this wonderful topic. I believe that human is a social
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
being and
we need to share
so
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many
things with our relatives, friends and unknown persons in
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different
occasions. I will talk about a time when I
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shared
my
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room
with one of my
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cousins
who
suddenly
visited our
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house
a few months ago.
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I
have my personal
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room
where I
usually
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live
along. We have two guests
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room
and that’s why I have never
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shared
my
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room
with anyone who
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stays
our
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house
at night. A few months ago when my
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cousin
came to visit our home, we were renovating our second floor and that’s why we had no spare
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room
for the guests. My
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cousin
, Stephen, came to our town all of a sudden and informed us that he would need to
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stay
in our town for a couple of days. He
also
informed that he is planning to
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stay
in a hotel. My father insisted him to
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stay
with us and I
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thought
I could
easily
share my
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room
with him for a couple of days. He was 2 years younger to me
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but
we had a friendly relationship from our childhood. Stephen stayed two nights in our
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house
and I
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shared
my
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room
, bed and bathroom with him
so
that he can
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stay
in our
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house
comfortably
. We talked about our grandparents, other
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cousins
, our works and future plans. I enjoyed his
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company
and we had
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good
times together. I am not habituated to share my
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very
personal belongings and
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rooms
with others,
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but
sharing it with my one of the most
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favourite
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cousins
was not a
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bad
experience at all. In fact, during his
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stay
, we had
so
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many
fun
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events
that I invited him to visit our
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house
again.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe something that you shared with others (or another person). v. 1

Speaking
  American English
2 paragraphs
342 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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