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Describe a time when you stayed far away from your home. v.1

Describe a time when you stayed far away from your home. v. 1
Describe a time when you stayed far away from your home. You should say: when and where it was how long you stayed there why you stayed there and what you did there and explain how you felt about staying far away from home. Sample Answer 1: Till I turned to 16, I can’t recall any even when I stayed far away from home alone. Though I visited some of my relatives who stayed far away from our living place, in all those occasions either of my parents or both of them were with me. For this cue card topic, I will talk about an event when I stayed far away from my home, where I went, how long I stayed there and my feelings about staying far away from home. I went to Denmark when I was 19 years old as part of a tour that our college arranged. That was a 7-day tour to explore a different country. I went to Denmark and stayed in a hotel that our college booked for us. As I remember I stayed there for about 7 days and that was indeed my first stay in a place quite far away from my home. The day we reached there, I was quite fascinated to be in a different country. We reached there in the evening and checked in a hotel. I got a small single room where I stayed for 4 days. After we move to Odense in South Denmark, we stayed in a different hotel but this time, I had to share the room with one of my classmates and luckily the room was large enough for two of us to share. We did numerous things during our stay including visiting museums, camping, completing an assignment, visiting two other colleges in Denmark and meeting with the students there and visiting different historically significant places in Denmark. Some of the experiences, including dining, visiting local markets and meeting local people were some distinctive experiences for me. I would say I was very excited about the whole tour and everything we did and participated in were very enthralling. This was the first time I stayed so long in a distant place without any family members. I called my parents almost every day and I missed them quite often. They were worried about me and called me now and then to learn what I was doing and whether everything was okay or not. I missed my own room, my little sister and parents but that did not make me homesick due to the stirring experience and time I was having. I did not feel how much I missed my house, parents and little sister until I returned home, as, seeing all of them and getting back to my own house gave me a unique feeling I never felt before. It was like getting back to a place and people I love most.
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a
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when you
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far
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away
from your home. You should say: when and where it was how long you
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stayed
there why you
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stayed
there and what you did there and
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explain
how you felt about staying
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far
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away
from home. Sample Answer 1:

Till I turned to 16, I can’t recall any even when I
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stayed
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far
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away
from home alone. Though I visited
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some
of my relatives who
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stayed
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far
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away
from our living
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place
, in all those occasions either of my
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parents
or both of them were with me. For this cue card topic, I will talk about an
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event
when I
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stayed
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far
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away
from my home, where I went, how long I
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stayed
there and my feelings about staying
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far
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away
from home. I went to Denmark when I was 19 years
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old
as part of a tour that our college arranged. That was a 7-day tour to explore a
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different
country. I went to Denmark and
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stayed
in a hotel that our college booked for us. As I remember I
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stayed
there for about 7 days and that was
indeed
my
first
stay in a
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place
quite
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far
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away
from my home. The day we reached there, I was quite fascinated to be in a
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different
country. We reached there in the evening and
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checked
in a hotel. I
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got
a
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small
single
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room
where I
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stayed
for 4 days. After we
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move
to
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Odense
in South Denmark, we
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stayed
in a
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different
hotel
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but
this
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time
, I had to share the
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room
with one of my classmates and luckily the
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room
was large
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enough
for two of us to share. We did numerous things during our stay including visiting museums, camping, completing an assignment, visiting two other colleges in Denmark and meeting with the students there and visiting
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different
historically
significant
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places
in Denmark.
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Some of the
experiences, including dining, visiting local markets and meeting local
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people
were
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some
distinctive experiences for me. I would say I was
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very
excited about the whole tour and everything we did and participated in were
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very
enthralling. This was the
first
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time
I
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so
long in a distant
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place
without any family members. I called my
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parents
almost every day and I missed them quite
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often
. They
were worried
about me and called me
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now
and then to learn what I was doing and whether everything was okay or not. I missed my
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own
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room
, my
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little
sister and
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parents
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but
that did not
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make
me homesick due to the stirring experience and
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time
I was having. I did not feel how much I missed my
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house
,
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parents
and
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little
sister until I returned home, as, seeing all of them and getting back to my
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own
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house
gave me a unique feeling I never felt
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before
. It was like getting back to a
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place
and
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people
I
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love
most.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
47Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a time when you stayed far away from your home. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
2 paragraphs
487 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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