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Describe an important social change in your country. v.1

Describe an important social change in your country. v. 1
Describe an important social change in your country. You should say: what it was how it happened how long it took explain the effect it has had on people in your country. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ] Model Answer 1: I would like to take the chance to thank you first for this excellent topic. It is indeed a great subject to talk about.   Our society evolves and changes over time. Some changes are so prolific that it ensures a better life for all, and sometimes small changes impact our society beyond our expectation. Such an important change in our country is women's participation in higher education.   Looking back to the past century, women were confined at home and it was beyond our imagination that they could be equally adept as men and participate to build our society. It was a curse not only for the females but also for the whole society to consider that women should only take care of household tasks and produce babies each year -what a shame. Some education, mostly primary schooling, were allowed for females but parents considered higher education for the female is a waste of time and money. As a result, our universities had a very limited number of female students. The change did not happen overnight and thanks to some fearless female social activists who fought for their rights to education. Their lifelong struggle and motivational activities inspired a thousand others - both females and progressive males. Besides, the government helped a lot to fight the social dogma and old belief, and a collaborative effort from the government, female social activists, writers, scientists, politicians and most importantly ordinary people have changed the very social norm of not sending females to universities. The whole process took more than six decades or so in my country. But it is obvious that the human history of restricting women from education and other basic rights goes more than a few centuries.    We now have an almost equal number of female and male pupils and scholars in our universities. In some majors, females even exceed the number of their male counterparts. As a result, our society has a great number of female doctors, researchers, executives, politicians, artists, advocates, teachers, security personnel and so on. This is a great sign of social equality and parity. It ensures better social and economic developments and the GDP in recent years only denote how important a change it was for us. Women empowerment has raised awareness, has given women a "strong voice" and eliminated many discriminations we have had in our society. Model Answer 2: Our societies around us are always changing of which we tend to welcome some while, with some other changes, we become really worried as they tend to affect all of us very negatively. Drug addiction, YABA addiction more precisely, is such a “dreadful change”, which we could certainly do away with, that has poisoned my country for the last 2 decades or so. The “menace of yaba” began when the “separatist groups” in Myanmar (formerly called “Burma”) started to produce this “dreadful drug” called yaba, a combination of methamphetamine (a powerful and addictive stimulant) and caffeine, in order to raise their funds. Bangladesh, being a bordering country with Myanmar, with its huge unemployed youth and “newly-introduced” affluent societies, naturally became a magnet for this “poisonous stimulant”. Being manufactured at more than 37 factories inside Myanmar, this deadly “anti-depressant” drug has affected more than 7 million people in my country. This “yaba” drug menace was under control of some sort up until 2006, but standing in 2019, the situation has spiralled out of control since then, as the government has finally decided to crack down on drug offences, involving yaba, by declaring “death penalty”. The Implications of this yaba drug abuse are just too many to count, having created havoc in the lives of millions and their families in terms of serious degradation in health and moral values over the last two decades. In fact, many families in my country are suffering from a terrible “social paranoia” whereby they are constantly worried about their kids being involved in using “yaba”. In many cases, because of the extreme dependence on “yaba”, the drug addicts have indulged in many immoral and criminal activities, creating some serious “social unrest and despair” in my country. Even incidents like killing one’s own “parents” (both father and mother) by young children have taken place in my country to satisfy their demands for “yaba”.   And the list goes on. If we don’t become really serious about this “yaba menace”, the chances are that a large portion of our generation of “youth” in my country would get completely lost and wasted very much in detriment to our societies and country as a whole.
Describe
an
important
social
change
in your
country
. You should say: what it was how it happened how long it took
explain
the effect it has had on
people
in your
country
. [You will
have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
think
about what you are going to say. You can
make
some
notes to
help
you if you wish.
]


Model Answer 1: I would like to take the chance to thank you
first
for this excellent topic. It is
indeed
a great subject to talk about.
 
Our
society
evolves and
changes
over time.
Some
changes
are
so
prolific that it ensures a better life for all, and
sometimes
small
changes
impact our
society
beyond our expectation. Such an
important
change
in our
country
is women's participation in higher
education
.
 
Looking back to the past century,
women
were confined
at home and it was beyond our imagination that they could be
equally
adept as
men
and participate to build our
society
. It was a curse not
only
for the
females
but
also
for the whole
society
to consider that
women
should
only
take care of household tasks and produce babies each year -what a shame.
Some
education
,
mostly
primary schooling, were
allowed
for
females
but
parents considered higher
education
for the
female
is a waste of time and money.
As a result
, our universities had a
very
limited
number
of
female
students. The
change
did not happen overnight and thanks to
some
fearless
female
social
activists who fought for their rights to
education
. Their lifelong struggle and motivational activities inspired a thousand others
-
both
females
and progressive males.
Besides
, the
government
helped
a lot to fight the
social
dogma and
old
belief, and a collaborative effort from the
government
,
female
social
activists, writers, scientists, politicians and most
importantly
ordinary
people
have
changed
the
very
social
norm of not sending
females
to universities. The whole process took more than six decades or
so
in my
country
.
But
it is obvious that the human history of restricting
women
from
education
and other basic rights goes more than a few centuries.
  
We
now
have an almost equal
number
of
female
and male pupils and scholars in our universities. In
some
majors,
females
even exceed the
number
of their male counterparts.
As a result
, our
society
has a great
number
of
female
doctors, researchers, executives, politicians, artists, advocates, teachers, security personnel and
so
on. This is a great
sign
of
social
equality and parity. It ensures better
social
and economic developments and the GDP in recent years
only
denote how
important
a
change
it was for us.
Women
empowerment has raised awareness, has
given
women
a
"
strong voice
"
and eliminated
many
discriminations we have had in our society.

Model Answer 2: Our
societies
around us are always changing of which we tend to welcome
some
while, with
some
other
changes
, we become
really
worried as they tend to affect all of us
very
negatively
.
Drug
addiction,
YABA
addiction more
precisely
, is such a “dreadful
change”
, which we could
certainly
do away with, that has poisoned my
country
for the last 2 decades or
so
.

The “menace of
yaba
” began when the “separatist groups” in Myanmar (
formerly
called “Burma”)
started
to produce this “dreadful
drug”
called
yaba
, a combination of methamphetamine (a powerful and addictive stimulant) and caffeine, in order to raise their funds. Bangladesh, being a bordering
country
with Myanmar, with its huge unemployed youth and “
newly
-introduced” affluent
societies
,
naturally
became a magnet for this “poisonous stimulant”.
Being manufactured
at more than 37 factories inside Myanmar, this deadly “anti-depressant”
drug
has
affected
more than 7 million
people
in my
country
. This “
yaba
drug
menace was under control of
some
sort
up until 2006,
but
standing in 2019, the situation has
spiralled
out of control since then, as the
government
has
finally
decided to crack down on
drug
offences
, involving
yaba
, by declaring “death penalty”.

The Implications of this
yaba
drug
abuse are
just
too
many
to count, having created havoc in the
lives
of millions and their families in terms of serious degradation in health and moral values over the last two decades. In fact,
many
families in my
country
are suffering from a terrible
“social
paranoia” whereby they are
constantly
worried about their kids
being involved
in using “
yaba
”. In
many
cases,
because
of the extreme dependence on “
yaba
”, the
drug
addicts have indulged in
many
immoral and criminal activities, creating
some
serious
“social
unrest and despair” in my
country
. Even incidents like killing one’s
own
“parents” (both father and mother) by young children have taken place in my
country
to satisfy their demands for “
yaba
”.
 
And the list goes on.

If we don’t become
really
serious about this “
yaba
menace”, the chances are that a large portion of our generation of “youth” in my
country
would
get
completely lost and wasted
very
much in detriment to our
societies
and
country
as a whole.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
70Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
21Mistakes

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