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Describe an aspect of modern society that you dislike. v.1

Describe an aspect of modern society that you dislike. v. 1
Describe an aspect of modern society that you dislike. You should say: what it is why this is happening if this is an old issue and explain why you dislike it. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ] Model Answer 1: It would not be an exaggeration to say that modern society is built by the young, is for the young, and doesn't give much consideration to the old. This is an aspect of modern society that I really abhor. I am grateful to have been given the opportunity to talk about this. No doubt, modern society is dynamic and has eliminated many old dogmas and created better opportunities for its members. But it is a disturbing development that old people are no longer treated with the respect they really deserve and this issue is widespread. It seems like modern society has taught us to evaluate the worth of people by their status, earthly possessions, productivity and physical strength. Thus many young people behave as if our senior members are our reliability and this is a heinous aspect of modern society that I really dislike. I cannot say for sure why the youth of the modern era has started possessing this mentality, but I can realise that the slack of the family bond has surely fueled it up. We are trying to run so fast to reach our dreams that we even forget our parents. Thus many unfortunate parents, at their old age, are being forced to pine the lives away in an old folks’ home. Many young, regrettably, don't bother to care for their parents, and they are not expected to respect the elders. I can't be one hundred per cent sure if this is a fairly new development or a comparatively old one. One thing I am sure about that the past century was different. No doubt, the term ‘generation gap’ was always present but it doesn't mean older people used to be treated as a burden in the past. The modern society is certainly not kind to the old generation and I have acute reasons to loathe it. I can clearly visualise the degradation of the young generation for their lack of respect for the old. This is just the beginning and if this trend continues, they will become more selfish. Power and wealth are not the pillars of the development and I believe we should be grateful to our ancestors for everything they have done for us. And it is the time for the youth to repay and respect some of these contributions.   Sample Answer 2: We just love living in our modern society which has gone "all digital" in recent years. And why shouldn’t we? With so many LED screens, TVs, laptops, computers and smartphones around us the last thing, that perhaps ever crosses our minds, is that going “all digital” just might not be in the best interest of our physical and mental health after all. Well, yes, we are talking about a rather important but recent phenomenon of our society which has consumed us for the most part by “forcing” us to spend way more time in front of our digital media screens. This is happening primarily because digital technology has crept into our everyday lives and across all other activities in such a way that we just can’t seem to ignore our laptops or smartphones or stop interacting with our digital media, no matter how hard we try, because of the kinds of information, we consume, on a daily basis. In fact, the research shows that in today’s world, the average adult consumes five times more information every day than their counterpart 50 years ago. Another reason of this trend is the “instant gratification” where we are trying to provide ourselves with some kinds of “fake but easy way out” from our monotonous and tiring lives by constantly tweeting, texting, posting likes, sharing things, Googling and checking emails messages on social media networks for no obvious reasons. Needless to say, of course, I don’t exactly like this rather unhealthy “trend” of spending too much time in front of our digital media screens because of its negative impacts on our mental and physical health, especially when it comes to socializing with our families, relatives and friends. As a result, children are becoming less and less interested in making friends at their schools while parents are also becoming more and more distant from their children due to checking their smartphones and digital televisions like they just can’t get enough of it. In fact, going out to enjoy a lovely meal at a family restaurant or meeting friends to have a football match out in a field, instead of actually pushing the buttons of our smartphones and TV remotes, are becoming things of the past which certainly doesn’t augur well for our mental and physical health. And as a result, we are not only becoming more and more depressed and grumpy (sometimes, even violent) but also “obese” and “sleep deprived”, let alone the dangers of “digital eye strains” due to staring at the digital screens for a long period of time.   Anyway, our modern society has given us innumerable “benefits”, but it certainly helps to understand how much of those benefits we actually need.
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Describe
an aspect of
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modern
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society
that you dislike. You should say: what it is why this is happening if this is an
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old
issue and
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explain
why you dislike it. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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Model Answer 1: It would not be an exaggeration to say that
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modern
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society
is built
by the
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young
, is for the
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young
, and doesn't give much consideration to the
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old
. This is an aspect of
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modern
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society
that I
really
abhor. I am grateful to have been
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given
the opportunity to talk about this.

No doubt,
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modern
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society
is dynamic and has eliminated
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many
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old
dogmas and created better opportunities for its members.
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But
it is a disturbing development that
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old
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people
are no longer treated with the
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respect
they
really
deserve and this issue is widespread. It seems like
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modern
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society
has taught us to evaluate the worth of
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people
by their status,
earthly
possessions, productivity and
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physical
strength.
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Thus
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many
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young
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people
behave as if our senior members are our reliability and this is a heinous aspect of
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modern
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society
that I
really
dislike.

I cannot say for sure why the youth of the
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modern
era has
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started
possessing this mentality,
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but
I can
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realise
that the slack of the family bond has
surely
fueled it up. We are trying to run
so
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fast
to reach our dreams that we even forget our
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parents
.
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Thus
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many
unfortunate
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parents
, at their
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old
age, are
being forced
to pine the
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lives
away in an
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old
folks’ home.
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Many
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young
,
regrettably
, don't bother to care for their
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parents
, and they are not
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expected
to
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respect
the elders.

I can't be one hundred per cent sure if this is a
fairly
new development or a
comparatively
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old
one. One thing I am sure about that the past century was
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different
. No doubt, the term ‘generation gap’ was always present
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but
it doesn't mean older
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people
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used
to
be treated
as a burden in the past.

The
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modern
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society
is
certainly
not kind to the
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old
generation and I have acute reasons to loathe it. I can
clearly
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visualise
the degradation of the
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young
generation for their lack of
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respect
for the
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old
. This is
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just
the beginning and if this trend continues, they will become more selfish. Power and wealth are not the pillars of the development and I believe we should be grateful to our ancestors for everything they have done for us. And it is the
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time
for the youth to repay and
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respect
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some
of these contributions.
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Sample Answer 2: We
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just
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love
living in our
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modern
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society
which has gone
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"
all digital
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in recent years. And why shouldn’t we? With
so
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many
LED screens, TVs, laptops, computers and smartphones around us the last thing, that perhaps ever crosses our minds, is that going “all digital”
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just
might not be in the best interest of our
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physical
and mental health
after all
.
Well
, yes, we are talking about a
rather
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important
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but
recent phenomenon of our
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society
which has consumed us
for the most part
by “forcing” us to spend way more
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time
in front of our digital
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media
screens.

This is happening
primarily
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because
digital technology has crept into our everyday
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lives
and across all other activities in such a way that we
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just
can’t seem to
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ignore
our laptops or smartphones or
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stop
interacting with our digital
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media
, no matter how
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hard
we try,
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because
of the kinds of information, we consume, on a daily basis. In fact, the research
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shows
that in
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today
’s world, the average adult consumes five
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times
more information every day than their counterpart 50 years ago.

Another reason of this trend is the “instant gratification” where we are trying to provide ourselves with
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some
kinds of “fake
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but
easy way out” from our monotonous and tiring
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lives
by
constantly
tweeting, texting, posting likes, sharing things, Googling and checking emails messages on social
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media
networks for no obvious reasons.

Needless to say
,
of course
, I don’t exactly like this
rather
unhealthy “trend” of spending too much
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time
in front of our digital
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media
screens
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because
of its
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negative
impacts on our mental and
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physical
health,
especially
when it
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comes
to socializing with our families, relatives and friends.
As a result
, children are becoming less and less interested in making friends at their schools while
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parents
are
also
becoming more and more distant from their children due to checking their smartphones and digital televisions like they
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just
can’t
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get
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enough
of it. In fact, going out to enjoy a lovely meal at a family restaurant or meeting friends to have a football match out in a field,
instead
of
actually
pushing the buttons of our smartphones and TV remotes, are becoming things of the past which
certainly
doesn’t augur
well
for our mental and
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physical
health.

And
as a result
, we are not
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only
becoming more and more depressed and grumpy (
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sometimes
, even violent)
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but
also
“obese” and “sleep deprived”,
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let
alone the
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dangers
of “digital eye strains” due to staring at the digital screens for a long period of
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time
.
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Anyway
, our
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modern
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society
has
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given
us innumerable “benefits”,
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but
it
certainly
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helps
to understand how much of those benefits we
actually
need.
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
59Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe an aspect of modern society that you dislike. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
9 paragraphs
912 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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