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Describe a new house that someone you know has recently bought. v.1

Describe a new house that someone you know has recently bought. v. 1
Describe a new house that someone you know has recently bought. You should say: where it is who bought this house what type of house it is and explain your impression of this house. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ] Model Answer 1: A house,   an address, a place to live – whatever we call it, we all know that we need one. But the unfortunate reality is that not everybody has a house, nor all of us have the ability to buy one despite our best efforts. So, when I came to know a few months ago that my elder brother has bought a house in a city nearby where we lived, I became very happy. The house is about 2200 square feet with 4 bedrooms, 3 bathrooms, a kitchen and 3 balconies, located nearby a small lake.   Built with brick, cement, iron rods and sand, it isn’t exactly a new house even though my brother had to pay a fortune to buy this place. When you go inside the house, you will find a hall and a sitting room on the opposite of the main entrance door. Having a big kitchen on the left, this house also has a corridor on the right leading to a common bathroom and bedrooms. Standing tall next to a major intersection and a couple of other streets in the city, the house is easily accessible pretty much from all directions. My first impression about this house was it had a lot of stories to tell with its waning down paintings and “cracked floors” both inside and outside of the house. Having remained closed probably for a long time, the house looked to be in a “damp” condition because of not receiving enough air and sunlight, I suppose. However, the best thing about this house is it is spacious enough to accommodate all of our family members, including myself and our parents, with enough rooms to run and play for my little nephew and nieces. Besides, having a lake nearby is like a “gift”, if you are living in a city, which will certainly provide the kids with an opportunity to interact with the “nature” from time to time. Finally, having bought this “old” house, I think, my elder brother has offered himself a “window of opportunity” to remodel it by becoming a bit innovative without spending too much money which wouldn’t probably be possible had he bought a completely new house with everything in perfect condition. Model Answer 2: Thanks a lot for this great cue card topic. I am going to talk about a house that one of my cousins have recently purchased. I will tell where it is located, how it looks like and my impression of this house. My cousin Andrew who has bought the house is a doctor and he had been planning to own a house ever since he got married. Finally, he bought a new house in (. . . say an area name…) and a few months ago I visited this residence. This is an emerging area in the city and a number of housing projects are still ongoing. It takes around an hour to reach there from the National Art Gallery - which is located at the zero-point of the city. So in terms of its location, it’s situated in a convenient area as it is adjacent to the city centre and yet free from the city crowd. As I have noticed during my last visit, many government agencies, two private universities and a few private organisations have been relocated to this area. Andrew’s house is a two storey modern house and it occupies around 5000 square feet area in total. It has a small garden in front of it which makes it even more beautiful. On the ground floor, it has three bedrooms, a guest room, a dining room, a large kitchen and a small playground while the first floor has four large bedrooms - each with an attached bathroom, and finally a hall room. The spacious living and dining rooms have gorgeous marble floors and Andrew took professional advice of an interior designer before he decorated the house. My first impression of the house is quite excellent. As soon as I reached there, I felt that an individual house is way better than an apartment in a large building. I wish we have had such a house instead of our apartment on a busy street in the city! The house is very beautiful and it looks quite attractive. I am sure my cousin and his family enjoy living there.
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Describe
a
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new
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house
that someone
you know
has recently
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bought
. You should say: where it is who
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bought
this
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house
what type of
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house
it is and
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explain
your
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impression
of this
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house
. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
Loose punctuation mark.
]
Model Answer 1: A
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house
,
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an address, a place to
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live
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–
whatever we call it, we all know that we need one.
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But
the unfortunate reality is that not everybody has a
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house
, nor all of us have the ability to
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buy
one despite our best efforts.
So
, when I came to know a few months ago that my elder brother has
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bought
a
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house
in a city nearby where we
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lived
, I became
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very
happy.

The
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house
is about
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2200 square feet
with 4
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bedrooms
, 3 bathrooms, a kitchen and 3 balconies, located nearby a
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small
lake.
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Built with brick, cement, iron rods and sand, it isn’t exactly a
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new
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house
even though
my brother had to pay a fortune to
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buy
this place. When you go inside the
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house
, you will find a hall and a sitting
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room
on the opposite of the main entrance door.
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Having
a
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big
kitchen on the
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left
, this
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house
also
has a corridor on the
right
leading to a common bathroom and
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bedrooms
. Standing tall
next
to a major intersection and a couple of other streets in the city, the
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house
is
easily
accessible pretty much from all directions.

My
first
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impression
about this
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house
was it had
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a lot of
stories to
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tell
with its waning down paintings and “cracked
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floors”
both inside and
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outside of
the
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house
.
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Having
remained closed
probably
for a long time, the
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house
looked to be in a “damp” condition
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because
of not receiving
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enough
air and sunlight, I suppose.

However
, the best thing about this
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house
is it is spacious
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enough
to accommodate all of our family members, including myself and our parents, with
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enough
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rooms
to run and play for my
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little
nephew and nieces.
Besides
,
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having
a lake nearby is like a “gift”, if you are living in a city, which will
certainly
provide the kids with an opportunity to interact with the “nature” from time to time.
Finally
,
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having
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bought
this “
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old
”
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house
, I
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think
, my elder brother has offered himself a “window of opportunity” to remodel it by becoming a bit innovative without spending too much money which wouldn’t
probably
be possible had he
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bought
a completely
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new
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house
with everything in perfect condition.

Model Answer 2: Thanks a lot for this great cue card topic. I am going to talk about a
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house
that one of my cousins have recently
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purchased
. I will
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tell
where it
is located
, how it looks like and my
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impression
of this
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house
. My cousin Andrew who has
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bought
the
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house
is a
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
doctor and
he had been planning to
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own
a
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house
ever since he
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got
married.
Finally
, he
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bought
a
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new
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house
in (.
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.
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.
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say
an
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area
name…) and a few months ago I visited this residence. This is an emerging
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area
in the city and a number of housing projects are
still
ongoing. It takes around an hour to reach there from the National Art Gallery
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-
which
is located
at the zero-point of the city.
So
in terms of its location, it’s situated in a convenient
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area
as it is adjacent to the city
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centre
and
yet
free from the city crowd. As I have noticed during my last visit,
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many
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government
agencies, two private universities and a few private
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organisations
have
been relocated
to this
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area
. Andrew’s
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house
is a
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two storey
modern
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house
and it occupies around
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5000 square feet
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area
in total. It has a
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small
garden in front of it which
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makes
it even more
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beautiful
. On the ground
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floor
, it has three
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bedrooms
, a guest
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room
, a dining
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room
, a large kitchen and a
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small
playground while the
first
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floor
has four large
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bedrooms
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-
each with an attached bathroom, and
finally
a hall
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room
. The spacious living and dining
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rooms
have gorgeous marble
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floors
and Andrew took professional advice of an interior designer
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before
he decorated the
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house
. My
first
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impression
of the
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house
is quite excellent. As
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soon
as I reached there, I felt that an individual
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house
is way better than an apartment in a large building. I wish we have had such a
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house
instead
of our apartment on a busy street in the city! The
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house
is
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very
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beautiful
and it looks quite attractive. I am sure my cousin and his family enjoy living there.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
61Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a new house that someone you know has recently bought. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
5 paragraphs
801 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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