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Describe an experience when you were disappointed. v.1

Describe an experience when you were disappointed. v. 1
Describe an experience when you were disappointed. You should say: when it was what exactly happened why it was disappointing to you and explain how you felt about it. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer 1: I am not exactly one of those people who get disappointed easily over anything. But, I guess that it is absolutely alright to be frustrated once in a while when there is a huge difference between what one expects to receive and what is being offered just as happened to me about a couple of years ago. It was in the year of 2017 when the capital city of my country had organized an international trade fair just like every other year. In fact, this tradition of organizing international trade fair is a regular feature among many other international events of my country for the last 25 years or so except, of course, I never really cared to attend it. However, I decided to attend the trade fair about a couple of years ago because a couple of my friends told me some top-rated brands and prestigious companies from around the world would participate in the fair. The fair authority even advertised that if we would spend a certain amount of money in buying any products from the trade fair, the companies would offer up to 50% discounts on all of their products.   So, after hearing these lucrative offers and exciting news, I finally decided to head to the trade fair along with my friends. But, when I actually arrived there, I could easily find out that mostly “very mediocre” products and merchandises were being sold at that fair. I even felt that those “popular and prestigious” companies from different countries attended the fair to sell us only those products that they couldn’t sell in their own countries. Besides, the prices of most of the products there were very high. So, indeed, it was a truly disappointing experience. Anyway, after going to the fair, I felt like it was a total waste of time because I couldn’t really find a product, which I liked, at a reasonable price. Besides, I also felt that they trade fair authority duped us by advertising false promises in order to bring more and more customers to the fair.
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Describe
an experience when you
were disappointed
. You should say: when it was what exactly happened why it was disappointing to you and
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explain
how you
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felt
about it. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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]
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Model Answer 1:

I am not exactly one of those
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people
who
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get
disappointed
easily
over anything.
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But
,
I guess
that it is
absolutely
alright to
be frustrated
once in a while when there is a huge difference between what one
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expects
to receive and what is
being offered
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just
as happened to me about a couple of years ago.

It was in the
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year
of 2017 when the capital city of my
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country
had organized an international
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trade
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fair
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just
like every other
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year
. In fact, this tradition of organizing international
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trade
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fair
is a regular feature among
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many
other international
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events
of my
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country
for the last 25 years or
so
except,
of course
, I never
really
cared to attend it.
However
, I decided to attend the
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trade
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fair
about a couple of years ago
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because
a couple of my friends
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told
me
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some
top-rated brands and prestigious
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companies
from around the world would participate in the
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fair
.

The
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fair
authority even advertised that if we would spend a certain amount of money in buying any
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products
from the
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trade
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fair
, the
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companies
would offer up to 50% discounts on all of their
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products
.
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So
, after hearing these lucrative offers and exciting news, I
finally
decided to head to the
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trade
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fair
along with my friends.
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But
, when I
actually
arrived there, I could
easily
find out that
mostly
“
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very
mediocre”
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products
and merchandises were
being sold
at that
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fair
. I even
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felt
that those “popular and prestigious”
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companies
from
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different
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countries
attended the
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fair
to sell us
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only
those
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products
that they couldn’t sell in their
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own
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countries
.
Besides
, the prices of most of the
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products
there were
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very
high.
So
,
indeed
, it was a
truly
disappointing experience.

Anyway
, after going to the
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fair
, I
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felt
like it was a total waste of time
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because
I couldn’t
really
find a
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product
, which I liked, at a reasonable price.
Besides
, I
also
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felt
that they
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trade
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fair
authority duped us by advertising false promises in order to bring more and more customers to the
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fair
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe an experience when you were disappointed. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
5 paragraphs
416 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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