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Describe an advertisement you like. v.1

Describe an advertisement you like. v. 1
Describe an advertisement you like. You should say: what type of advertisement it is what product it advertises where you first saw it and explain why you like it and think that this advertisement is effective.   Model Answer 1: Most of the times, I think that the advertisements just a waste of time, because they don’t really do any good for the general public. But, then, suddenly we come across an advertisement, which forces us to think otherwise, just as I was also forced to think like that about a couple of years ago. It is an advertisement about “tea” – drinking tea that is. By the way, I would say that it was one of the best advertisements I had ever seen in a long, long time, as it was made in a very clear manner to deliver a clear message in the form of having some light jokes and conversation. Anyway, I saw this advertisement on television for the first time about a year ago or so. In the advertisement, a stage is perfectly set for an enjoyable evening for 4 people, including two wives and two husbands. They were all busy talking and laughing with each other while enjoying some snacks also at the same time. Then, it was the time for some hot tea in order to conclude the evening time to get together for the day.   So, anyway, when everybody was busy to pour sugar in their cup full of tea while zooming in the brand name of the tea, they noticed that one of the wives was not taking any sugar. When asked, why the lady was not taking any sugar, she smilingly answered that she always likes to keep her sugar and husband under control. After that joke, everybody burst out in laughter.   And, with that laughter, the advertisement was concluded. Anyway, I really like the advertisement and find it effective, mainly because it is trying to deliver a very clear message to its audience about controlling their sugar consumption also in order to check their diabetes while enjoying their tasty tea as much as they can. I like the advertisement also because it revealed a very sweet but an age-old rivalry between a husband and wife as to who gets to control who in a romantic relationship.
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Describe
an
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you like. You should say: what type of
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it is what product it advertises where you
first
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saw
it and
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explain
why you like it and
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think
that this
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advertisement
is effective.
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Model Answer 1: Most of the
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times
, I
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think
that the
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advertisements
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just
a waste of
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time
,
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because
they don’t
really
do any
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good
for the
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general public
.
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But
, then,
suddenly
we
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come
across an
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advertisement
, which forces us to
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think
otherwise
,
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just
as I was
also
forced to
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think
like that about a couple of years ago.

It is an
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advertisement
about
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“tea”
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–
drinking
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tea
that is
. By the way, I would say that it was one of the best
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advertisements
I had ever
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seen
in a long, long
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time
, as it
was made
in a
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very
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clear
manner to deliver a
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clear
message in the form of having
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some
light jokes and conversation.

Anyway
, I
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saw
this
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advertisement
on television for the
first
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time
about a year ago or
so
. In the
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advertisement
, a stage is
perfectly
set for an enjoyable evening for 4
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people
, including two wives and two husbands. They were all busy talking and laughing with each other while enjoying
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some
snacks
also
at the same
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time
. Then, it was the
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time
for
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some
hot
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tea
in order
to conclude
the evening
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time
to
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get
together for the day.
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So
,
anyway
, when everybody was busy to pour
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sugar
in their cup full of
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tea
while zooming in the brand name of the
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tea
, they noticed that one of the wives was not taking any
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sugar
. When asked
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, why
the lady was not taking any
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sugar
, she
smilingly
answered that she always likes to
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keep
her
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sugar
and husband under control. After that joke, everybody burst out in laughter.
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And, with that laughter, the
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advertisement
was concluded
.

Anyway
, I
really
like the
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advertisement
and find it effective,
mainly
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because
it is trying to deliver a
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very
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clear
message to its audience about controlling their
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sugar
consumption
also
in order to
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check
their diabetes while enjoying their tasty
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tea
as much as they can. I like the
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advertisement
also
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because
it revealed a
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very
sweet
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but
an age-
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old
rivalry between a husband and wife as to who
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gets
to control who in a romantic relationship.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe an advertisement you like. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
4 paragraphs
388 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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