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Describe an activity you recently took part in. v.1

Describe an activity you recently took part in. v. 1
Describe an activity you recently took part in. You should say: what activity it is why you took part in it how it was organised and explain your feeling about this activity. Sample Answer 1: Recently I took part in a social activity which I would like to talk about for this cue card topic. It was a social campaign to inform everyone in our community about the vaccination for children. This was an important vaccination project that the government was funding and our objective was to inform everyone in our community so that children from 6 months till 5 years old get it for free from the designated centres on the due date. The awareness campaign was organised by our university and I participated in it to be a part of an important social cause. It was a 3-day long campaign and I felt really great to be able to deliver an important message to every single community member. In fact, this was not the first time I participated in such an activity. My mother is a social worker and from her, I learned the importance of being a part of such great activities. Last month when I heard that one of our university teachers was looking for few students to contribute to this campaign, I did not hesitate to be enlisted. Before we started knocking on the doors of each community member, a government organisation sent a three members’ team to train us. It was more like a professional training and workshop where we were taught about our duties during the campaign. We were handed over a list of our community members and their probable time of being home. We had to make another list with the name, address, child’s age and the type of vaccine they are supposed to be given. We had a supervisor in our team from the beginning of this campaign and he guided us whenever we needed his advice. I would say that the organisation of this campaign was quite thorough and structured. Honestly, I felt so happy and contended about this whole activity. I knew how important it was to deliver the message to all our community members so that they do not miss their children’s vaccination. I thought it was a great social work which would be quite helpful for the members of our community and did not hesitate to take part in it. I have always felt quite excited and happy about being part of any noble and helpful activity and the vaccination campaign was no exception.
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Describe
an
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activity
you recently took
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part
in. You should say: what
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activity
it is why you took
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part
in it how it was
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organised
and
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explain
your feeling about this
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activity
. Sample Answer 1:

Recently I took
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part
in a
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social
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activity
which I would like to talk about for this cue card topic. It was a
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social
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campaign
to inform everyone in our
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community
about the vaccination for children. This was an
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important
vaccination project that the
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government
was funding and our objective was to inform everyone in our
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community
so
that children from 6 months till 5 years
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old
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get
it for free from the designated
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centres
on the due date. The awareness
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campaign
was
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organised
by our university and I participated in it to be a
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part
of an
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important
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social
cause. It was a
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3-day long
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campaign
and I felt
really
great to be able to deliver an
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important
message to every single
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community
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member
. In fact, this was not the
first
time I participated in such an
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activity
. My mother is a
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social
worker and from her, I learned the importance of being a
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part
of such great
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activities
. Last month when I heard that one of our university teachers was looking for few students to contribute to this
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campaign
, I did not hesitate to
be enlisted
.
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Before
we
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started
knocking on the doors of each
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community
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member
, a
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government
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organisation
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sent
a three
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members’
team to train us. It was more like a professional training and workshop where we
were taught
about our duties during the
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campaign
. We
were handed
over a list of our
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community
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members
and their probable time of being home. We had to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
another list with the name, address, child’s age and the type of vaccine they
are supposed
to be
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given
.
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We
had a supervisor in our team from the beginning of this
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campaign and
he guided us whenever we needed his advice. I would say that the
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organisation
of this
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campaign
was quite thorough and structured.
Honestly
, I felt
so
happy and contended about this whole
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activity
. I knew how
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important
it was to deliver the message to all our
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community
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members
so
that they do not miss their children’s vaccination. I
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thought
it was a great
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social
work which would be quite helpful for the
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members
of our
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community
and did not hesitate to take
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part
in it.
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I
have always felt quite excited and happy about being
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part
of any noble and helpful
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activity
and the vaccination
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campaign
was no exception.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
45Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe an activity you recently took part in. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
2 paragraphs
427 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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