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Describe a well-paid job that you think you would be good at. v.1

Describe a well-paid job that you think you would be good at. v. 1
Describe a well-paid job that you think you would be good at. You should say: what the job is what qualifications are required for this job how this job is different from other jobs and say why you think you would be good at this job. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer 1: There are many well-paid jobs in the job markets, and I feel like I would be good at doing many of them without much difficulties (forgive me if I sound a bit too “confident” here). But, for the lack of time, I am allowed to talk about only one of those jobs here. The job is more popularly known as “Foreign Affairs Analyst”, which has fascinated me since my high school days, not only because it pays well, but also because it is different from any other jobs in some significant ways. For example, no other jobs allow a person to represent his or her country to the rest of the world in such a comprehensive manner, like the job of a foreign affair analyst, by analyzing its strengths and weaknesses on different levels of political, economic and geo-strategic objectives.   However, some people might argue here that corporate jobs also do the same thing, but, in response, I would say that they conduct such analysis only on a “micro” level while a Foreign Affairs Analyst does that on a “macro” level. Another distinct aspect of this job is that it involves extensive travelling to different countries and residing there for a long period of time, unlike many other jobs, so that the job holders can study the activities of those countries closely in order to secure the national interests of his/her country.   By the way, while anybody with a tertiary educational qualification can do the job of a foreign affairs analyst, it would rather be better if he/she at least has a Bachelor degree or equivalent qualifications in “International Relation” or “Political Science’. Anyway, I think that I would be good at this job primarily because I have been very passionate about learning about different cultures, traditions and lifestyles of different countries, which certainly could come handy for an aspiring foreign affairs analyst. In fact, I have even travelled to a number of our neighbouring countries in the past. Besides, my “above average” negotiation skills and “tact”, would help me to do the job better than many other people.   Sample Answer 2: The job of a ‘Sales Manager’ in Germany is surprisingly challenging and at the same time, highly rewarding. This job is well-paid and comes with many other benefits. Hence, a good number of candidates in my country try to get the job and grow their career as a sales manager. I think I will be an accomplished sales manager if I am given the opportunity. This is a nice cue card topic and I would like to thank you for the chance to let me talk about it.   The position of a sales manager requires at least a graduation degree from a reputed university or college. The degree should be focused on finance, marketing, business or any other similar discipline. Without proper knowledge of the marketing system, someone would struggle to set the right strategies for achieving sales target. A company will be expecting results from a sales manager.   Usually, other jobs come with fewer challenges while the job of a sales manager brings constant hurdles and not to mention the difficult sales targets and obstacles of managing a large team. Failure is not accepted in this position. Sales managers grow amid the challenges and establish their companies as brand entities in the market. Moreover, the reward of this job is high. The sales managers always get benefits for their efforts and success.   Being a student of business studies, I am gathering the required academic skills to be a sales manager for a large brand. Besides, I have some part-time job experience in this field and have been working in a product manufacturing company for the last two years. My skills in analysing the market and understanding the target audience along with my persuasive skills make me a deserving candidate for this job. However, there is a catch! I can't apply for this post directly. I will have to prove myself as a salesperson first and then be promoted as a sales manager who would be responsible for managing a large team of other salesmen.
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. [You will
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some
notes to
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Model Answer 1: There are
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many
well
-paid
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jobs
in the
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job
markets, and I feel like I would be
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good
at doing
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many
of them without
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much
difficulties (forgive me if I sound a bit too “confident” here).
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allowed
to talk about
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only
one of those
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jobs
here.

The
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job
is more
popularly
known as
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“Foreign
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Affairs
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Analyst”
, which has fascinated me since my high school days, not
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only
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because
it pays
well
,
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also
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because
it is
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different
from any
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other
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jobs
in
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some
significant ways.
For example
, no
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jobs
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allow
a person to represent
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his or her
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country
to the rest of the world in such a comprehensive manner, like the
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job
of a
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foreign
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affair
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analyst
, by analyzing its strengths and weaknesses on
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different
levels of political, economic and
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geo-strategic
objectives.
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However
,
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some
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people
might argue here that corporate
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jobs
also
do the same thing,
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but
, in response, I would say that they conduct such analysis
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only
on a “micro” level while a
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Foreign
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Affairs
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Analyst
does that on a “macro” level. Another distinct aspect of this
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job
is that it involves extensive travelling to
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different
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countries
and residing there for a long period of time, unlike
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many
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other
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jobs
,
so
that the
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job
holders can study the activities of those
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countries
closely
in order to secure the national interests of his/her
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country
.
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By the way, while anybody with a tertiary educational qualification can do the
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job
of a
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foreign
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affairs
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analyst
, it would
rather
be better if he/she at least has a Bachelor degree or equivalent qualifications in “International Relation” or “Political Science’.

Anyway
, I
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think
that I would be
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good
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job
primarily
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because
I have been
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very
passionate
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about learning about
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different
cultures, traditions and lifestyles of
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different
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countries
, which
certainly
could
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come
handy for an aspiring
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foreign
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affairs
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analyst
. In fact, I have even travelled to a number of our
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neighbouring
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countries
in the past.
Besides
, my “above average” negotiation
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skills
and “tact”, would
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help
me to do the
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job
better than
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many
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other
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people
.
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Sample Answer 2: The
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job
of a
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‘Sales
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Manager’
in Germany is
surprisingly
challenging and at the same time,
highly
rewarding. This
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job
is
well
-paid and
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comes
with
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many
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other
benefits.
Hence
, a
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good
number of candidates in my
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country
try to
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get
the
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job
and grow their career as a
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sales
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manager
. I
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think
I will be an accomplished
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sales
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manager
if I am
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given
the opportunity. This is a nice cue card topic and I would like to thank you for the chance to
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let
me talk about it.
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The position of a
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sales
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manager
requires at least a graduation degree from a reputed university or college. The degree should
be focused
on finance, marketing, business or any
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other
similar discipline. Without proper knowledge of the marketing system, someone would struggle to set the
right
strategies for achieving
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sales
target. A
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company
will be expecting results from a
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sales
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manager
.
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Usually
,
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other
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jobs
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come
with fewer challenges while the
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job
of a
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sales
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manager
brings constant hurdles and not to mention the difficult
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sales
targets and obstacles of managing a large team. Failure is not
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accepted
in this position.
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Sales
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managers
grow amid the challenges and establish their
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companies
as brand entities in the market.
Moreover
, the reward of this
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job
is high. The
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sales
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managers
always
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get
benefits for their efforts and success.
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Being a student of business studies, I am gathering the required academic
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skills
to be a
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sales
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manager
for a large brand.
Besides
, I have
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some
part-time
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job
experience in this field and have been working in a product manufacturing
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company
for the last two years. My
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skills
in
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analysing
the market and understanding the target audience along with my persuasive
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skills
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make
me a deserving candidate for this
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job
.
However
, there is a catch! I can't apply for this post
directly
. I will
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have to
prove myself as a salesperson
first
and then
be promoted
as a
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sales
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manager
who would be responsible for managing a large team of
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other
salesmen.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
101Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe a well-paid job that you think you would be good at. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
3 paragraphs
781 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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