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Describe a handmade gift you gave to a friend or relative. v.1

Describe a handmade gift you gave to a friend or relative. v. 1
Describe a handmade gift you gave to a friend or relative. You should say: what the gift was who you gave it to and when how you made it by hand and explain why you gave a handmade gift to your this friend or relative. Sample Answer 1: Thank you a lot for this topic. I will talk about a handmade gift that I gave to my younger sister when she was only 7 and how I actually made it. Well, the gift was a wooden doll (I must confess that doll did not look that great as I made it when I was only 15 years old and I had little skills making such things). Yet my sister loved it so much and I felt so proud for making this gift for her. It was a late winter evening probably in 2001 when I took my sister to the market to buy her a pair of shoes. On our way back to home, she showed me a large doll displayed in a fancy toy shop. She told me that she would love to own a doll like that. She knew the price of that doll would be really high and I did not have enough money to actually buy her that doll. This event made me sad a lot and I asked my father, who lived in a different city for his job to buy her a doll. He probably forgot about the doll and did not send any doll in next two weeks. My sister’s birthday was approaching and I wanted to make her a beautiful doll before her birthday. I used to make boats, wooden pens, and other types of toys in my childhood as a passion but making a doll was something I never thought I would do someday. However, I dared to make one and worked for more than 7-8 days to finally make something that I could claim as a doll. I took a fine quality wood large enough to give it a shape of a doll, used other tools, glue and other ingredients to make this doll. I painted that doll and tried to mimic my sister’s facial features in this doll. When I gave this doll to my sister, she was so amazed that she kissed me and thanked me again and again. She even recognised that I tried to mimic her face in that doll. Then I told her that ‘the name of this doll is Emmy’. She laughed and told me that it was even more beautiful than her. A few weeks later my father bought her a very expensive and beautiful doll but my sister was somehow convinced that the one I made was prettier. Maybe that was because of her love and affection for me. I basically wanted to make my sister happy and to give her something before her 8th birthday. I did not have enough money to buy her a big doll and I had some skills on making toys with woods and papers. Considering all these facts I was convinced that I should make a wooden doll by myself for my sister.
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Describe
a handmade
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gift
you
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gave
to a friend or relative. You should say: what the
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gift
was who you
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gave
it to and when how you made it by hand and
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explain
why you
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gave
a handmade
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gift
to your this friend or relative. Sample Answer 1:

Thank you a lot for this topic. I will talk about a handmade
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gift
that I
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gave
to my younger
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sister
when she was
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only
7 and how I
actually
made it.
Well
, the
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gift
was a wooden
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doll
(I
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must
confess that
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doll
did not look that great as I made it when I was
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only
15 years
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old
and I had
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little
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skills
making such things).
Yet
my
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sister
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loved
it
so
much and I felt
so
proud for making this
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gift
for her. It was a late winter evening
probably
in 2001 when I took my
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sister
to the market to
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buy
her a pair of shoes. On our way back to home, she
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showed
me a large
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doll
displayed in a fancy toy shop. She
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told
me that she would
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love
to
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own
a
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doll
like that. She knew the price of that
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doll
would be
really
high and I did not have
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enough
money to
actually
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buy
her that
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doll
. This
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event
made me sad a lot and I asked my father, who
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lived
in a
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different
city for his job to
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buy
her a
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doll
. He
probably
forgot about the
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doll
and did not
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send
any
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doll
in
next
two weeks. My
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sister’s
birthday was approaching and I wanted to
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make
her a
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beautiful
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doll
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before
her birthday. I
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used
to
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make
boats, wooden pens, and other types of toys in my childhood as a passion
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but
making a
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doll
was something I never
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thought
I would do someday.
However
, I dared to
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make
one and worked for more than 7-8 days to
finally
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make
something that I could claim as a
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doll
. I took a fine quality wood large
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enough
to give it a shape of a
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doll
,
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used
other tools, glue and other ingredients to
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make
this
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doll
. I painted that
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doll
and tried to mimic my
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sister’s
facial features in this
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doll
. When I
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gave
this
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doll
to my
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sister
, she was
so
amazed that she kissed me and thanked me again and again. She even
Possible spelling mistake. 'recognised' is British English.
recognised
that I tried to mimic her face in that
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doll
. Then I
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told
her that ‘the name of this
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doll
is Emmy’. She laughed and
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told
me that it was even more
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beautiful
than her. A few weeks later my father
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bought
her a
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very
expensive and
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beautiful
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doll
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but
my
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sister
was somehow convinced that the one I made was prettier. Maybe that was
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because
of her
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love
and affection for me. I
basically
wanted to
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make
my
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sister
happy and to give her something
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before
her 8th birthday. I did not have
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enough
money to
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buy
her a
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big
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doll
and I had
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some
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skills
on making toys with woods and papers. Considering all these facts I
was convinced
that I should
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make
a wooden
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doll
by myself for my
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sister
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
53Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a handmade gift you gave to a friend or relative. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
2 paragraphs
527 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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