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Describe a trip that you made by public transport. v.1

Describe a trip that you made by public transport. v. 1
Describe a trip that you made by public transport. You should say: when and where you went what kind of transport you used how was your trip and explain why did you choose to use public transport. Model Answer 1: Today I am going to tell you about a trip I made by public transport. I will tell you when and where I went, what transport I used, a little about the trip and why I chose to use public transport. The trip was made about five weeks ago. Can you guess where I was going? I was leaving my home in Sheffield, England, to come to Vietnam! To make this journey I had to use lots of different forms of transport. The first part was by car – a friend gave me a lift to the coach station. The coach I was travelling in went overnight, so it was very late, very cold and very dark when I arrived at the coach station. I was glad my friend was with me. The coach arrived at midnight, and the driver was tired and a bit cross. He was quite rude to all the passengers which I and my friend thought was funny! My backpack was put in the compartment under the coach, and I climbed on board. There were lots of empty seats on the coach, so I sat at the front and had two all to myself. I tried to sleep but it was uncomfortable and I was excited, so I didn’t really get any sleep at all. The coach stopped a few times over night so people could get on and off. At one point the driver changed, and a new friendlier driver came on board. Our destination? It was Heathrow Airport, this is a huge international airport near to London. The journey to London took about 6 hours. I was very tired when I arrived in the early morning at Heathrow, but I knew that when I got on my plane, then the next step in my adventure would begin! Although I do have my own car, I try to use public transport whenever I can. I think it is better for the environment and also less stressful. However, for this trip, I had no choice.   I was going away for a long time, so I would not be able to leave my car at the airport for so many months. I wonder what my next journey will be? [ Written by - Lucy Marris | Careers Adviser (UK), TEFL teacher (Vietnam) ]
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Describe
a
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trip
that you made by
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public
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transport
. You should say: when and where you went what kind of
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transport
you
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used
how was your
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trip
and
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explain
why did you choose to
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use
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public
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. Model Answer 1:

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I am going to
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tell
you about a
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I made by
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public
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transport
. I will
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tell
you when and where I went, what
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transport
I
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used
, a
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little
about the
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trip
and why I chose to
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use
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public
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transport
. The
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trip
was made
about five weeks ago. Can you guess where I was going? I was leaving my home in Sheffield, England, to
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come
to Vietnam! To
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make
this journey I had to
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use
lots of
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different
forms of
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transport
. The
first
part was by car
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–
a friend gave me a lift to the
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coach
station. The
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coach
I was travelling in went overnight,
so
it was
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very
late,
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very
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cold
and
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very
dark when I arrived at the
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coach
station. I was glad my friend was with me. The
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coach
arrived at midnight, and the driver
was tired
and a bit cross. He was quite rude to all the passengers which I and my friend
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thought
was
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funny
! My backpack
was put
in the compartment under the
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coach
, and I climbed on board. There were lots of empty seats on the
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coach
,
so
I sat at the front and had two all to myself. I tried to sleep
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but
it was
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uncomfortable and
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was excited
,
so
I didn’t
really
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get
any sleep at all. The
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coach
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stopped
a few times
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over night
so
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people
could
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get
on and off. At one point the driver
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changed
, and a new friendlier driver came on board. Our destination? It was Heathrow Airport, this is a huge international airport near to London. The journey to London took about 6 hours. I was
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very
tired when I arrived in the early morning at Heathrow,
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but
I knew that when I
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got
on my
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plane
, then the
next
step in my adventure would
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begin
! Although I do have my
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own
car, I try to
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use
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public
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transport
whenever I can. I
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think
it is better for the environment and
also
less stressful.
However
, for this
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trip
, I had no choice.
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I was going away for a long time,
so
I would not be able to
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leave
my car at the airport for
so
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many
months. I wonder what my
next
journey will be?
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Written by
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-
Lucy
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Marris
| Careers Adviser (UK), TEFL teacher (Vietnam)
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5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a trip that you made by public transport. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
2 paragraphs
426 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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