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Describe a time when someone helped you. v.1

Describe a time when someone helped you. v. 1
Describe a time when someone helped you. You should say: Who helped you When it was Why s/he helped you And describe how you felt about it. Model Answer: In my life, I got numerous help and useful advice and I am really grateful to the Almighty for that. Among those, one of the important help I got was from one of my teachers. The name of this teacher was (. . . say a teacher’s name…) and he helped me during my term final at my grade eight. This final exam was very important in terms of getting admitted in a renowned high school. I was very much eager to get a great grade to get admitted in the most renowned high school of our town. My parents had a great expectation as well. I was probably 14 years old at that time and on the third day of my exam, I reached to the exam hall at around 8. 45 am. as I thought the exam would start at 9: 00 am. But to my worst surprise, I noticed that the exam room was already silent and everyone was busy writing on the answer sheets. I could not relate the reality to what was happening. Then I found that a teacher was scolding me for being 1 and half hour late for the exam. I could not think rationally and did not know what to do. I felt like I was just thrown down from a mountain and I was falling with great speed without any hope of surviving. At that moment I noticed Mr. (…say the teacher’s name…) and he tried to calm me. He assured me that everything would be fine. Then he asked me the reason for being late. I told him the truth that I had the incorrect timing in my exam schedule. He then assured me and after taking permission from the principal, he arranged me the full three hours of exam time. This was really unexpected for me and I did well in the final exam. Because of the help I got from this teacher, I had been able to secure A+ and got admitted in one of the best high schools in our city. The reason he helped me is because he was a good man with a benevolent heart, good will and honesty. He loved his students and simply helped me because he knew that this exam was important to me. I felt overwhelmed and really grateful for what he did to me. The help was unexpected and that saved me from a disaster. I felt very much happy and grateful. I still feel grateful to this teacher and will always remember the help I got from him that day. Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as well: Describe someone who helped you. Describe an event when you helped someone. Describe something you did and felt good about it. Describe a memorable event in your college or university.
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Describe
a time when someone
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helped
you. You should say: Who
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helped
you When it was Why s/he
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helped
you And
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describe
how you
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felt
about it. Model Answer:

In my life, I
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got
numerous
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help
and useful
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advice and
I am
really
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grateful
to the Almighty for that. Among those, one of the
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important
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help
I
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got
was from one of my
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teachers
. The name of this
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teacher
was (.
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.
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.
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say
a
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teacher’s
name…) and he
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helped
me during my term final at my grade eight. This final exam was
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very
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important
in terms of getting admitted in a renowned high school. I was
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very
much eager to
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get
a great grade to
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get
admitted in the most renowned high school of our town. My parents had a great expectation as
well
. I was
probably
14 years
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old
at that time and on the third day of my exam, I reached to the exam hall at around 8. 45 am. as I
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thought
the exam would
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start
at 9: 00 am.
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But
to my worst surprise, I noticed that the exam room was already silent and everyone was busy writing on the answer sheets. I could not relate the reality to what was happening. Then I found that a
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teacher
was scolding me for being 1 and half hour late for the exam. I could not
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think
rationally
and did not know what to do. I
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felt
like I was
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just
thrown down from a
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
mountain and
I was falling with great speed without any hope of surviving. At that moment I noticed Mr. (…say the
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teacher’s
name…) and he tried to calm me. He assured me that everything would be fine. Then he asked me the reason for being late. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
told
him the truth that I had the incorrect timing in my exam schedule. He then assured me and after taking permission from the principal, he arranged me the full three hours of exam time. This was
really
unexpected for me and I did
well
in the final exam.
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Because
of the
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help
I
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got
from this
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teacher
, I had been able to secure A+ and
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got
admitted in one of the best high schools in our city. The reason he
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helped
me is
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because
he was a
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good
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man
with a benevolent heart,
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good
will and honesty. He
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loved
his students and
simply
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helped
me
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because
he knew that this exam was
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important
to me.

I
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felt
overwhelmed and
really
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grateful
for what he did to me. The
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help
was unexpected
and that saved me from a disaster. I
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felt
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very
much happy and
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grateful
. I
still
feel
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grateful
to this
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teacher
and will always remember the
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help
I
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got
from him that day.

Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as
well
:
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Describe
someone who
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helped
you.
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Describe
an
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event
when you
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helped
someone.
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Describe
something you did and
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felt
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good
about it.
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Describe
a memorable
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event
in your college or university.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a time when someone helped you. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
4 paragraphs
514 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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