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Describe a special day/date in your country’s history. v.1

Describe a special day/date in your country’s history. v. 1
Describe a special day/date in your country’s history. You should say: what day/date it was what happened on that day/date how people celebrate this day/date and explain why this day/date is so special in your country, [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer 1: Being residents of Quebec in Canada, we all love celebrating National Patriots' Day which falls on the Monday before May 25 coinciding with Victoria Day every year. Although it started rather recently from the year of 2003, we, in Quebec, celebrate National Patriots' Day (known as Journée nationale des patriotes) as a statutory holiday to honour the rebellion against the British rule that took place in 1837. National Patriots' Day is a public holiday in Quebec when most businesses, government offices, banks,  and stores remain closed.   All of us in Québec on this important day like to attend various celebrations and events while also taking part in historic activities that are organized throughout the province.   Celebrations may include marches, music concerts, public speeches, and award-giving ceremonies. Many societies, organizations, and community groups take special care to organize different events and activities that don’t only occur on this particular day but also before or after National Patriots' Day.   Special commemorative dinners may also be organized during this holiday. National Patriots' Day is special in Quebec as it reminds us of our past struggle for freedom and liberty that we cherish so much in our lives. In fact, it is the rebellion of our forefathers on this day which helped bring democracy in our country. On this particular day, we become one nation in solidarity with each other in an effort to honour and remember the sacrifice of the Quebec rebels. Finally, this day gives us a great opportunity to get together with our families, friends and relatives over a special dinner meal which is just not possible otherwise most of the times.
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special
day/date in your country’s history. You should say: what day/date it was what happened on that day/date how
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people
celebrate this day/date and
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explain
why this day/date is
so
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special
in your country, [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say.
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You
can
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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Model Answer 1: Being residents of Quebec in Canada, we all
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love
celebrating
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National
Patriots' Day which falls on the Monday
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before
May 25 coinciding with Victoria Day every year. Although it
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started
rather
recently from the year of 2003, we, in Quebec, celebrate
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National
Patriots' Day (known as
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Journée
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nationale
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des
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patriotes
) as a statutory holiday to
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honour
the rebellion against the British
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rule
that took place in
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1837. National
Patriots' Day is a public holiday in Quebec when most businesses,
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government
offices, banks,
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and stores remain closed.
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All of us in Québec on this
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important
day like to attend various celebrations and
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events
while
also
taking part in historic activities that
are organized
throughout the province.
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Celebrations may include marches, music concerts, public speeches, and award-giving ceremonies.
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Many
societies, organizations, and community groups take
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special
care to organize
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different
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events
and activities that don’t
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only
occur on this particular day
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but
also
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before
or after
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National
Patriots' Day.
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Special
commemorative dinners may
also
be organized
during this holiday.

National Patriots' Day is
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special
in Quebec as it reminds us of our past struggle for freedom and liberty that we cherish
so
much in our
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lives
. In fact, it is the rebellion of our forefathers on this day which
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helped
bring democracy in our country. On this particular day, we become one nation in solidarity with each other in an effort to
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honour
and remember the sacrifice of the Quebec rebels.
Finally
, this day gives us a great opportunity to
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get
together with our families, friends and relatives over a
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special
dinner meal which is
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just
not possible
otherwise
Consider using "most of the time" if you mean "usually" or "very often".
most of the times
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe a special day/date in your country’s history. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
3 paragraphs
352 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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