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Describe a job one of your grandparents' did. v.1

Describe a job one of your grandparents' did. v. 1
Describe a job one of your grandparents' did. You should say: whose job it was what job it was how he/she carried out the job and explain what you have learned from it. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer 1: My grandfather was a man of many “activities”- activities which were carried out for no specific reasons by a middle age man, or so at least I thought. But, as I grew little older as a child, I realized that the “activities” were really some important “house chores” which were very much needed in order to keep our family function effectively and efficiently. I also realized that my grandfather was a “bread earner” as well for my family together with my father. In fact, my grandfather was a school teacher. There was every reason to believe that my grandfather loved his teaching profession as much as he loved (probably “caring” is the best word here) his young students. As far as I remember, my grandfather used to wake up very early in the morning every day for the purpose of getting ready to go to school with his bag full of books. A school bus would transport him to and from our house even though my father was very much in favour of dropping him at his work. I guess, he just loved his “freedom” of travelling on his own. He would arrive at home at around 5: 00 pm after finishing school works at 4: 30 pm. He was a man of few words, but he would never forget to talk to us for a while before going to his little study room to prepare his lessons. I was pretty sure that my grandfather took his job very seriously as he would get little irritated if I ever entered his study room out of curiosity. By the way, his small study room was packed with many different kinds of books, and I only wondered how possibly he could have finished reading so many books all by himself! Later on, of course, I had come to know that my grandfather was a very good teacher. In fact, I was told by my father that my grandfather had received the “best teacher’ awards a few times. After his retirement, I found my grandfather to be still visiting his school to meet some of his fellow teachers which proved how much he really loved his school. Finally, I never saw my grandfather missing his school unless he was really very sick. When my grandfather died, I was only about 13 years old. But whatever I had learnt from him by that age was enough to understand that he really cared for his family, and he didn’t want to be a burden on his family members. And, as a result, he wouldn’t want to stop working as long as he could in spite of my father’s request to do so. Besides, my grandfather taught me how to help family even if it meant doing as little things as putting the glass back to its place. Then I also learnt from my grandfather how to be “serious” about my work/profession while also ensuring enough time for my family members. Finally, it was my grandfather who taught me that it is never too late to learn new things if it helped to become better at your profession.
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Describe
a
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job
one of your grandparents' did. You should say: whose
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job
it was what
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job
it was how he/she carried out the
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job
and
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explain
what you have learned from it. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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]
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Model Answer 1: My
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grandfather
was a
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man
of
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many
“activities”- activities which
were carried
out for no specific reasons by a middle age
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man
, or
so
at least I
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thought
.
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But
, as I grew
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little
older as a child, I realized that the “activities” were
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really
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some
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important
“
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house
chores” which were
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very
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much needed
in order to
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keep
our
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family
function
effectively
and
efficiently
. I
also
realized that my
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grandfather
was a “bread earner” as
well
for my
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family
together with my
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father
. In fact, my
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grandfather
was a
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school
teacher.

There was every reason to believe that my
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grandfather
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loved
his teaching profession as
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much
as he
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loved
(
probably
“caring” is the best word here) his young students. As far as I remember, my
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grandfather
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used
to wake up
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very
early in the morning every day for the purpose of getting ready to go to
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school
with his bag full of books. A
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school
bus would transport him to and from our
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house
even though
my
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father
was
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very
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much
in
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favour
of dropping him at his work.
I guess
, he
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just
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loved
his “freedom” of travelling on his
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own
.

He would arrive at home at around 5: 00 pm after finishing
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school
works at 4: 30 pm. He was a
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man
of few words,
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but
he would never forget to talk to us for a while
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before
going to his
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little
study room to prepare his lessons. I was pretty sure that my
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grandfather
took his
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job
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very
seriously
as he would
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get
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little
irritated if I ever entered his study room out of curiosity. By the way, his
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small
study room
was packed
with
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many
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different
kinds of books, and I
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only
wondered how
possibly
he could have finished reading
so
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many
books all by himself! Later on,
of course
, I had
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come
to know that my
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grandfather
was a
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very
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good
teacher. In fact, I was
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told
by my
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father
that my
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grandfather
had received the “best teacher’ awards a few times.

After his retirement, I found my
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grandfather
to be
still
visiting his
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school
to
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meet
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some
of his fellow teachers which proved how
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much
he
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really
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loved
his
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school
.
Finally
, I never
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saw
my
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grandfather
missing his
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school
unless he was
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really
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very
sick.

When my
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grandfather
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died
, I was
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only
about 13 years
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old
.
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But
whatever I had
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learnt
from him by that age was
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enough
to understand that he
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really
cared for his
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family
, and he didn’t want to be a burden on his
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family
members. And,
as a result
, he wouldn’t want to
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stop
working as long as he could
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in spite of
my
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father’s
request to do
so
.
Besides
, my
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grandfather
taught me how to
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help
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family
even if it meant doing as
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little
things as putting the glass back to its place. Then I
also
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learnt
from my
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grandfather
how to be “serious” about my work/profession while
also
ensuring
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enough
time for my
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family
members.
Finally
, it was my
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grandfather
who taught me that it is never too late to learn new things if it
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helped
to become better at your profession.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
52Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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French Proverb

IELTS speaking Describe a job one of your grandparents' did. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
5 paragraphs
597 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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