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Describe a situation that shaped you mentally

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Every morning I enjoy waking up in a room with the fragrant scent of my mother's flowers and eating breakfast prepared by my mother while sitting around the table. And at such times I remember my little history so far, and then I think about my future. There are a lot of strange thoughts, more questions, and one of them is much more important: So, can I make my dreams come true? This question is similar to the question a young man asked himself a few years ago on the treadmill. Until I was 12-13 years old, something always pulled me back, it forced me to think a lot. Because I was a taller but physically thin child, most people around me didn't see me as physically resilient, and I think even my parents did. Whenever I tried to do something more difficult, people around me would turn me away from it, as if I was seriously injured, and at that time I could do nothing but watch. Of course, these things gradually affected my thinking as well. Every time before I start any work, I got used to saying that I can’t do it. Then, I found that athletics was very good for my health, so I later started doing it. After a while, my coach told me to take part in the regional competition. At that time, my condition was like that of a man who died of a broken heart out of fear, and I thought that I would be ashamed there as well. When it was my turn on the day of the competition, I was even more afraid when I saw my more powerful opponents around me. I started running through the bullet through the pistol, but I felt as if the bullet had pierced my brain. At least 50 meters later, someone caused me to stumble as it was the worst thing I was afraid of. My arm and leg were injured and it was very difficult to get up.
Every morning I enjoy waking up in a room with the fragrant scent of my mother's flowers and eating breakfast prepared by my mother while sitting
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the table. And at such
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I remember my
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history
so
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think
about my future. There are
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a lot of
strange thoughts, more questions, and one of them is much more
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important
:
So
, can I
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make
my dreams
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come
true?

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man
asked himself a few years ago on the treadmill. Until I was 12-13 years
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old
, something always pulled me back, it forced me to
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think
a lot.
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Because
I was a taller
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but
physically
thin child, most
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people
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around
me didn't
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see
me as
physically
resilient, and I
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think
even my parents did. Whenever I tried to do something more difficult,
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people
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around
me would turn me away from it, as if I was
seriously
injured, and at that
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time
I could do nothing
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but
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watch
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, these things
gradually
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affected
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before
I
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start
any work, I
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got
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used
to saying that I can’t do it. Then, I found that athletics was
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very
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good
for my health,
so
I later
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started
doing it.

After a while, my coach
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told
me to
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take part
in the regional competition. At that
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time
, my condition was like that of a
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man
who
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died
of a broken heart out of fear, and I
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thought
that I would
be ashamed
there as
well
. When it was my turn on the day of the competition, I was even more afraid when I
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saw
my more powerful opponents
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around
me. I
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started
running through the bullet through the pistol,
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but
I felt as if the bullet had pierced my brain. At least 50 meters later, someone caused me to stumble as it was the worst thing I was afraid of. My arm and leg
were injured
and it was
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very
difficult to
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get
up.
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IELTS speaking Describe a situation that shaped you mentally

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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