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Describe a radio program/show that you find interesting. v.1

Describe a radio program/show that you find interesting. v. 1
Describe a radio program/show that you find interesting. You should say: where it was located how it looked like when you went there and why and explain why you think this was a beautiful house. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer 1: I only went there once, and it was a long time ago, but it made such an impression on me that I feel I can still visualise it really well. I went there to meet a writer, who is my cousin's brother-in-law. I am talking about a house that this writer owns where I have been to a few years ago only to find out an amazing house. I’m going to try and explain who the property belonged to, where it was, what it looked like inside and try and explain what it was that made such a strong impression on me. The person who owns the property is a relative of my cousin Marrie and a writer by profession. So in a sense, he was my relative as well and I went there to record an interview with this writer. It was in a remote area in Ireland. I interrupted my coach trip up the East Coast of Irland to get off at this remote town in far North Ireland. It wasn’t a usual tourist drop-off point, and I think I may even have had to request that the driver made a special stop at the settlement just for me. I stuck out like a sore thumb. I made my way to the only accommodation available, a sort of cheap motel. I hired a tour guide and I had no idea what to expect but clambered into the truck, and off we went, bouncing down rutted tracks, deeper and deeper into the village. I was a bit apprehensive about doing this. I sat and joined the guide and heard different local stories on our journey to the house. We reached there after three hours or so, I was amazed when I looked at a palace type house there. It was like a movie, not reality. It was extraordinary. The house was in the middle of a large area and I have never seen anything like this, or perhaps may have read in novels. The house had a shell of interior walls that essentially served as a viewing platform for the dwellers. No phone, no TV, but home all the same. It blew my mind that you could make a home in such a way and in such a place. Also, although you might think the people there would be isolated, clearly not. In the evening more than 10 guests were invited. Why is this a beautiful house? It is large, close to nature, does not have artificial architecture and offers more meaning to living there than the busy apartments. I absolutely loved it and wish to own one someday.
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Describe
a radio program/
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show
that you find interesting. You should say: where it
was located
how it looked like when you
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went
there and why and
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explain
why you
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think
this was a
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beautiful
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house
. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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]
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Model Answer 1: I
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only
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went
there once, and it was a long time ago,
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but
it made such an impression on me that I feel I can
still
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visualise
it
really
well
. I
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went
there to
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meet
a writer, who is my cousin's brother-in-law. I am talking about a
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house
that this writer
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owns
where I have been to a few years ago
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only
to find out an amazing
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house
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
’m going to
"Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "try to" is recommended for writing.
try and
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explain
who the property belonged to, where it was, what it looked like inside and
"Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "try to" is recommended for writing.
try and
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explain
what it was that made such a strong impression on me.

The person who
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owns
the property is a relative of my cousin
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Marrie
and a writer by profession.
So
in a sense, he was my relative as
well
and I
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went
there to record an interview with this writer.

It was in a remote area in Ireland. I interrupted my coach trip up the East Coast of
Possible spelling mistake found.
Irland
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
off at this remote town in far North Ireland. It wasn’t a usual tourist drop-off point, and I
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
think
I may even have had to request that the driver made a special
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
at the settlement
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
for me. I stuck out like a sore thumb. I made my way to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
accommodation available, a sort of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cheap
motel.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
hired a tour guide and I had no
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idea
what to
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expect
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but
clambered into the truck, and off we
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went
, bouncing down rutted
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tracks
, deeper and deeper into the village.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
was a bit apprehensive about doing this.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
sat and
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joined
the guide and heard
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different
local stories on our journey to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
. We reached there after three hours or
so
, I
was amazed
when I looked at a palace type
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
there. It was like a movie, not reality. It was extraordinary. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
was in the middle of a large area and I have never
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
anything like this, or perhaps may have read in novels.

The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
had a shell of interior walls that
essentially
served as a viewing platform for the dwellers. No phone, no TV,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
home all the same. It blew my mind that you could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a home in such a way and in such a place.
Also
, although you might
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think
the
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people
there would
be isolated
,
clearly
not. In the evening more than 10 guests
were invited
.

Why is this a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
beautiful
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
house
? It is large, close to nature, does not have artificial architecture and offers more meaning to living there than the busy apartments. I
absolutely
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loved
it and wish to
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own
one someday.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes
The joy of knowing a foreign language is inexpressible. I find it really difficult to express such joy in my mother tongue.
Munia Khan

IELTS speaking Describe a radio program/show that you find interesting. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
7 paragraphs
517 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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