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Describe a place where you would like to have a home. v.1

Describe a place where you would like to have a home. v. 1
Describe a place where you would like to have a home. You should say: Where is it What the place look like how you know about this place and say what work you will do if you live there. Model Answer 1: Well, today I want to speak about the place where I would like to have a home. Firstly I want to say that I am that kind of person who enjoys living in the countryside. High-rise buildings, bumper to bumper traffic, incessant roar of buses, industrial zones which give me urban life cannot make me feel blissfully happy as peaceful countryside's life with its well worth seeing the landscape and the clearest air without any exhaust fumes. A place where I would like to have a home is one of the islands of Greece, Santorini. It is a place with breathtaking scenery where sandy beach stretches along the skyline. Santorini is a city of quaint old buildings surrounded by narrow cobbled streets, where the update has been kept old traditions. The majority of buildings in this area are covered by white and blue colours, what gives to the city spectacular view. If I am not mistaken a few years ago while watching a TV program I heard some information about this place that impacts me and then I started to search something about this city on the internet. Actually, my dream came true last year, when I travelled to the Greece and could see this wonderful place which was much more attractive than I used to dream. If I will get a chance to have a house and lived there, I am going to accept it and run over there once and for all. I think I can set up a business there and make a big money. Feeling stream winds, walking on golden sands, and every day watch at the panoramic beach that interflows with blue horizon can be the essential reason why I will choose to live there. [ by - Отправлено ]   Model Answer 2: Living in the present days, especially at a calm and quiet place has become difficult. It is because of the extended population across the countries. But still, there are some serene places where one can make a home of own to lead a happy and peaceful life. I will describe such a place from New Zealand. Invercargill is one of the most prominent cities of New Zealand. Despite being a city, this is the place where one can find the peace of mind. This is one of the southernmost city of the world as well. The city is encircled with plains and rivers and thus has got an attractive look. The city has stunning streets and places for the citizens. On the other side, the rate of troubles is reduced in this city. It appears to me that this is a perfect city for a peace loving human like me. The entire locality is filled with calmness. The streets are nicely decorated and take various looks in seasons. Furthermore, the city has some rich farmland and they also provide a stunning view from a distance. The large conservation lands are the other feature of this city. Besides, this is a commercial centre for the Southland region where a good number of people come to shop their daily necessaries and also marking various occasions. The beautifully decorated streets are named after the rivers which are also attractive. The place also contains a less population than it was supposed to be. As a result, the city is not crowded like the other cities. Moreover, the citizens are peace loving and do not get involved into any unwanted troubles. They abide by the law completely. The transportation system is also advanced and accessible through various routes railway, road and air links. Everything is in the right position of this city which has increased the beauty of this gorgeous city, naturally. I first came to know about the place through the internet. In fact, I had been seeking a suitable place for me and my family to settle down in out my native land. As a result, I had been looking for a suitable city or place where I could live happily. While I was searching for New Zealand, I came to know about the city. Actually, this is one the top cities of the country to live in happily. The features and natural beauties have attracted me. I have already visited the place several times and decided to buy some suitable places for my home. If everything goes well, I would be able to buy a piece of land in the city by June next. Then I will start for building my two-storied home for me and my family. Yes, definitely I have to do something for living there. So, I have planned to continue my current business there. In fact, I own a medium-sized coffee shop in Sydney. But this is a very noisy and crowded place now. So, I have planned to shift from here and run my coffee shop in Invercargill. I have seen several coffee shops which are unable to meet the growing demands of the people. So, I have got a new plan and I will implement that with the coffee shop. Therefore, I think working will not be a problem for me. I think the local people in the city will support me for my decent living.   Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as well: Describe a beautiful place you know about. Describe a place you would like to visit. Describe a place you have recently visited. Describe a naturally beautiful place.
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Describe
a
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place
where you would like to have a home. You should say: Where is it What the
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place
look like how you
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know
about this
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place
and say what work you will do if you
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live
there. Model Answer 1:

Well
,
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today
I want to speak about the
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place
where I would like to have a home.
Firstly
I want to say that I am that kind of person who enjoys
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living
in the countryside. High-rise
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buildings
, bumper to bumper traffic, incessant roar of buses, industrial zones which give me urban life cannot
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
me feel
blissfully
happy as peaceful countryside's life with its
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well
worth seeing the landscape and the clearest air without any exhaust fumes.

A
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place
where I would like to have a home is one of the islands of Greece, Santorini. It is a
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place
with breathtaking scenery where sandy beach stretches along the skyline. Santorini is a city of quaint
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old
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buildings
surrounded by narrow cobbled
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streets
, where the update has been
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kept
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old
traditions. The majority of
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buildings
in this area
are covered
by white and blue
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colours
, what gives to the city spectacular view.

If I am not mistaken a few years ago while watching a TV program I heard
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some
information about this
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place
that impacts me and then I
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started
to search something about this city on the internet.

Actually
, my dream came true last year, when I travelled to the Greece and could
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see
this wonderful
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place
which was much more attractive than I
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used
to dream. If I will
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get
a chance to have a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
and
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lived
there, I am going to accept it and run over there once and for all. I
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think
I can set up a business there and
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make
a
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big
money. Feeling stream winds, walking on golden sands, and every day
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watch
at the panoramic beach that
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interflows
with blue horizon can be the essential reason why I will choose to
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live
there.
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[
by
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Отправлено
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Model Answer
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2: Living
in the present days,
especially
at a calm and quiet
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place
has become difficult. It is
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because
of the extended population across the countries.
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But
still
, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
serene
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places
where one can
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make
a home of
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own
to lead a happy and peaceful life. I will
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describe
such a
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place
from
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New
Zealand.

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Invercargill
is one of the most prominent
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cities
of
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New
Zealand. Despite being a city, this is the
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place
where one can find the peace of mind. This is one of the southernmost city of the world as
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well
. The city
is encircled
with plains and rivers and
thus
has
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got
an attractive look. The city has stunning
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streets
and
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places
for the citizens. On the other side, the rate of troubles is
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reduced
in this city. It appears to me that this is a perfect city for a peace loving human like me.

The entire locality
is filled
with calmness. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
streets
are
nicely
decorated and take various looks in seasons.
Furthermore
, the city has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
rich
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
farmland and
they
also
provide a stunning view from a distance. The large conservation lands are the other feature of this city.
Besides
, this is a commercial
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centre
for the Southland region where a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
number of
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to
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shop
their daily necessaries and
also
marking various occasions. The
beautifully
decorated
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streets
are named
after the rivers which are
also
attractive. The
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place
also
contains a less population than it
was supposed
to be.
As a result
, the city is not crowded like the other
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cities
.
Moreover
, the citizens are peace loving and do not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
involved into any unwanted troubles. They abide by the law completely. The transportation system is
also
advanced and accessible through various routes railway, road and air links. Everything is in the
right
position of this city which has increased the beauty of this gorgeous city,
naturally
.

I
first
came to
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know
about the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
place
through the internet. In fact, I had been seeking a suitable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
place
for me and my family to settle down in out my native land.
As a result
, I had been looking for a suitable city or
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
place
where I could
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live
happily
. While I was searching for
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New
Zealand, I came to
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know
about the city.
Actually
, this is
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one
the top
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cities
of the country to
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live
in
happily
. The features and natural beauties have attracted me. I have already visited the
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place
several times and decided to
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buy
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some
suitable
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places
for my home. If everything goes
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well
, I would be able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
a piece of land in the city by June
next
. Then I will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
for
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building
my two-storied home for me and my family.

Yes, definitely I
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have to
do something for
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living
there.
So
, I have planned to continue my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
business there. In fact, I
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own
a medium-sized
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coffee
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shop
in Sydney.
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But
this is a
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very
noisy and crowded
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place
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now
.
So
, I have planned to shift from here and run my
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coffee
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shop
in
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Invercargill
. I have
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seen
several
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coffee
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shops
which are unable to
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meet
the growing demands of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.
So
, I have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
a
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new
plan and I will implement that with the
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coffee
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shop
.
Therefore
, I
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think
working will not be a problem for me. I
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think
the local
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
in the city will support me for my decent
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living
.
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beautiful
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place
you
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know
about.
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you would like to visit.
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you have recently visited.
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22Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
71Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a place where you would like to have a home. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
10 paragraphs
963 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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