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Describe a picnic spot or a recreational public spot that you visited and liked. v.1

Describe a picnic spot or a recreational public spot that you visited and liked. v. 1
Describe a picnic spot or a recreational public spot that you visited and liked. You should say: what is it, and where it is located what are the attractive things for the visitors there why people like it and who are the regular visitors there and explain how does the place or spot influence people. Follow-up Questions: What's the importance of picnic spots as recreational places? Say the names of recreational places/ spots you heard about? Why do we need recreation? Can you tell about some recreational spots that are absent in your country but are common in other countries? What are the most recreational places in your country?   Model Answer 1: Not sure about others, but I like to enjoy a picnic with my friends and co-workers, and I must say that I have always been lucky to arrange a nice picnic spot for us whenever having a picnic. Today, I would like to talk about one such picnic spot that I visited about a few years ago and liked. The picnic spot, I am talking about, was located at a natural park with a lake on both sides. Of course, it was not really very close to where I lived back then as I needed to drive about an hour to arrive there. But, it was worth the drive as it was a very beautiful location with lots of trees around. It was a rather large area with several picnic spots scattered all over the place. It was essentially two picnic sites on both sides of the lake which was connected by a very old but strongly built wooden bridge.   Anyway, people of all ages, professions and backgrounds would visit this beautiful area, mainly because it offered peace and serenity like no other places around. The chirping of birds, watching the crystal clear lake from above the wooden bridge, and the sound of gentle breeze from the trees were just too perfect of an incentive to encourage people to visit this place in order to escape from the hustling bustling of city life. However, some of the most attractive things about this picnic spot were that it looked very well maintained, and all its facilities there, like playgrounds and cafes, maintained safe distances among them so that people there wouldn’t get bothered by the noise made by them. Anyway, this place influences people in a very positive way as it allows them to enjoy their time in a very peaceful and quiet environment. This picnic spot offers a very distinct advantage to all of its visitors as it is large enough to accommodate plenty of visitors but also small enough to watch each other enjoying the little things, like giggling of children or fighting rabbits, of life without any hurry.   Sample Answer 2: Picnics are a great way to get outside and socialise with friends. I’m lucky because there are lots of good places near me where people can relax, play, chat and have a picnic if they wish. I can think of one favourite place. I’ll tell you where it is and what it’s like and try and make you understand why it is so appealing to me and lots of other visitors too. I actually think the place has quite an important role in our local community, and maybe you will understand why after my little talk. The place is Endcliffe Park in Sheffield. It is a city park, by which I mean it is close to urban areas, surrounded by residential streets and local shops. However, the park itself is lovely. It is quite big, about 37 acres, big enough to have streams running through it, patches of woodland, a duck pond, mown areas where people can play ball games and plenty of benches where you can sit and watch the world go by. It’s well maintained by the local council and has other facilities – including loos and a very nice independent café. In the summer months, there is often an ice-cream van parked up, and at weekends and bank holidays a local guy puts up a bouncy castle and a miniature children’s carousel for children to play on. There is a small playground with swings and climbing frames, and recently, the council even incorporated a new parkour area. This is a special structure of climbing frames and walls where people can practise the sport of free-running in urban areas. It is incredible to watch. I love this park because it is really well used. I’m a great one for people watching. You can head down there with a sandwich, find yourself a bench and sit and watch the world go by. There are always families out feeding the ducks; children on their bikes or scooters; joggers sprinting by; dog-walkers. Sometimes you will see a school party pond-dipping or bravely crossing one of the sets of stepping stones. Often photographers will set up elaborate tripods there to try and get photos of the wildlife – there are lots of squirrels and birds, including a dramatic heron (a large stork-like a bird) which fishes in the pond, or the colourful tiny kingfishers that favour the running water of the streams. Local fitness instructors run outdoor boot-camps there, so you will see puffing people doing press-ups and looking like they’ve rather regretted signing up for their exercise class that morning! I think you can see why I like it so much and appreciate all the many attractions that are there for visitors of all ages and backgrounds to enjoy. In terms of how the spot influences people, I think it just really brings the community together. Everyone who lives locally uses it. If ever I go out for a walk there, as I do quite often, I will always bump into someone I know. People use the café as a base for setting up community campaigns – like saving local trees or fundraising for charities. It is also a great location for many local events, particularly running ones. Endcliffe Park hosts my local Parkrun (a 5km weekly jog each Saturday morning) as well as being the start of lots of off-road running races that are held throughout the year. Because it is a big open space, it even hosts funfairs, music festivals and circuses – I don’t really like circuses, to be honest, but it illustrates the point of how well-used space is as a venue.   On a daily basis, people use the park as a short cut to get to work in the city. It is great to be able to appreciate the trees and changing seasons on a walk to go to the shops or get to the office. This park is one of many that fall within the city boundaries. It is one of the reasons that Sheffield is known as the greenest city in the UK. You should come and visit and find out for yourself. There are other more remote places you can go to enjoy the countryside and be alone in the heather and the hills. Those are beautiful destinations too. But for me, my local park is just brilliant, it’s practically on my doorstep and a window on the world. I am so lucky to have this picnic and recreation spot nearby, I try never to take it for granted, but always take the time to really look at what surrounds me when I pass through. [ Written by - Lucy Marris:   Careers Adviser (UK), TEFL teacher (Vietnam) ]
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Describe
a
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picnic
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spot
or a
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recreational
public
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spot
that you visited and liked. You should say: what is it, and where it
is located
what are the attractive things for the
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visitors
there why
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people
like it and who are the regular
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how does the
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or
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spot
influence
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people
. Follow-up Questions: What's the importance of
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picnic
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spots
as
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recreational
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places
? Say the names of
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recreational
places/
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spots
you heard about? Why do we need recreation? Can you
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tell
about
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some
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spots
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but
are common in
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other
countries? What are the most
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places
in your country?
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Model Answer 1: Not sure about others,
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but
I like to
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enjoy
a
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picnic
with my friends and co-workers, and I
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must
say that I have always been lucky to arrange a nice
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for us whenever having a
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.
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, I would like to talk about one such
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picnic
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spot
that I visited about a few years ago and liked.

The
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picnic
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spot
, I am talking about,
was located
at a natural
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park
with a lake on both sides.
Of course
, it was not
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really
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very
close to where I
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lived
back then as I needed to drive about an hour to arrive there.
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, it was worth the drive as it was a
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very
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beautiful
location with
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lots
of
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trees
around.

It was a
rather
large
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area
with several
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picnic
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spots
scattered all over the
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place
. It was
essentially
two
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picnic
sites on both sides of the lake which
was connected
by a
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very
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old
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but
strongly
built wooden bridge.
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Anyway
,
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people
of all ages, professions and backgrounds would visit this
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beautiful
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area
,
mainly
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because
it offered peace and serenity like no
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other
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places
around. The chirping of birds, watching the crystal
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clear
lake from above the wooden bridge, and the sound of gentle breeze from the
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trees
were
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just
too perfect of an incentive to encourage
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people
to visit this
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place
in order to escape from the hustling bustling of city life.

However
,
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some
of the most attractive things about this
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picnic
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spot
were that it looked
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very
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well
maintained, and all its facilities there, like playgrounds and
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cafes
, maintained safe distances among them
so
that
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people
there wouldn’t
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get
bothered by the noise made by them.

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, this
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place
influences
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people
in a
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very
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positive
way as it
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allows
them to
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enjoy
their time in a
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very
peaceful and quiet environment. This
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picnic
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spot
offers a
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very
distinct advantage to all of its
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visitors
as it is large
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enough
to accommodate
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plenty
of
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visitors
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but
also
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small
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enough
to
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watch
each
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other
enjoying the
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little
things, like giggling of
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children
or fighting rabbits, of life without any hurry.
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Sample Answer 2:
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Picnics
are a
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great
way to
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get
outside and
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socialise
with friends. I’m lucky
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because
there are
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lots
of
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good
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places
near me where
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people
can relax, play, chat and have a
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picnic
if they wish. I can
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think
of one
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favourite
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place
.
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I
’ll
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tell
you where it is and what it’s like and
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try and
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make
you understand why it is
so
appealing to me and
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lots
of
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other
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visitors
too.
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actually
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the
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has quite an
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important
role in our
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local
community, and maybe you will understand why after my
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little
talk. The
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place
is
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Endcliffe
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Park
in Sheffield. It is a city
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park
, by which
I mean
it is close to urban
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areas
, surrounded by residential streets and
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local
shops.
However
, the
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park
itself is lovely. It is quite
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big
, about 37 acres,
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big
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enough
to have streams
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running
through it, patches of woodland, a duck pond, mown
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areas
where
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people
can play ball games and
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plenty
of benches where you can sit and
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watch
the world go by. It’s
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well
maintained by the
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local
council and has
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other
facilities
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–
including loos and a
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very
nice independent café. In the summer months, there is
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often
an ice-cream van parked up, and at weekends and bank holidays a
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local
guy puts up a bouncy castle and a miniature
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children’s
carousel for
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children
to play on. There is a
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small
playground with swings and climbing frames, and recently, the council even incorporated a new parkour
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area
. This is a special structure of climbing frames and walls where
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people
can
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practise
the sport of free-running in urban
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areas
. It is incredible to
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watch
. I
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love
this
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park
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because
it is
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really
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well
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used
. I’m a
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great
one for
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people
watching. You can head down there with a sandwich, find yourself a bench and sit and
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watch
the world go by. There are always families out feeding the ducks;
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children
on their bikes or scooters; joggers sprinting by; dog-walkers.
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Sometimes
you will
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see
a school party pond-dipping or
bravely
crossing one of the sets of stepping stones.
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Often
photographers will set up elaborate tripods there to
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try and
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get
photos of the wildlife
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–
there are
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lots
of squirrels and birds, including a dramatic heron (a large stork-like a bird) which fishes in the pond, or the
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colourful
tiny kingfishers that
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favour
the
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running
water of the streams.
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Local
fitness instructors run outdoor boot-camps there,
so
you will
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see
puffing
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people
doing press-ups and looking like they’ve
rather
regretted signing up for their exercise
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class
that morning! I
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think
you can
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see
why I like it
so
much and appreciate all the
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many
attractions that are there for
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visitors
of all ages and backgrounds to
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enjoy
. In terms of how the
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spot
influences
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people
, I
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think
it
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just
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really
brings the community together. Everyone who
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lives
locally
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uses
it. If ever I go out for a walk there, as I do quite
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often
, I will always bump into someone I know.
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People
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use
the café as a base for setting up community campaigns
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–
like saving
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local
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trees
or fundraising for charities. It is
also
a
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great
location for
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many
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local
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events
,
particularly
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running
ones.
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Endcliffe
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Park
hosts my
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local
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Parkrun
(a
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5km
weekly jog each Saturday morning) as
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well
as being the
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start
of
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lots
of off-road
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running
races that
are held
throughout the year.
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Because
it is a
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big
open space, it even hosts funfairs, music festivals and circuses
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–
I don’t
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really
like circuses, to be honest,
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but
it illustrates the point of how
well
-
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used
space is as a venue.
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On a daily basis,
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people
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use
the
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park
as a short
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cut
to
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get
to work in the city. It is
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great
to be able to appreciate the
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trees
and changing seasons on a walk to go to the shops or
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get
to the office. This
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park
is one of
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many
that fall within the city boundaries. It is one of the reasons that Sheffield
is known
as the greenest city in the UK. You should
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come
and visit and find out for yourself. There are
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other
more remote
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places
you can go to
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enjoy
the countryside and be alone in the heather and the hills. Those are
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beautiful
destinations too.
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for me, my
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local
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park
is
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just
brilliant, it’s
practically
on my doorstep and a window on the world. I am
so
lucky to have this
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picnic
and recreation
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spot
nearby, I try never to take it for granted,
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but
always take the time to
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really
look at what surrounds me when I pass through.
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Written by
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-
Lucy
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Marris
:
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Careers Adviser (UK), TEFL teacher (Vietnam)
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10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
137Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
29Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a picnic spot or a recreational public spot that you visited and liked. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
5 paragraphs
1254 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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