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Describe a stressful day at school/ university/ work. v.1

Describe a stressful day at school/ university/ work. v. 1
Describe a stressful day at school/ university/ work. You should say: how the day started how things went wrong who was around you and explain why it was such a stressful day.   Model Answer 1: Whether we like it or not, stress is a part of our daily life. Of course, this pressure doesn’t become much of an issue for some people while, for others, it can have some very negative effects on their life. Anyway, with or without negative effects, I also have to deal with stressful days at work, and today I would like to talk about one such day. The day started perfectly well as I woke up at the right time in that morning like every other day and arrived at the office also just on time. But as soon as I started to work on my scheduled task list, I found out that my email was not working. But, I needed to open my emails badly because there were some important files and documents which I needed to download to prepare an urgent sales audit report for our corporate head office. After trying a while, I gave up to open my email and straight headed to the room of our IT guy, only to find out that the IT guy had called sick and that he wouldn’t come to the office for the whole day. While waiting nervously, my Managing Director suddenly asked me to see him in his room, and I immediately knew that something was wrong.   In fact, he reprimanded me because my junior product manager, working under my supervision, had sent the wrong product to one of our clients, and the client had informed my MD about the mistake. My boss also told me that I, as a senior manager, was also responsible for the mistake. Later on, I just kept wishing that the day would just pass by as soon as possible with no more stress to deal with. Anyway, it was a stressful day for me because I was not able to do my works the way I was supposed to do. Besides, I was also lagging behind the schedules for the other important tasks. It was stressful even more also because I couldn’t actually find anybody to help me out to get the job done properly.
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Describe
a
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stressful
day at school/ university/
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work
. You should say: how the day
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started
how things went
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wrong
who was around you and
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explain
why it was such a
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stressful
day.
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Model Answer 1:

Whether we like it or not,
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stress
is a part of our daily life.
Of course
, this pressure doesn’t become much of an issue for
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some
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people
while, for others, it can have
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some
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very
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negative
effects on their life.
Anyway
, with or without
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negative
effects, I
also
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have to
deal with
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stressful
days at
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work
, and
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today
I would like to talk about one such day.

The day
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started
perfectly
well
as I woke up at the
right
time in that morning like every other day and arrived at the office
also
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just
on time.
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But
as
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soon
as I
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started
to
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work
on my scheduled task list, I found out that my email was not working.
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But
, I needed to open my emails
badly
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because
there were
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some
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important
files and documents which I needed to download to prepare an urgent sales audit report for our corporate head office. After trying a while, I gave up to open my email and straight headed to the room of our IT guy,
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only
to find out that the IT guy had called sick and that he wouldn’t
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come
to the office for the whole day.

While waiting
nervously
, my Managing Director
suddenly
asked me to
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see
him in his room, and I immediately knew that something was
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wrong
.
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In fact, he reprimanded me
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because
my junior product manager, working under my supervision, had
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sent
the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
wrong
product to one of our clients, and the client had informed my MD about the mistake. My boss
also
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told
me that I, as a senior manager, was
also
responsible for the mistake. Later on, I
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just
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kept
wishing that the day would
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just
pass by as
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soon
as possible with no more
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stress
to deal with.

Anyway
, it was a
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stressful
day for me
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because
I was not able to do my works the way I
was supposed
to do.
Besides
, I was
also
lagging behind the schedules for the other
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important
tasks. It was
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stressful
even more
also
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because
I couldn’t
actually
find anybody to
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help
me out to
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get
the job done
properly
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a stressful day at school/ university/ work. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
5 paragraphs
389 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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