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Describe someone you know who enjoys outdoor activities. v.1

Describe someone you know who enjoys outdoor activities. v. 1
Describe someone you know who enjoys outdoor activities. You should say: who the person is what outdoor activities he/she does how often he/she does outdoor activities and explain why you think he/she enjoys outdoor activities. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ] Model Answer: I think that we all know a person or two within our friend or family circle who doesn't like to stay at his or her home because he/she loves outdoor activities too much. Of course, the opposite could be true as well. But, today, I would like to talk about one such person, my cousin actually, who likes to enjoy outdoors in a rather unusual manner. Visiting the bedroom of John for the first time would give anybody the impression that it is a “mini weather lab” with all kinds of household weather measurement instruments, such as barometer (an instrument that measures the atmospheric pressure), hygrometer (a device that measures the humidity in the air) and “Rain Gauge” (a device that is used to measure the amount of rain) and other instruments, laying either on the floor or tables, or hanging on the walls. You will also find different kinds of weather charts, prepared by my self-declared “meteorologist” cousin, hanging on the walls. So, what all these have to do with the outdoor activities of John?   Well, the answer is, he likes to get out and check how the changes in the daily weather affect the trees, lakes, soil and grass, among other elements of mother nature. And to do so, he spends hours, walking/travelling to different natural sites, to come up with his own “hypothesis” as far as the effects of weather changes are concerned. So, how often does he take on these outdoor “activities”? Well, let’s just say that he is as “unpredictable” as the “weather” itself. I think that my cousin genuinely enjoys his outdoor activities because they allow him to interact with Mother Nature in different states at different times and seasons. Besides, these outdoor activities keep him rather busy on an intellectual level when there is nothing constructive to do. Finally, I think that he truly enjoys them because these activities allow him to contribute on the daily local newspapers from time to time in order to let others know about his own ideas on the changes of the climate as a whole.
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someone
you know
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who
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enjoys
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outdoor
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activities
. You should say:
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who
the person is what
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outdoor
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activities
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he/she
does how
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often
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he/she
does
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outdoor
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activities
and
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explain
why you
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think
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he/she
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enjoys
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outdoor
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activities
. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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]
Model Answer: I
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think
that we all know a person or two within our friend or family circle
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who
doesn't
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like
to stay at
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his or her
home
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because
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he/she
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loves
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outdoor
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activities
too much.
Of course
, the opposite could be true as
well
.
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But
,
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today
, I would
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like
to talk about one such person, my cousin
actually
,
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who
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likes
to
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enjoy
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outdoors
in a
rather
unusual manner.

Visiting the bedroom of John for the
first
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time
would give anybody the impression that it is a “mini
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weather
lab” with all kinds of household
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weather
measurement instruments, such as barometer (an instrument that measures the atmospheric pressure), hygrometer (a device that measures the humidity in the air) and “Rain Gauge” (a device
that is
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used
to measure the amount of rain) and other instruments, laying either on the floor or tables, or hanging on the walls. You will
also
find
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different
kinds of
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weather
charts, prepared by my self-declared “meteorologist” cousin, hanging on the walls.
So
, what all these
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have to
do with the
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outdoor
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activities
of John?
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Well
, the answer is, he
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likes
to
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get
out and
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check
how the
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changes
in the daily
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weather
affect the trees, lakes, soil and grass, among other elements of mother nature. And to do
so
, he spends hours, walking/travelling to
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different
natural sites, to
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come
up with his
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own
“hypothesis” as far as the effects of
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weather
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changes
are concerned
.
So
, how
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often
does he take on these
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outdoor
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“activities”
?
Well
,
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let
’s
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just
say that he is as “unpredictable” as the
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“weather”
itself.

I
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think
that my cousin
genuinely
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enjoys
his
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outdoor
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activities
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because
they
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allow
him to interact with Mother Nature in
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different
states at
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different
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times
and seasons.
Besides
, these
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outdoor
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activities
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keep
him
rather
busy on an intellectual level when there is nothing constructive to do.
Finally
, I
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think
that he
truly
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enjoys
them
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because
these
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activities
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allow
him to contribute on the daily local newspapers from
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time
to
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time
in order to
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let
others know about his
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own
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ideas
on the
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changes
of the climate as a whole.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
56Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe someone you know who enjoys outdoor activities. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
3 paragraphs
424 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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