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Describe a memorable childhood experience. v.1

Describe a memorable childhood experience. v. 1
Describe a memorable childhood experience. You should say: who was with you where it took place what you did and explain why it is such a memorable childhood experience.   Model Answer 1: Iran, my country, is a land of vast deserts, majestic mountains and verdant valleys with rushing streams, where we enjoy life to the fullest. I am really proud to have an opportunity to grow up in this country as a girl where I have gone through a lot of memorable experiences as a child. Today, I would like to share one such memorable experience here. About 15 years ago, when I was a young child, there was a traditional family gathering at my home after a marriage ceremony. Many of my family members had gathered at my house to enjoy the "get-together" event and some of them were enjoying their little talks among each other while the others were enjoying playing “Iranian rummy” (card game) with each other in a group. The group, which was playing rummy, had 6 people in it, including my mother and aunt. By the way, as a child, I had always wanted to play that interesting card game, but my parents, especially my mother, never allowed me to learn it because I was too young to play that game.   So, all I used to do was enjoy the game just by sitting close to the rummy players. However, knowing that my request to join the game with my mother would get flatly denied, I still requested her to let me play with them. And, that’s when I got the most surprising and pleasing response from my mother, as she actually allowed me to play the rummy with her for the first time, which made me feel like I was jumping in the moon with joy and happiness. Anyway, it is one of the most memorable childhood experiences, primarily because it made me feel for the first time, that I was actually growing up as a girl. Besides, the experience also allowed me the opportunity to enjoy the game by actually playing it with others instead of enjoying it from distance. Besides, I would never forget the night when my mother looked at me with a very loving and motherly smile on her face after seeing me happy.   Sample Answer 2: Childhood is a time when everything is magical and pleasant. The possibility and dreams are vast and things become happier in childhood. Everybody has childhood memories and among them some are pleasant and some are sad. I have various childhood memories and I would like to talk about my childhood memory related to my first day at school. I was about 5 years old when my parents got me admitted to a local school. I had a fascination of going to school from 3-4 years as I recall and when my father finally announced that I'll get admitted in the coming January, I felt like being in heaven. I imagined the school would be a great place and I would have lots of friends and I would study there. On the day, my parents took me to the school that I saw in the past many times from outside but never entered. After entering the school, I find myself anxious about everything. I was unsure what to do, who to talk to, what to do when the teachers would ask questions and many such things. After my father submitted some necessary papers and fees to the admission department, they gave me new books, a temporary Identity Card and a syllabus. I started feeling comfortable after I found that some of our neighbouring kids were already in this very school and they came to me and talked to me. This took place in my hometown where I grew up and I had been to this school for the next 4 years. To my surprise, one of the teachers asked my parents to leave me and told me to attend the classes. I was not at all prepared to join the class but I found I had little choice over that. My parents spent a few times and advised me how to behave, how to listen to teachers and many more tips. After my parents abandoned me, I was frightened for a few moments and sat at a corner of the class. The teacher asked to come forward and introduce myself. I found I was unable to walk and talk. But in a few minutes, my hesitation got away and I was talking about myself. The teacher appreciated me and some of the new classmates came forward and greeted me. I started enjoying the class and teachers and found that I started loving my school. Later on, I got admitted to college, university and many other places but the memory of the first day at primary school was totally different and I still remember the day evidently.     Tips for answering this cue card topic:   You are asked to talk about any event from your childhood which you still remember. This event does not have to be a big event like a sporting success or a visit to a famous place. You can talk about virtually anything that you think was interesting and you can describe comfortably. Try to talk about something that you would be able to talk fluently. While in the phase of 1-2 minutes for the cue card, many things from your childhood might pop-up in your mind. But pick the thing that you would be able to talk in details. Some of the common things that we usually remember from our childhood are presented in the following list, and this list is made to help you generate some ideas to talk about: 1. Your first day at school. 2. Your own birthday celebration that you enjoyed. 3. A fight with a friend! 4. A brave thing you did as a child. 5. An expected gift that you got. 6. Something interesting you did. 7. Something naughty you did. 8. A dangerous experience from your childhood. Not necessarily you have to talk about an interesting and enjoyable thing from your childhood. You can talk about any negative experience you have had in your childhood; like, the death of a relative could be a memorable event that you can’t forget. Try to make the description interesting and give the impression that you are reciting your memory. Being able to give much detail about the experience and making the topic interesting would help you get a good score. If you can answer this cue card topic, you should also be able to talk about the following topics: 1. Describe one of the happy memories in your life. 2. Describe a memorable event of your life. 3. Describe a childhood friend. 4. Describe a celebration that you enjoyed. 5. Talk about your first day at school. 6. Describe a negative experience you had in your childhood.
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Describe
a
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memorable
childhood
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experience
. You should say: who was with you where it took
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place
what you did and
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explain
why it is such a
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memorable
childhood
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experience
.
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Model Answer 1: Iran, my country, is a land of vast deserts, majestic mountains and verdant valleys with rushing streams, where we
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enjoy
life to the fullest. I am
really
proud to have an opportunity to grow up in this country as a girl where I have gone through
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a lot of
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memorable
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experiences
as a
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child
.
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Today
, I would like to share one such
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memorable
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experience
here.

About 15 years ago, when I was a young
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child
, there was a traditional family gathering at my home after a marriage ceremony.
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Many
of my family members had gathered at my
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house
to
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enjoy
the
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"
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get
-together
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"
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event
and
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some
of them were
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enjoying
their
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little
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talks
among each
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other
while the others were
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enjoying
playing “Iranian rummy”
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(card
game) with each
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other
in a group. The group, which was playing rummy, had 6
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people
in it, including my
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mother
and aunt. By the way, as a
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child
, I had always wanted to
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play
that
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interesting
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card
game,
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but
my
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parents
,
especially
my
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mother
, never
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allowed
me to learn it
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because
I was too young to
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play
that game.
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So
, all I
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used
to do was
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enjoy
the game
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just
by sitting close to the rummy players.
However
, knowing that my request to
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join
the game with my
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mother
would
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get
flatly
denied, I
still
requested her to
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let
me
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play
with them. And, that’s when I
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got
the most surprising and pleasing response from my
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mother
, as she
actually
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allowed
me to
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play
the rummy with her for the
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first
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time
, which made me feel like I was jumping in the moon with joy and happiness.

Anyway
, it is one of the most
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memorable
childhood
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experiences
,
primarily
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because
it made me feel for the
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first
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time
, that I was
actually
growing up as a girl.
Besides
, the
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experience
also
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allowed
me the opportunity to
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enjoy
the game by
actually
playing it with others
instead
of
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enjoying
it from distance.
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Besides
, I would never forget the night when my
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mother
looked at me with a
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very
loving and
motherly
smile on her face after seeing me happy.
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Sample Answer 2: Childhood is a
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time
when everything is magical and pleasant. The possibility and dreams are vast and things become happier in childhood. Everybody has childhood
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memories
and among them
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some
are pleasant and
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some
are sad. I have various childhood
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memories
and I would like to
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talk
about my childhood
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memory
related to my
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first
day at school.

I was about 5 years
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old
when my
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parents
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got
me admitted to a local
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school
.
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I
had a fascination of going to
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school
from 3-4 years as I recall and when my father
finally
announced that I'll
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get
admitted in the coming January, I felt like being in heaven.

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I
imagined the
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school
would be a great
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place
and I would have lots of friends and I would study there. On the day, my
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parents
took me to the
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school
that I
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saw
in the past
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many
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times
from outside
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but
never entered. After entering the
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school
, I find myself anxious about everything.

I was unsure what to do, who to
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talk
to, what to do when the
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teachers
would ask questions and
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many
such things. After my father submitted
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some
necessary papers and fees to the admission department, they gave me new books, a temporary Identity
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Card
and a syllabus. I
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started
feeling comfortable after I
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found
that
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some
of our
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neighbouring
kids were already in this
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very
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school and
they came to me and talked to me. This took
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place
in my hometown where I grew up and I had been to this
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school
for the
next
4 years. To my surprise, one of the
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teachers
asked my
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parents
to
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leave
me and
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told
me to attend the
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classes
. I was not at all prepared to
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join
the
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class
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but
I
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found
I had
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little
choice over that. My
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parents
spent a few
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times
and advised me how to behave, how to listen to
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teachers
and
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many
more tips. After my
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parents
abandoned me, I
was frightened
for a few moments and sat at a corner of the
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class
. The
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teacher
asked to
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come
forward and introduce myself. I
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found
I was unable to walk and
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talk
.
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But
in a few minutes, my hesitation
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got
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away and
I was talking about myself.

The
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teacher
appreciated me and
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some of the
new classmates came forward and greeted me. I
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started
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enjoying
the
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class
and
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teachers
and
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found
that I
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started
loving my
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school
. Later on, I
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got
admitted to college, university and
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many
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other
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places
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but
the
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memory
of the
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first
day at primary
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school
was
totally
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different
and I
still
remember the day
evidently
.
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Tips for answering this cue
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card
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topic
:
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You
are asked
to
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talk
about any
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event
from your childhood which you
still
remember. This
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event
does not
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have to
be a
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big
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event
like a sporting success or a visit to a
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famous
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place
. You can
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talk
about
virtually
anything that you
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think
was
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interesting
and you can
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describe
comfortably
.

Try to
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talk
about something that you would be
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able
to
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talk
fluently
. While in the phase of 1-2 minutes for the cue
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card
,
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many
things from your childhood might pop-up in your mind.
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But
pick the thing that you would be
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able
to
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talk
in
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details
.

If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?
Some of the
common things that we
usually
remember from our childhood
are presented
in the following list, and this list
is made
to
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help
you generate
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some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
to
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talk
about:

1. Your
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first
day at
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school. 2
. Your
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own
birthday celebration that you enjoyed.

3. A fight with a friend!

4. A brave thing you did as a
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child. 5
. An
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expected
gift that you
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got. 6
. Something
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interesting
you did.

7. Something naughty you did.

8. A
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dangerous
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experience
from your childhood.

Not
necessarily
you
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have to
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talk
about an
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interesting
and enjoyable thing from your childhood. You can
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talk
about any
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negative
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experience
you have had in your childhood; like, the death of a relative could be a
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memorable
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event
that you can’t forget.

Try to
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make
the description
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interesting
and give the impression that you are reciting your
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memory
. Being
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able
to give much detail about the
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experience
and making the
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topic
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interesting
would
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help
you
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get
a
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good
score.

If you can answer this cue
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card
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topic
, you should
also
be
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able
to
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talk
about the following
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topics: 1
.
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Describe
one of the happy
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memories
in your life.

2.
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Describe
a
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memorable
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event
of your life.

3.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
a childhood friend.

4.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
a celebration that you enjoyed.

5.
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Talk
about your
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first
day at
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school. 6
.
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Describe
a
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negative
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experience
you had in your childhood.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
143Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a memorable childhood experience. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
26 paragraphs
1166 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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