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Describe a journey that took longer than you expected. v.1

Describe a journey that took longer than you expected. v. 1
Describe a journey that took longer than you expected. You should say: When you took the journey Where you went How you went there and explain why it took longer than expected. Model Answer: The journey that I would like to talk about took almost 3-4 times more than we expected and it was 2 years back when I was in the 2nd year in my university. After the semester break, one of our friends offered us to have a visit to his hometown which was near a very beautiful location with hills and rivers surrounding it. We were very fascinated to visit there because of the chance to visit this part of our country which is a very famous tourist spot. Apart from that we also wanted to enjoy our semester gap by visiting someplace we have never been to. My friend’s hometown was in (say a place name) and we started our journey at around 7: 30 am. It should have been a 6-7 hours journey and the first 2 hours went very well. We took a bus to go there and after 2 hours we noticed a heavy traffic in front of us. The bus was stuck at the same place for about an hour and we heard that there was an accident and that caused the bad traffic. After another 30 minutes, our bus started moving on but it was like slowly pacing in the sand. The speed was not more than 20 km/hour and we got really bored being in such a bad situation. The whole journey took around 22 hours and we were very frustrated to be caught in such a bad position. When we reached our friend’s house, we were all tired and I wished I did not decide to have the journey. Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as well: Describe a journey or tour you remember well.   Describe a journey that took a long.   Describe a rough journey you had.   Describe a city you would like to visit.   Describe a journey to one of your relative’s house.   Describe a journey you had in public transportation.
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journey
that
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took
longer than you
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expected
. You should say: When you
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took
the
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journey
Where you went How you went there and
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explain
why it
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took
longer than
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expected
. Model Answer:

The
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journey
that I would like to talk about
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took
almost 3-4 times more than we
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expected
and it was 2 years back when I was in the 2nd year in my university. After the semester break, one of our friends offered us to have a
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visit
to his hometown which was near a
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very
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beautiful
location with hills and rivers surrounding it. We were
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very
fascinated to
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visit
there
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because
of the chance to
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visit
this part of our country which is a
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very
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famous
tourist spot. Apart from that we
also
wanted to enjoy our semester gap by visiting someplace we have never been to.

My friend’s hometown was in (say a place name) and we
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started
our
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journey
at around 7: 30 am. It should have been a 6-7
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hours
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journey
and the
first
2
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hours
went
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very
well
. We
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took
a bus to go there and after 2
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hours
we noticed
Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply "heavy traffic".
a heavy traffic
in front of us. The bus
was stuck
at the same place for about an
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
hour and
we heard that there was an accident and that caused the
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bad
traffic. After another 30 minutes, our bus
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started
moving on
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but
it was like
slowly
pacing in the sand. The speed was not more than 20 km/
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hour and
we
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got
really
bored being in such a
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bad
situation. The whole
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journey
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took
around 22
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hours and
we were
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very
frustrated to
be caught
in such a
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bad
position. When we reached our friend’s
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house
, we were all tired and I wished I did not decide to have the
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journey
. Similar Cue Card Topics Your ability to talk about this Cue Card would enable you to talk about the following Cue Cards as
well
:
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a
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journey
or tour you remember
well
.
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a
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journey
that
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took
a long.
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Describe
a rough
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journey
you had.
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Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Describe
a city you would like to
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visit
.
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Describe
a
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journey
to one of your relative’s
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house
.
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Describe
a
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journey
you had in public transportation.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a journey that took longer than you expected. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
3 paragraphs
375 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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