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Describe a time when you showed or taught a young person how to do something. v.1

Describe a time when you showed or taught a young person how to do something. v. 1
Describe a time when you showed or taught a young person how to do something. You should say: who this person was what you have taught him/her whether he/she learnt what you taught and explain how you felt about teaching this young person. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer 1: Well, he was my nephew, and a young boy who was about 8 or 9 years old when I taught him something I thought was important to him. He was growing up and certainly wanted to do a lot of things in life, only to wake up to the “harsh” realities of life that things weren’t just as “easy” as he would have preferred. Still, of course, he just wished that he could actually learn to ride a bicycle on his own. So, as a “well-wishing” uncle, I just “wished” for him all the lucks that I had in my “store”, but, unfortunately, it wasn’t just enough. He just kept running out of his luck, and I was also running out of my “patience”.   Therefore, I decided to “intervene”. First, I explained a few “tricks” about holding a bicycle properly, followed by a “universal art” of how not to “cry” after “falling” on the ground with a bicycle on top. Then, of course, came the part where I taught our “future cycling hero” how to paddle properly while maintaining the body balance at the same time. However, it was one of those situations where one would get to say “it is easy to say but difficult to do” kind of things, and my “struggling” nephew figured that out as well. So, despite my best efforts and “universally-accepted” cycling techniques, my good nephew kept failing and “falling”.   The “war” of keeping the cycle standstill on the ground, while paddling it, had continued for almost a week in this way with me, of course, occasionally “jumping” on it to display the “art and science” of riding a bicycle to encourage my nephew. Finally, my hard works as well as that of my nephew’s paid off, and my “student” was well on his way to grab a pack of cookies for me from one of the local shops by riding his bicycle without falling even once. When the “moment of success” finally had arrived, my nephew was just ecstatic as if he was flying on the moon with his bicycle. Needless to say, I was also very happy to see my nephew succeed. In fact, it was a great feeling to be able to teach someone to succeed in a difficult task and provide him/her with the much-needed confidence that one deserves. Besides, the very thought of my nephew, sharing his story of learning to ride a bicycle with his friends/family after he grows up, where I played an “important” role, was just gratifying and fulfilling. Finally, it was after this cycling lesson for my nephew, I realized how important it was for us adults to teach new things to our young ones because if we don’t, who else will!
Describe
a time when you
showed
or taught a
young
person how to do something. You should say: who this person was what you have taught him/her whether he/she
learnt
what you taught and
explain
how you felt about teaching this
young
person. [You will
have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
think
about what you are going to say. You can
make
some
notes to
help
you if you wish.
]
 
Model Answer 1:
Well
, he was my
nephew
, and a
young
boy who was about 8 or 9 years
old
when I taught him something I
thought
was
important
to him. He was growing up and
certainly
wanted to do
a lot of
things in life,
only
to wake up to the “harsh” realities of life that things weren’t
just
as “easy” as he would have preferred.
Still
,
of course
, he
just
wished that he could
actually
learn to ride a
bicycle
on his
own
.

So
, as a “
well
-wishing” uncle, I
just
“wished” for him all the lucks that I had in my “store”,
but
, unfortunately, it wasn’t
just
enough
. He
just
kept
running out of his luck, and I was
also
running out of my “patience”.
 
Therefore
, I decided to “intervene”.

First
, I
explained
a few “tricks” about holding a
bicycle
properly
, followed by a “universal art” of how not to “cry” after “falling” on the ground with a
bicycle
on top. Then,
of course
, came the part where I taught our “future cycling hero” how to paddle
properly
while maintaining the body balance at the same time.
However
, it was one of those situations where one would
get
to say “it is easy to say
but
difficult to do” kind of things, and my “struggling”
nephew
figured that out as
well
.
So
, despite my best efforts and “
universally
-
accepted
” cycling techniques, my
good
nephew
kept
failing and “falling”.
 
The “war” of keeping the cycle standstill on the ground, while paddling it, had continued for almost a week in this way with me,
of course
,
occasionally
“jumping” on it to display the “art and science” of riding a
bicycle
to encourage my nephew.

Finally
, my
hard
works as
well
as that of my
nephew’s
paid off, and my “student” was
well
on his way to grab a pack of cookies for me from one of the local shops by riding his
bicycle
without falling even once.

When the “moment of success”
finally
had arrived, my
nephew
was
just
ecstatic as if he was flying on the moon with his
bicycle
.
Needless to say
, I was
also
very
happy to
see
my
nephew
succeed. In fact, it was a great feeling to be able to teach someone to succeed in a difficult task and provide him/her with the much-needed confidence that one deserves.
Besides
, the
very
thought
of my
nephew
, sharing his story of learning to ride a
bicycle
with his friends/family after he grows up, where I played an “
important
” role, was
just
gratifying and fulfilling.
Finally
, it was after this cycling lesson for my
nephew
, I realized how
important
it was for us adults to teach new things to our
young
ones
because
if we don’t, who else will!
16Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe a time when you showed or taught a young person how to do something. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
5 paragraphs
544 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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