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Describe a funny incident that happened to you. v.1

Describe a funny incident that happened to you. v. 1
Describe a funny incident that happened to you. You should say:  what it was  how  it was funny  who was there with you and explain what you remember most about it.   Model Answer 1: I like to laugh and be happy whenever there is a reason for it. Cracking jokes makes us happy and so do many funny incidents which we experience in our daily life. However, today, I would like to talk about a funny incident that happened to me a while ago. The incident took place at a birthday party about a few years ago. It fact, it was a birthday party of one of my little nephews. Everybody, including all of my family members, relatives and the little friends of my nephews, was invited to the party on a lovely evening in order to enjoy the party. By the way, the party was supposed to be concluded as early as possible because all the little guests, friends of my nephew, needed to return to their homes safely before it was getting too late at night. So, the party formally started at around 8 pm with opening up the gift boxes ceremoniously. Once, we were done with opening the gift boxes, the time came for singing the “happy birthday to you” song, and we all sang the song in order to wish a very happy birthday to my nephew.   Finally, the moment, we all had been waiting for, finally had arrived, and we were ready to cut the birthday cake except, of course, the cake had already been cut! Without having a clue about what had really transpired, we all started to look at each other’s face until we suddenly noticed two little boys who were busy eating cake in a corner of the room. Once approached by me, the boys spared no time in divulging their secret about eating their “fair shares” of cakes with a very happy face instead of waiting for others! Needless, to say, we all burst into laughter. Anyway, what I really remember the most about the funny incident is that the boys, who decided to eat their “fair” shares of cakes, looked so confident and happy as if they really had achieved some extraordinary “feat” by managing to cut the birthday cake way ahead of others.      Sample Answer 2: The funny incident that I remember occurred was almost 2-3 years ago that I would like to describe. That time I was a student at a university and I was in my 7th semester. We had a group assignment and to collect data we went to some libraries after our class. In the evening, I found that my group members are complaining that they are hungry and they need to have some foods. I found them entering a restaurant and I went with them. One of my classmates ordered some foods directly to the waiter without looking at the menu and after we are done with our foods, I noticed that one of the group mates is asking the group leader to pay the bill. The group leader was astonished as he had not offered the meal and said that he did not have the money to pay the bill. I asked the waiter to bring the bill and we were thundered to look at the amount. It was much higher than the usual price. Though we were a bit worried, we started laughing and enjoying the whole thing. One of the classmates offered to collect all of our money and then pay the bill. We looked at our wallets, pockets & bags and collected the whole amount. There were so many changes and coins there that we had to calculate 2-3 times. But to our surprise, the total amount is still not sufficient to pay the bill. We started laughing and I proposed to two of the groupmates to give their cell phones and wrist watched as the alternatives of the bill. These two group mates got serious and were protesting that these would be an insane idea. Rest of us started enjoying their reaction as we found that they have actually taken this seriously.   One of your group mates proposed that we should pay the amount we have with us and ask the manager of the hotel to allow us time to pay the rest of the amount. I told them that the manager would not allow that and would call the police! We enjoyed the event, the dubious looks on some of your classmates and the fact that 2-3 of them have taken the whole thing very seriously and are actually got anxious. We stayed there for about 1 hour and noticed that people around us were giving surprising looks as we something very funny and interesting is going on among us. One of my group mates' house was nearby and he proposed that he would go home and bring the money and in the meantime, we would stay there until he arrives. We agreed and waited for him another20 minutes or so. In the meantime, one of the boys told that the classmates who left won’t come back! We laughed at the idea and acted as if it's going to happen for real.  After our classmates returned from home, he paid the bill (with some tips as well! ) and then we left the restaurant. We then left for our home and I took a taxi and paid the taxi fare from my home. I told the story to other classmates the next day and they found it very funny and interesting as well. This event became famous in our class and we often mentioned the funny things happened that day among us.
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Describe
a
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funny
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incident
that happened to you. You should say:
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what it was
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how
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it was
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funny
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 who
was there with you and
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explain
what you remember most about it.
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Model Answer 1: I like to laugh and be
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happy
whenever there is a reason for it. Cracking jokes
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makes
us
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happy
and
so
do
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many
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funny
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incidents
which we experience in our daily life.
However
,
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today
, I would like to talk about a
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funny
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incident
that happened to me a while ago. The
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incident
took place at a birthday
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party
about a few years ago.
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It
fact, it was a birthday
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party
of one of my
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little
nephews.

Everybody, including all of my family members, relatives and the
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little
friends of my nephews,
was invited
to the
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party
on a lovely evening in order to enjoy the
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party
. By the way, the
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party
was supposed
to
be concluded
as early as possible
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because
all the
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little
guests, friends of my nephew, needed to return to their
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homes
safely
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before
it was getting too late at night.
So
, the
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party
formally
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started
at around 8 pm with opening up the gift boxes
ceremoniously
. Once, we
were done
with opening the gift boxes, the
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time
came for singing the
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“happy
birthday to you” song, and we all sang the song in order to wish a
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very
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happy
birthday to my nephew.
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Finally
, the moment, we all had been waiting for,
finally
had arrived, and we were ready to
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cut
the birthday
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cake
except,
of course
, the
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cake
had already been
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cut
!

Without having a clue about what had
really
transpired, we all
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started
to
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look
at each
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other’s
face until we
suddenly
noticed two
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little
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boys
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who
were busy eating
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cake
in a corner of the room. Once approached by me, the
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boys
spared no
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time
in divulging their secret about eating their “
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fair
shares” of
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cakes
with a
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very
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happy
face
instead
of waiting for others! Needless, to say, we all burst into laughter.

Anyway
, what I
really
remember the most about the
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funny
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incident
is that the
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boys
,
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who
decided to eat their “
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fair
” shares of
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cakes
, looked
so
confident and
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happy
as if they
really
had achieved
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some
extraordinary “feat” by managing to
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cut
the birthday
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cake
way ahead of others.
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Sample Answer 2: The
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funny
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incident
that I remember occurred was almost 2-3 years ago that I would like to
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describe
. That
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time
I was a student at a
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university and
I was in my 7th semester. We had a
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group
assignment and to collect data we went to
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some
libraries after our
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class
. In the evening, I
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found
that my
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group
members are complaining that they are
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hungry and
they need to have
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some
foods. I
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found
them entering a restaurant and I
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went with
them. One of my
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classmates
ordered
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some
foods
directly
to the waiter without looking at the menu and after we
are done
with our foods, I noticed that one of the
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group
mates is asking the
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group
leader to
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pay
the
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bill
. The
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group
leader
was astonished
as he had not offered the meal and said that he did not have the money to
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pay
the
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bill
. I asked the waiter to bring the
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bill and
we
were thundered
to
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look
at the
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amount
. It was much higher than the usual price. Though we were a bit worried, we
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started
laughing and enjoying the whole thing. One of the
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classmates
offered to collect all of our money and then
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pay
the
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bill
. We looked at our wallets, pockets
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&amp
; bags and collected the whole
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amount
. There were
so
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many
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changes
and coins there that we had to calculate 2-3
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times
.
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But
to our surprise, the total
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amount
is
still
not sufficient to
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pay
the
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bill
. We
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started
laughing and I proposed to two of the
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groupmates
to give their cell phones and wrist
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watched
as the alternatives of the
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bill
. These two
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group
mates
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got
serious and were protesting that these would be an insane
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idea
. Rest of us
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started
enjoying their reaction as we
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found
that they have
actually
taken this
seriously
.
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One of your
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group
mates proposed that we should
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pay
the
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amount
we have with us and ask the manager of the hotel to
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allow
us
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time
to
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pay
the rest of the
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amount
. I
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told
them that the manager would not
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allow
that and would call the police! We enjoyed the
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event
, the dubious
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looks
on
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some
of your
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classmates
and the fact that 2-3 of them have taken the whole thing
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very
seriously
and are
actually
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got
anxious. We stayed there for about 1 hour and noticed that
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people
around us were giving surprising
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looks
as
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we something
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very
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funny
and interesting is going on among us. One of my
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group
mates'
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house
was
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nearby and
he proposed that he would go home and bring the money and in the meantime, we would stay there until he arrives. We
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agreed
and waited for him another20 minutes or
so
. In the meantime, one of the
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boys
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told
that the
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classmates
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who
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left
won’t
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come
back! We laughed at the
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idea
and acted as if it's going to happen for real.  After our
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classmates
returned from home, he paid the
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bill
(with
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some
tips as
well
!
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)
and then we
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left
the restaurant. We then
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left
for our home and I took a taxi and paid the taxi fare from my home. I
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told
the story to
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other
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classmates
the
next
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day and
they
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found
it
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very
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funny
and interesting as
well
. This
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event
became
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famous
in our
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class and
we
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often
mentioned the
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funny
things happened that day among us.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
98Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
19Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a funny incident that happened to you. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
4 paragraphs
959 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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