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Describe a peaceful place that you like. v.1

Describe a peaceful place that you like. v. 1
Describe a peaceful place that you like. You should say: where the place is what it looks like how did you come to know about this place and explain why you like that place.   Model Answer 1: Well, in this modern world, finding a peaceful place is sometimes difficult but luckily I happen to know one such place where I have been to a few times. The name of this place is called “Ladakh”, the highest plateau in the Indian state of Jammu and Kashmir and mostly isolated from the rest of the civilization. Some people call it “the land of snows” while the others call it “little Tibbet”. But, whatever they call it, Ladakh undoubtedly seems to be one of the most peaceful places on this earth to me, with its picturesque beauty, unique culture, Buddhist monasteries, stunning alpine lakes and amazing Himalaya mountain views in addition to the wonderful trekking routes. But, on the other hands, it is also freezing cold – so cold that even the boiling hot spring water freezes as soon as it oozes out of the ground - daylight is short, and can be very treacherous to travel during the winter. In fact, this region so remote and hostile that there’s a famous Ladakhi saying, which says that “The land is so barren and the passes so high that only our fiercest enemies or our best friends would want to visit us”. By the way, I learned about this beautiful and peaceful place on a popular TV travel show, and also by reading different travel journals. Anyway, I like this place because they are some of the friendliest people on this earth. In fact, the villagers in Ladakhi strongly disapproved of public displays of anger, disharmony, or discontent. They idealized a peaceful, united, harmonious community, free of conflict and anger. Conflict, they felt, is a manifestation of a society that is degenerate. Besides, when conflicts arise between villagers, they are resolved by the elected head of the village, called the “goba”, who listens to both sides of the case and makes a decision as to which of the parties may have to pay a fine or make restitution. Now, if a person is not able to find peace in such place with nobody really to poke their noses in his/her affairs, while also watching the beautiful snow and having a secret conversation with the sky, almost touching its earth, I don’t think that he/she will ever find peace anywhere else in this world.   Sample Answer 2: My grandfather's house is a peaceful place that I visit around 2-3 times a year and like very much. This is in the village (. . . say a village name. . . ). My grandfather’s house is a big house with lots of open spaces and a river is flowing nearby. In this big house only 3-4 people and 2-3 servants live as my grandparents are no longer in this world and my uncles, aunts are mostly living in different big cities. There are 7-8 rooms in the house and a big garden in front of the house. The servants take care of the garden and keep the place neat and clean. Since I live in a city and work for a big company where I have lots of responsibilities to perform, city life seems very busy and even sometimes chaotic to me. Whenever I visit my grandfather’s house, I get the impression that I have come to the most peaceful place in the world. I have not seen many places and have not travelled extensively but in my experience the peace and the mental tranquillity I enjoy being here are unmatched. One of the reasons can be my childhood memories; as I have spent my childhood at this very house and whenever I go there, lots of memories flashback and give me a pleasure that I do not get from elsewhere. I know this place from my childhood as I was born and grown up here. This place is quite different to me as I leave behind my busy life and come here to relax both mentally and physically. The memory of my departed grandparents, my childhood and other happy events are related to this place. I can get fresh air, meet some of my relatives, enjoy the country life and stay close to nature here and for all those reasons, I like this place very much.
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a
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that you like. You should say: where the
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is what it looks like how did you
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come
to know about this
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place
and
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explain
why you like that
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place
.
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Model Answer 1:
Well
, in this modern
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world
, finding a
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peaceful
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place
is
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sometimes
difficult
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but
luckily I happen to know one such
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place
where I have been to a few times.

The name of this
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place
is called
“
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Ladakh
”, the highest plateau in the Indian state of
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Jammu
and Kashmir and
mostly
isolated from the rest of the civilization.
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Some
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people
call it “the land of snows” while the others call it “
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little
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Tibbet
”.

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But
, whatever they call it,
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Ladakh
undoubtedly
seems to be one of the most
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peaceful
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places
on this earth to me, with its picturesque beauty, unique culture, Buddhist monasteries, stunning alpine lakes and amazing Himalaya mountain views
in addition
to the wonderful trekking routes.
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But
, on the other hands, it is
also
freezing
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cold
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–
so
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cold
that even the boiling hot spring water freezes as
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soon
as it oozes out of the ground
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-
daylight is short, and can be
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very
treacherous to travel during the winter. In fact, this region
so
remote and hostile that there’s a
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famous
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Ladakhi
saying, which says that “The land is
so
barren and the passes
so
high that
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only
our fiercest enemies or our best friends would want to visit us”. By the way, I learned about this
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beautiful
and
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peaceful
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place
on a popular TV travel
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show
, and
also
by reading
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different
travel journals.

Anyway
, I like this
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place
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because
they are
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some
of the friendliest
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people
on this earth. In fact, the villagers in
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Ladakhi
strongly
disapproved of public displays of anger, disharmony, or discontent. They idealized a
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peaceful
, united, harmonious community, free of conflict and anger. Conflict, they felt, is a manifestation of a society
that is
degenerate.
Besides
, when conflicts arise between villagers, they
are resolved
by the elected head of the village, called the “
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goba
”, who listens to both sides of the case and
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makes
a decision as to which of the parties may
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have to
pay a fine or
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make
restitution.

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Now
, if a person is not able to find peace in such
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place
with nobody
really
to poke their noses in his/her affairs, while
also
watching the
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beautiful
snow and having a secret conversation with the sky, almost touching its earth, I don’t
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think
that he/she will ever find peace anywhere else in this
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world
.
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Sample Answer 2:

My grandfather's
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house
is a
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peaceful
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place
that I visit around 2-3 times a year and like
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very
much. This is in the village (.
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.
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.
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say
a village name.
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.
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.
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)
. My grandfather’s
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house
is a
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big
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house
with lots of open spaces and a river is flowing nearby.

In this
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big
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house
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only
3-4
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people
and 2-3 servants
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live
as my grandparents are no longer in this
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world
and my uncles, aunts are
mostly
living in
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different
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big
cities. There are 7-8 rooms in the
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house
and a
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big
garden in front of the
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house
. The servants take care of the garden and
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keep
the
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place
neat and clean. Since I
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live
in a city and work for a
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big
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company
where I have lots of responsibilities to perform, city life seems
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very
busy and even
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sometimes
chaotic to me.

Whenever I visit my grandfather’s
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house
, I
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get
the impression that I have
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come
to the most
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peaceful
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place
in the
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world
. I have not
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seen
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many
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places
and have not travelled
extensively
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but
in my experience the peace and the mental
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tranquillity
I enjoy being here
are unmatched
. One of the reasons can be my childhood memories; as I have spent my childhood at this
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very
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house
and whenever I go there, lots of memories flashback and give me a pleasure that I do not
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get
from elsewhere.

I know this
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place
from my childhood as I
was born
and grown up here. This
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place
is quite
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different
to me as I
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leave
behind my busy life and
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come
here to relax both mentally and
physically
. The memory of my departed grandparents, my childhood and other happy
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events
are related
to this
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place
. I can
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get
fresh air,
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meet
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some
of my relatives, enjoy the country life and stay close to nature here and for all those reasons, I like this
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place
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very
much.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
43Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a peaceful place that you like. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
9 paragraphs
743 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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