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Describe a nation (not your own) that you know well. v.1

Describe a nation (not your own) that you know well. v. 1
Describe a nation (not your own) that you know well. You should say: which nation it is how you learned about this nation why you are interested in this nation and explain what you like most about this nation.   Model Answer 1: In this age of information and technology, it is almost impossible not to know about a nation or a country as famous and important as German. I am glad that I know about this country well enough to talk a thing or two about it. Well, it is not really necessary to introduce German anew. I started to learn about this great nation right after starting high school when I was studying Geography. Later on, I came to know a lot about it by reading newspapers, books, travel journals and watching TV programmes. From what I have learnt so far about this great country, I have no hesitation to suggest that German is one of the very few versatile countries among the league of nations, boasting over two millennia of history, which, for good and bad, shaped the world as we know it today. Especially, its tremendous impact in shaping the history of the world for the last century, after forcing two devastating world wars on the world, just can’t be denied. German is also a very beautiful country, and it has a deep-rooted and fascinating culture, which expresses itself in the architecture, in the music, in the literature, in the philosophy, in ways of thinking about the world and so on. In fact, sometimes, I am even tempted to think that there is actually no greater culture than the German one. German is also the largest economy in Europe. Anyway, I am interested in this country for a number of reasons, but the main reasons are its ingenuity and its ability to excel at many things, such as automobiles, electric appliances, and of course, efficiency. However, what I like most about German is that I think German is a great role model for other nations, especially, in its stunning economic success after the destruction of the 2nd world war. I also like the fact it has emerged as one of the most deeply rooted and stable democracies on the planet. Finally, I also like how this great nation has confronted the darkest aspects of its past – 2nd world war, by some astonishingly thorough, but remorseless soul-searching.
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Describe
a
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nation
(not your
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own
) that you
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know
well
. You should say: which
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nation
it is how you learned about this
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nation
why you
are interested
in this
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nation
and
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explain
what you like most about this
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nation
.
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Model Answer 1: In this age of information and technology, it is almost impossible not to
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know
about a
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nation
or a
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country
as
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famous
and
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important
as German. I am glad that I
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know
about this
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country
well
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enough
to talk a thing or two about it.

Well
, it is not
really
necessary to introduce German anew. I
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started
to learn about this
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great
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nation
right
after starting high school when I was studying Geography. Later on, I came to
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know
a lot about it by reading newspapers, books, travel journals and watching TV
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programmes
.

From what I have
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learnt
so
far about this
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great
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country
, I have no hesitation to suggest that German is one of the
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very
few versatile
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countries
among the league of
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nations
, boasting over two millennia of history, which, for
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good
and
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bad
, shaped the
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world
as we
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know
it
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today
.
Especially
, its tremendous impact in shaping the history of the
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world
for the last century, after forcing two devastating
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world
wars on the
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world
,
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just
can’t
be denied
.

German is
also
a
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very
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beautiful
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country
, and it has a deep-rooted and fascinating culture, which expresses itself in the architecture, in the music, in the literature, in the philosophy, in ways of thinking about the
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world
and
so
on. In fact,
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sometimes
, I am even tempted to
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think
that there is
actually
no greater culture than the German one. German is
also
the largest economy in Europe.

Anyway
, I
am interested
in this
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country
for a number of reasons,
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but
the main reasons are its ingenuity and its ability to excel at
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many
things, such as automobiles, electric appliances, and
of course
, efficiency.

However
, what I like most about German is that I
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think
German is a
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great
role model for other
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nations
,
especially
, in its stunning economic success after the destruction of the 2nd
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world
war. I
also
like the fact it has emerged as one of the most
deeply
rooted and stable democracies on the planet.
Finally
, I
also
like how this
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great
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nation
has confronted the darkest aspects of its past
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–
2nd
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world
war, by
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some
astonishingly
thorough,
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but
remorseless soul-searching.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a nation (not your own) that you know well. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
6 paragraphs
401 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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