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Describe a famous tourist destination in your country. v.1

Describe a famous tourist destination in your country. v. 1
Describe a famous tourist destination in your country. You should say: what it is what are the main attractions of this place what can someone see/do there And say why you would recommend this place to a foreign tourist. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you're going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ] Model Answer 1: If an international tourist has a one day visit to Indonesia, I would recommend him to see the island of Bali. There are various reasons why s/he should visit the island, and I will explain in details about it. Firstly, Bali is a small island, but it has many beautiful scenery places that people could visit in a day. The island is famous for its' beautiful beaches such as Kuta, Sanur and Nusa Dua Beach. These beaches are known for their beautiful white sands along their coast and for their waves as well, as tens of thousands of tourists from overseas are visiting the island annually. The location of these beaches is near therefore tourists could visit these beaches in just half a day. Secondly, as these beaches are located near to Denpasar, which is the capital city of Bali, there are many things that tourist could do in the city itself. After lying down on the beach, people could see some unique entertainments in the city, such as the traditional Barong and Kecak Dance. These traditional dances are unique and artistic because they are the combination of art, magic, philosophy and religion. And then, there are so many traditional restaurants in Bali, where tourists could try these culinary places. Bali is well known for its' pork ribs and fried chicken, and many tourists have enjoyed these culinary experiences because they are crispy and spicy. I personally believe that if an international traveller has only a day to see Indonesia, I would suggest him to visit Bali, as it has a combination of beautiful landscape, artistic traditional performance and recommended restaurants which people could visit in a day. [ by - Darwin Lesmana ] Sample Answer 2: Greece is one of the most attractive countries in the world and it contains few of the most wonderful places to visit. The places are highly interesting and probably the most desired places in entire Europe. Elafonissi beach is one of the places and I am happy to describe the beach here. Greece has many places to go to and enjoy for the visitors. Crete, the largest island in Greece, has many things to offer to its visitors and the Elafonissi beach is one of them. This is a kind of hidden treasure for the visitors. They will be unable to discover the beauty of the beach unless they visit it. The beach is an interesting place to visit and pass leisure hours. But to enjoy the real beauty of the beach, one should stay for a few days in the area. The beach area is frequently crowded with various types of people and most of them come here to enjoy the natural views of the beach.   This is a sandy beach and got a higher rank in the top 10 list of the world. In fact, this is a beach that nobody wants to miss while they are on their trip to Greece. They key attraction of the beach is the sunset and sunrise scenes. A wide number of the people flock to the beach during the sunset and sun rising hours to enjoy the scenes. The beach is well organised and the surrounding environment is also charming. The pink sandy beach offers a great view to the horizon. The water is crystal clear and thus suitable for almost all types of activities on the water. People swim, participate in water sports, ride on water vehicles and more other activities. Besides, there are some small shops and stores are available that will help you get the necessary refreshment including bar service. the town is lively and the crowd of people is enjoyable. The majority of the visitors come here to enjoy the beautiful sunset scenes. The sun ray looks beautiful when it is about to set. The entire water turns in to a golden colour while the western sky becomes reddish. The view is excellent and a good number of the visitors only come here to enjoy the last moment of the day. By the same time, the small shops and bars allow the visitors to take light snacks and enjoy the sunset scenes with their near and dear ones. But the view is different in the morning or at the sunrise hour. There are fewer people at that moment for being the early hour of the day. But there are some people who come out to enjoy the morning beauty. Water sports is a common issue here and many of the visitors participate in the sports and enjoy themselves. This beach is wonderful. Without seeing the beauties in own eyes, anyone will not believe that how stunning the natural beauty of the locality is. Most of the time, foreign tourists suffer numerous troubles when they are in a new place. But I can assure that their experience will be different in this place. This is a safe and secured place. In fact, this is a small paradise to the visitors. The water is clear, warm and thus enjoyable to the fullest extent. The gentle breeze will make them feel comfortable. Moreover, the prices of everything here is reasonable. Hence, I will recommend it to every foreign tourist to visit the beach at least for once in their lifetime. They will be in love with this place.   Part 3 – Two-way discussion: Q. What are some famous tourist spots in your country?
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Describe
a
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famous
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tourist
destination in your country. You should say: what it is what are the main attractions of this
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place
what can someone
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see
/do there And say why you would recommend this
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place
to a foreign
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tourist
. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you're going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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you if you wish.
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]
Model Answer 1:

If an international
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tourist
has a
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one day
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visit
to Indonesia, I would recommend him to
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see
the
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island
of Bali. There are various reasons why s/he should
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visit
the
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island
, and I will
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explain
in
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details
about it.

Firstly
, Bali is a
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small
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island
,
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but
it has
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many
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beautiful
scenery
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places
that
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people
could
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visit
in a day. The
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island
is
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famous
for
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its'
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beautiful
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beaches
such as
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Kuta
,
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Sanur
and
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Nusa
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Dua
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Beach
. These
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beaches
are known
for their
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beautiful
white sands along their coast and for their waves as
well
, as tens of thousands of
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tourists
from overseas are visiting the
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island
annually
. The location of these
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beaches
is near
therefore
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tourists
could
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visit
these
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beaches
in
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just
half a day.

Secondly
, as these
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beaches
are located
near to Denpasar, which is the capital city of Bali, there are
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many
things that
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tourist
could do in the city itself. After lying down on the
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beach
,
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people
could
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see
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some
unique entertainments in the city, such as the
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traditional
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Barong
and
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Kecak
Dance. These
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traditional
dances are unique and artistic
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because
they are the combination of art, magic, philosophy and religion. And then, there are
so
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many
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traditional
restaurants in Bali, where
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tourists
could try these culinary
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places
. Bali is
well
known for
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its'
pork ribs and fried chicken, and
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many
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tourists
have enjoyed these culinary experiences
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because
they are crispy and spicy.

I
personally
believe that if an international
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traveller
has
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only
a day to
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see
Indonesia, I would suggest him to
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visit
Bali, as it has a combination of
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beautiful
landscape, artistic
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traditional
performance and recommended restaurants which
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people
could
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visit
in a day.
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[
by
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-
Darwin
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Lesmana
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]
Sample Answer 2:

Greece is one of the most attractive countries in the world and it contains few of the most wonderful
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places
to
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visit
. The
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places
are
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highly interesting
and
probably
the most desired
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places
in entire Europe.
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Elafonissi
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beach
is one of the
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places and
I am happy to
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describe
the
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beach
here.

Greece has
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many
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places
to go to and
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enjoy
for the
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visitors
. Crete, the largest
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island
in Greece, has
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many
things to offer to its
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visitors
and the
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Elafonissi
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beach
is one of them. This is a kind of hidden treasure for the
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visitors
. They will be unable to discover the
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beauty
of the
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beach
unless they
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visit
it. The
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beach
is an interesting
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place
to
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visit
and pass leisure
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hours
.
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But
to
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enjoy
the real
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beauty
of the
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beach
, one should stay for a few days in the area. The
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beach
area is
frequently
crowded with various types of
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people
and most of them
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come
here to
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enjoy
the natural
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views
of the
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beach
.
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This is a sandy
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beach
and
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got
a higher rank in the top 10 list of the world. In fact, this is a
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beach
that nobody wants to miss while they are on their trip to Greece. They key attraction of the
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beach
is the
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sunset
and sunrise
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scenes
. A wide number of the
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people
flock to the
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beach
during the
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sunset
and sun rising
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hours
to
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enjoy
the
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scenes
. The
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beach
is
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well organised
and the surrounding environment is
also
charming. The pink sandy
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beach
offers a great
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view
to the horizon.
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The
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water
is crystal
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clear
and
thus
suitable for almost all types of activities on the
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water
.
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People
swim, participate in
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water
sports, ride on
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water
vehicles and more other activities.
Besides
, there are
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some
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small
shops and stores are available that will
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help
you
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get
the necessary refreshment including bar service.
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the
town is lively and the crowd of
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people
is enjoyable.

The majority of the
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visitors
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come
here to
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enjoy
the
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beautiful
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sunset
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scenes
. The sun ray looks
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beautiful
when it is about to set.
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The
entire
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water
turns in to a golden
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colour
while the western sky becomes reddish.
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The
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view
is excellent and a
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good
number of the
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visitors
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only
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come
here to
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enjoy
the last moment of the day. By the same time, the
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small
shops and bars
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allow
the
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visitors
to take light snacks and
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enjoy
the
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sunset
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scenes
with their near and dear ones.
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But
the
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view
is
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different
in the morning or at the sunrise
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hour
. There are fewer
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people
at that moment for being the early
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hour
of the day.
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But
there are
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some
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people
who
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come
out to
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enjoy
the morning
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beauty
.
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Water
sports is a common issue here and
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many
of the
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visitors
participate in the sports and
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enjoy
themselves.

This
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beach
is wonderful. Without seeing the
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beauties
in
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own
eyes, anyone will not believe that how stunning the natural
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beauty
of the locality is. Most of the time, foreign
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tourists
suffer numerous troubles when they are in a new
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place
.
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But
I can assure that their experience will be
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different
in this
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place
. This is a safe and secured
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place
. In fact, this is a
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small
paradise to the
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visitors
. The
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water
is
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clear
, warm and
thus
enjoyable to the fullest extent. The gentle breeze will
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make
them feel comfortable.
Moreover
, the prices of everything here is reasonable.
Hence
, I will recommend it to every foreign
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tourist
to
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visit
the
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beach
at least for once in their lifetime. They will be in
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love
with this
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place
.
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Part 3
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Two-way discussion: Q. What are
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famous
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spots in your country?
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
132Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
28Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a famous tourist destination in your country. v. 1

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  American English
9 paragraphs
981 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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