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Describe a book or movie that had a major influence on you. v.1

Describe a book or movie that had a major influence on you. v. 1
Describe a book or movie that had a major influence on you. You should say: what is it and who wrote/produced it how you learned about it what's the main story of the book/ movie and how it had a major influence on you. Model Answer 1: So, today I’m going to talk about a book that has had a major influence on me. I will first tell you the name of the book, then I’ll tell you how I heard about it. Next, I’ll outline the main story and finally I will explain why it plays an important role in my life. The book is called ‘Tracks’, and it is by an Australian woman called Robyn Davidson. It’s quite old now, I think it was written in about 1980, but it has recently been made into a film, so perhaps you will have heard of it. I was introduced to the book by an Australian friend.   She was travelling in England when I met her, and we were both working at the same place. I said how brave she was going round the world, and how much I’d like to do it but I didn’t have the skills and courage to do the same.   She insisted that bravery doesn’t really come into it, sometimes you just have to go. When she left to continue on her travels she gave me a copy of this book, with an inscription that was taken from its last chapter which basically says, the hardest part of any endeavour (or journey) is taking the first step, making the decision to go, and after that it’s easy! The book is a true account of a young woman who decides to cross the Great Australian Desert on her own by camel! That is some 1700 miles of Australian outback, from Alice Springs to the Indian Ocean.   What I found remarkable about the tale, is that the woman who does this is herself not that well equipped.   She makes lots of mistakes, things go wrong, she loses confidence at times, and it is by no means easy.   At the start of the journey she’d never met a camel, let alone knew about how to work with them!   However, she overcame all these obstacles through tenacity and creativity and achieved her goal.   It was precisely because she was apparently so unsuited to the endeavour that I found it really inspirational to read.   Sometimes you read tales of adventurers and the people who do great thing seem to be super-human, incredibly resourceful, strong or wealthy and you end up thinking ‘that’s amazing, but I could never do that’. With Robyn’s tale, it is different. You think ‘well if she can I could too.   It won’t be easy, but it isn’t necessarily impossible either’. So why is the book so important to me?   Because it gave me a nudge to do something I’d been wanting to do for a very long time.   To travel.   The story inspired me, but also the confidence that my friend had in me that I could do it too helped me to eventually take the decision to go off exploring the world.   Perhaps not anything quite so remarkable as crossing a desert on my own apart from a few camels, but my own adventures nevertheless.   Since then I’ve found out for myself that it is indeed true, the hardest bit about any adventure is making the decision to take the first step.   I wouldn’t say that after that it is necessarily easy, but I would say if you keep going forward you won’t want to look back! [ Written by - Lucy Marris |  Careers Adviser (UK), TEFL teacher (Vietnam) ]   Sample Answer 2:   (A Book) I am greatly influenced by the novel – The Alchemist. This is one of the bestsellers and I like the novel for a good many reasons. The book is about finding one’s destiny. I am extremely glad to get the opportunity on discussing the novel I like most. The novel was composed in the Portuguese language by the Brazilian writer Paulo Coelho. It was composed in 1987 and was published in the next year. The entire book is about the firm determination which gets natural help. The novel shows how the universe helps someone in reaching the destiny. But by the same time, there should be a firm intention towards success. The novel was written within a very short time – two weeks only. The writer had completed his work so speedily that it amazes me greatly. He told about the writing speed that the plot was in his soul and thus he was able to complete it within this short time. I love to read books of various tastes. Some of my family members term me as book worm because of my book reading nature. I first came to know about the book from an uncle (my dad’s friend) who came to our house and had some conversations with me. He told me about the book and advised me to read it. He also told me that the novel will enrich my mind from diversified perspectives. After his directives, I collected the book. But it was really difficult to get the book in the local book shops of Paris where I live in. So, I had to wait for a few days before having the book. One of the book sellers, from whom I regularly collect books, took my order and asked me to wait for somedays till he manages the book. Finally, I got the book after about one month after I placed the order.     The novel revolves around the theme about the destiny. The core theme of the book is about the supports from the universe. When someone tries to get something by heart, the entire universe comes in to help to gain the thing. Finding the destiny becomes easier then. With this novel – The Alchemist, the author wants to prove that someone needs to be true with the determination. The story runs with the events of an Andalusian shepherd and his journey to Egypt. The young boy started for Egypt to find treasure in pyramids. He dreamt about the similar thing for a couple of times and he realised the fact that he needs to move ahead to make his dream come true. Santiago, the young shepherd, believed that he would reach his dream someday and accordingly, he made the plan to visit Egypt. In his way to the destiny, he had met with several people who inspired him to reach his goal. He falls in love and gets a new realisation about life. The novel had some major influences on me after I completed reading it. In fact, it may sound weird that I have started believing on personal legend and reached the goals I dreamt for. I wanted to succeed in my academic activities. It was difficult for me to obtain a very good score in the exams. But with the firm determination, I found that everything was easier to me. I got supports from my parents and classmates in the university which I never had before. My way of thinking towards the world changed and I won everything I wanted to win before. I got the idea from the novel and it was a great help for me indeed.
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Describe
a
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book
or movie that had a
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major
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influence
on you. You should say: what is it and
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who
wrote/produced it how you learned about it what's the main
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story
of the book/ movie and how it had a
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major
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influence
on you. Model Answer 1:

So
,
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today
I’m going to talk about a
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book
that has had a
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major
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influence
on me. I will
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first
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tell
you the name of the
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book
, then I’ll
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tell
you how I heard about it.
Next
, I’ll outline the main
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story
and
finally
I will
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explain
why it plays an
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important
role in my life. The
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book
is called
‘
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Tracks
’, and it is by an Australian woman called Robyn Davidson. It’s quite
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old
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now
, I
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think
it
was written
in about 1980,
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but
it has recently
been made
into a film,
so
perhaps you will have heard of it. I
was introduced
to the
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book
by an Australian friend.
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She was travelling in England when I met her, and we were both working at the same place. I said how brave she was going round the world, and how much I’d like to do it
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but
I didn’t have the
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skills
and courage to do the same.
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She insisted that bravery doesn’t
really
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come
into it,
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sometimes
you
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just
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have to
go. When she
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left
to continue on her travels she gave me a copy of this
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book
, with an inscription that
was taken
from its last chapter which
basically
says, the hardest part of any
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endeavour
(or journey) is taking the
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first
step, making the decision to go, and after that it’s
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easy
! The
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book
is a
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true
account of a young woman
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who
decides to cross the Great Australian Desert on her
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own
by camel!
That is
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some
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1700 miles
of Australian outback, from Alice Springs to the Indian Ocean.
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What I
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found
remarkable about the tale, is that the woman
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who
does this is herself not that
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well equipped
.
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She
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makes
lots of mistakes, things go
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wrong
, she loses confidence at
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times
, and it is by no means
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easy
.
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At the
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start
of the journey she’d never met a camel,
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let
alone
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knew
about how to work with them!
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However
, she overcame all these obstacles through tenacity and creativity and achieved her goal.
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It was
precisely
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because
she was
apparently
so
unsuited to the
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endeavour
that I
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found
it
really
inspirational to
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read
.
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Sometimes
you
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read
tales of adventurers and the
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people
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who
do great thing seem to be super-human,
incredibly
resourceful, strong or wealthy and you
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end
up thinking ‘that’s amazing,
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but
I could never do that’. With Robyn’s tale, it is
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different
. You
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think
‘
well
if she can I could too.
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It won’t be
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easy
,
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but
it isn’t
necessarily
impossible either’.
So
why is the
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book
so
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important
to me?
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Because
it gave me a nudge to do something I’d
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been wanting
to do for a
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very
long
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time
.
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To travel.
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The
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story
inspired me,
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but
also
the confidence that my friend had in me that I could do it too
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helped
me to
eventually
take the decision to go off exploring the world.
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Perhaps not anything quite
so
remarkable as crossing a desert on my
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own
apart from a few camels,
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but
my
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own
adventures
nevertheless
.
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Since
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then I
’ve
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found
out for myself that it is
indeed
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true
, the hardest bit about any adventure is making the decision to take the
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first
step.
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I wouldn’t say that after that it is
necessarily
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easy
,
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but
I would say if you
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keep
going forward you won’t want to look back!
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Written by
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-
Lucy
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Marris
|
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Careers Adviser (UK), TEFL teacher (Vietnam)
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Sample Answer 2:
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(A Book)

I am
greatly
influenced by the
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novel
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–
The Alchemist. This is one of the bestsellers and I like the
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novel
for a
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good
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many
reasons. The
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book
is about finding one’s
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destiny
. I am
extremely
glad to
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get
the opportunity on discussing the
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novel
I like most.

The
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novel
was composed
in the Portuguese language by the Brazilian writer Paulo
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Coelho
. It
was composed
in 1987 and
was published
in the
next
year. The entire
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book
is about the firm determination which
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gets
natural
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help
. The
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novel
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shows
how the universe
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helps
someone in reaching the
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destiny
.
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But
by the same
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time
, there should be a firm intention towards success. The
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novel
was written
within a
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very
short
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time
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–
two weeks
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only
. The writer had completed his work
so
speedily
that it amazes me
greatly
. He
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told
about the writing speed that the plot was in his soul and
thus
he was able to complete it within this short time.

I
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love
to
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read
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books
of various tastes.
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Some
of my family members term me as
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book
worm
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because
of my
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book
reading nature. I
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first
came to know about the
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book
from an uncle (my dad’s friend)
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who
came to our
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house
and had
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some
conversations with me. He
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told
me about the
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book
and advised me to
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read
it. He
also
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told
me that the
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novel
will enrich my mind from diversified perspectives. After his directives, I collected the
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book
.
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But
it was
really
difficult to
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get
the
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book
in the local
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book
shops of Paris where I
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live
in.
So
, I had to wait for a few days
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before
having the
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book
. One of the
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book
sellers, from whom I
regularly
collect
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books
, took my order and asked me to wait for
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somedays till
he manages the
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book
.
Finally
, I
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got
the
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book
after about one month after I placed the order.
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The
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novel
revolves around the theme about the
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destiny
. The core theme of the
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book
is about the supports from the universe. When someone tries to
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get
something by heart, the entire universe
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comes
in to
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help
to gain the thing. Finding the
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destiny
becomes easier then. With this
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novel
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–
The Alchemist, the author wants to prove that someone needs to be
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true
with the determination. The
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story
runs with the
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events
of an Andalusian shepherd and his journey to Egypt. The young boy
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started
for Egypt to find treasure in pyramids. He dreamt about the similar thing for a couple of
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times and
he
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realised
the fact that he needs to
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move
ahead to
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make
his dream
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come
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true
. Santiago, the young shepherd, believed that he would reach his dream someday and
accordingly
, he made the plan to visit Egypt. In his way to the
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destiny
, he had met with several
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people
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who
inspired him to reach his goal. He falls in
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love
and
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gets
a new
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realisation
about life.

The
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novel
had
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some
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major
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influences
on me after I completed reading it. In fact, it may sound weird that I have
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started
believing on personal legend and reached the goals I dreamt for. I wanted to succeed in my academic activities. It was difficult for me to obtain a
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very
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good
score in the exams.
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But
with the firm determination, I
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found
that everything was easier to me. I
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got
supports from my parents and classmates in the university which I never had
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before
. My way of thinking towards the world
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changed
and I won everything I wanted to win
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before
. I
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got
the
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idea
from the
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novel
and it was a great
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help
for me
indeed
.
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92Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
38Mistakes
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IELTS speaking Describe a book or movie that had a major influence on you. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
6 paragraphs
1247 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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