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Describe a computer game you have played. v.1

Describe a computer game you have played. v. 1
Describe a computer game you have played. You should say: what it was when you played it what the game was about And explain how you played this game. Sample Answer 1: For a long time, I have not played computer games as I got busy with other tasks and can hardly manage time nowadays but I was a hardcore fan of the game Age of Empires 2. This was a strategy game developed by Ensemble Studios and published by Microsoft Studios.   There were three series of this game and I played the second series called Age of Empire the Conqueror. This was a historic strategy game that the gamers could have played either in single player or in multiplayer mode. I mostly played it when I was 16-18 years old. I usually played it against computer competitors and sometimes against my friends over the computer network. There were several civilizations that a player had to pick from and then develop this civilization in every aspect to protect it from the attack of other civilizations. Each civilization had its own strength and weakness and the player had to control the game for a long time. The different soldiers, defence mechanism, war strategy, war defence and research and different technologies made it a really interesting game. I often played it against the computer when I picked a civilization and computer had other 3 civilizations. We fought each other and often I won the games against the computer in Hard game mode. I often played with my friends and that was a different experience as I had to compete against a real human. That was more competitive and I enjoyed thoroughly playing against my friends.
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Describe
a computer game you have
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. You should say: what it was when you
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it what the game was about And
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explain
how you
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this game. Sample Answer 1:

For a long time, I have not
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computer
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games
as I
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got
busy with
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tasks and can hardly manage time nowadays
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I was a hardcore fan of the game Age of Empires 2. This was a strategy game developed by Ensemble Studios and published by Microsoft Studios.
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There were three series of this game and I
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played
the second series called Age of Empire the Conqueror. This was a historic strategy game that the gamers could have
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played
either in single player or in multiplayer mode. I
mostly
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played
it when I was 16-18 years
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old
. I
usually
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played
it against computer competitors and
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sometimes
against my friends over the computer network.

There were several
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civilizations
that a player had to pick from and then develop this
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civilization
in every aspect to protect it from the attack of
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other
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civilizations
. Each
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civilization
had its
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own
strength and weakness and the player had to control the game for a long time. The
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different
soldiers,
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defence
mechanism, war strategy, war
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defence
and research and
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different
technologies made it a
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really interesting
game. I
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often
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played
it against the computer when I picked a
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civilization
and computer had
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other
3
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civilizations
. We fought each
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other
and
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often
I won the
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games
against the computer in
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Hard
game mode. I
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often
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played
with my friends and that was a
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different
experience as I had to compete against a real human. That was more competitive and I enjoyed
thoroughly
playing against my friends.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a computer game you have played. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
3 paragraphs
284 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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