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Describe a beautiful place where you want to have a home. v.1

Describe a beautiful place where you want to have a home. v. 1
Describe a beautiful place where you want to have a home. You should say: where this place is how you know about this place what type of home you want there and explain why you would choose to live there. Sample Answer 1: This is a nice topic to talk about. I have been dreaming for a long to have a home of my own, where I will have absolute freedom to live in and the place would be a nice one, close to nature. Moreover, the home decoration would be according to my choice and everything would be picked by me. Well, this dream house would be near the hill which is around 2 kilometres away from my current living place. This hill is one of the most beautiful places in our hometown and I would pick this place to build my dream home. There are numerous hills and tea gardens in this locality and I would specifically choose a tall hill where I would be able to build a small home with pine woods. The flat top of the hills would allow me to build a home and a large portion of this place would be used for gardening and farming. I know this place from my childhood. This is a naturally beautiful place where I went for the first time with my family for a picnic. I was around 12 years old at that time. We had our lunch in the hilltop area where 3-4 farmer families used to live. The idea of having a home there was formed in my mind at that time. I have visited this place several times later on and the serenity and beauty of hills, river, tea gardens and simple lifestyles of the inhabitants appealed me a lot each time. I would build a wooden home that would have 4 rooms. One for my bedroom, one for guests, the third one would be my study room and the largest one would be the one where I will work. This would be a simple hut type home with large front garden and farming lands. I will pick the wooden furniture and obviously everything I will need to live a decent and hassle-free life. There are many reasons I would love to live there. First, the beauty of nature: the surrounding view, the flowing narrow river, tea gardens, green picturesque scenery and sound of nature would be the perfect elements to live in peacefully. I think this would allow me to stay away from a chaotic urban lifestyle and to stay surrounded by Nature. Secondly, this would allow me to finish a book I have started writing which is still in its initial stage. I would have plenty of time to appreciate the life and meaning of being alive. The urban life surrounds us with so many problems and complexities that I sometimes feel severely stressed about. I would take this excellent opportunity to revive my spirit and self-satisfaction.
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Describe
a
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beautiful
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place
where you want to have a home. You should say: where this
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place
is how
you know
about this
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place
what type of home you want there and
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explain
why you would choose to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
live
there. Sample Answer 1:

This is a nice topic to talk about. I have been dreaming for a long to have a home of my
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own
, where I will have absolute freedom to
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live
in and the
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place
would be a nice one, close to
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nature
.
Moreover
, the home decoration would be according to my choice and everything would
be picked
by me.
Well
, this dream
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house
would be near the
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hill
which is around 2
Possible spelling mistake. 'kilometres' is British English.
kilometres
away from my
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current
living
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place
. This
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hill
is one of the most
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beautiful
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places
in our hometown and I would pick this
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place
to
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build
my dream home. There are numerous
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hills
and tea
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gardens
in this locality and I would
specifically
choose a tall
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hill
where I would be able to
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build
a
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small
home with pine woods. The flat top of the
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hills
would
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allow
me to
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build
a home and a large portion of this
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place
would be
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used
for gardening and farming. I know this
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place
from my childhood. This is a
naturally
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beautiful
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place
where I went for the
first
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time
with my family for a picnic. I was around 12 years
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old
at that
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time
. We had our lunch in the hilltop area where 3-4 farmer families
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used
to
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live
. The
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idea
of having a home there
was formed
in my mind at that
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time
. I have visited this
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place
several
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times
later on and the serenity and beauty of
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hills
, river, tea
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gardens
and simple lifestyles of the inhabitants appealed me a lot each
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time
. I would
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build
a wooden home that would have 4 rooms. One for my bedroom, one for guests, the third one would be my study room and the largest one would be the one where I will work. This would be a simple hut type home with large front
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garden
and farming lands. I will pick the wooden furniture and
obviously
everything I will need to
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live
a decent and hassle-free life. There are
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many
reasons I would
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love
to
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live
there.
First
, the beauty of
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nature
: the surrounding view, the flowing narrow river, tea
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gardens
, green picturesque scenery and sound of
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nature
would be the perfect elements to
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live
in
peacefully
. I
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think
this would
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allow
me to stay away from a chaotic urban lifestyle and to stay surrounded by
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Nature
.
Secondly
, this would
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allow
me to finish a book I have
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started
writing which is
still
in its initial stage. I would have
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plenty
of
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time
to appreciate the life and meaning of being alive. The urban life surrounds us with
so
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many
problems and complexities that I
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sometimes
feel
severely
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stressed
about. I would take this excellent opportunity to revive my spirit and self-satisfaction.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
41Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a beautiful place where you want to have a home. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
2 paragraphs
496 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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