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Your friend is about to celebrate a landmark birthday and would welcome suggestions as to how it should be celebrate Write a letter to your friend. In your letter  Say what type of party should be held e.g. themed, fancy dress, black tie event.  Suggest a suitable venue  Make recommendation as to entertainment e.g. DJ, jazz band etc

Your friend is about to celebrate a landmark birthday and would welcome suggestions as to how it should be celebrate Write a letter to your friend. In your letter  Say what type of party should be held e. g. themed, fancy dress, black tie event.  Suggest a suitable venue  Make recommendation as to entertainment e. g. DJ, jazz band etc RAVp
Dear Evelyn, I hope you're doing well, and excited for your sweet 16 birthday next month. You should celebrate this special occasion with style, and throw a grand party and enjoy with your friends and family. I would recommend you to held a vampire themed party, as it is very popular among teenagers. Firstly, you need a nice spot for the event and, I know a great place where you can organize the event. It is located by the river, and has a nice lighting arrangement for vampire themes. It also provides wife range of delicious catering services. Secondly, the music plays an important role in setting up the mood, so I would suggest you to book a live band that would play songs according to our theme. I would advice you to book Dead Man Fall, they are available on your birthday as I have confirmed with them. I hope you will have a memorable birthday. I hope my advice would be of use to you. Yours sincerely,
Dear Evelyn,

I hope you're doing well, and excited for your sweet 16
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birthday
next
month.

You should celebrate this special occasion with style, and throw a grand party and enjoy with your

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friends
and family. I would recommend you
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to held
a vampire themed party, as it is
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very
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popular


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among
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teenagers
.

Firstly
, you need a nice spot for the
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event
and, I know a great place where you can organize the
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event
.

It
is located
by the river, and has a nice lighting arrangement for vampire themes. It
also
provides
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wife


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range
of delicious catering services.

Secondly
, the music plays an
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important
role in setting up the mood,
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so
I would suggest you to book a

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live
band that would play songs according to our theme. I would
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advice
you to book Dead
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Man
Fall,

they are available on your birthday as I have confirmed with them.

I hope you will have a memorable birthday. I hope my advice would be of
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use
to you.

Yours
sincerely
,
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IELTS letter Your friend is about to celebrate a landmark birthday and would welcome suggestions as to how it should be celebrate Write a letter to your friend. In your letter  Say what type of party should be held e. g. themed, fancy dress, black tie event.  Suggest a suitable venue  Make recommendation as to entertainment e. g. DJ, jazz band etc

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13 paragraphs
169 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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