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Your friend has just moved to a new house. Write a letter to your friend and let him know about the gift that you have prepared for him/her. In your letter, you should: -Describe the gift -tell how it will be delivered -explain why you chose it.

Dear Alex, Hope you and your family doing well. I heard about your new home and recently you moved there. I am very glad for that your dream became true which you were wondering since many years. Firstly, I know may be you will be busy to decorate your house, hence I have purchased an antique wall clock for your home. It is a beautiful automatic white clock which bright your home like a star. Most special think about it that you can use as a alarm once it set. Moreover, when alarm start to buzz one sparrow will come out and will sing a song. Also, it has radium on the all digits as well as on the main frame so in the dark you could see without any trouble. I know it is quite difficult to send you, but I got solution. My friend has to plan o visit your hometown for his business purpose and he will deliver your gift. I already gave your number. From child I know that you are very punctual person and you do not like to get late. So I thought this might be perfect gift for you. Even, you are great lover of antique items. Hope you like this gift and your new days in home. With love, Nikhil
Dear Alex,

Hope you and your family doing well. I heard about your new home and recently you
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moved
there. I am
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very
glad for that your dream became true which you were wondering since
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many
years.

Firstly
, I know
Did you mean "maybe" (= perhaps)?
may be
you will be busy to decorate your
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house
,
hence
I have
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purchased
an antique wall clock for your home. It is a
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beautiful
automatic white clock which bright your home like a star. Most special
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think
about it that you can
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use
as
Use "an" instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
a
alarm once it set.
Moreover
, when alarm
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start
to buzz one sparrow will
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come
out and will sing a song.
Also
, it has radium on the all digits
as well
as on the main frame
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so
in the dark you could
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see
without any trouble.

I know it is quite difficult to
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send
you,
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but
I
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got
solution. My friend
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has to
plan o visit your hometown for his business
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
purpose and
he will deliver your gift. I already gave your number.

From
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child I
know that you are
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very
punctual person and you do not like to
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get
late.
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So
I
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thought
this might be perfect gift for you. Even, you
Please check whether an article is missing: "are a great" or "are an great"
are great
lover of antique items.

Hope you like this gift and your new days in home.

With
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love
,

Nikhil
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IELTS letter Your friend has just moved to a new house. Write a letter to your friend and let him know about the gift that you have prepared for him/her. In your letter, you should: -Describe the gift -tell how it will be delivered -explain why you chose it.

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
217 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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