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Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go.

Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go. PynK

Dear Mr. teacher Hi, I am writing this email to say that I want to go to the trip to Japan with my child. I would like to go on the trip to take care of children with affections and to make great memories with them as I tour the exotic country. I suggest that I can support the group of children with their meals and I can take care of all the tasks of reservations and collecting and making applications during the trip. I just wonder and ask you about that if I could share my accommodations with children. Sincerely, Joy

Dear Mr. teacher

Hi, I am writing this email to say that I want to go to the trip to Japan with my child. I would like to go on the trip to take care of children with affections and to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 great memories with them as I tour the exotic country.

I suggest that I can support the group of children with their meals and I can take care of all the tasks of reservations and collecting and making applications during the trip.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 wonder and ask you about that if I could share my accommodations with children.

Sincerely
,

Joy

IELTS letter Your child is going on a three day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go.

Letter

American English

6 paragraphs

101 words

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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 6.5

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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