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You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

Dear Sir/Madam, I am Cherry Lhev Mercado, an IT residence to Daanghari technologies INC. located in the Navotas City in the Philippines. I have heard that you’re conducting a seminar regarding IT Industry to my colleague. I am writing this letter regards to the program dates, program details and the accommodation cost. Furthermore, about the program dates and time. I certainly desire to know how the platforms work and other information corresponding what the speaker’s orientation to the seminar. I’m also looking forward if you have some special benefits to a people similar to my circumstances that need to travel abroad to attend your seminar. I’m also want to know more about the details and the accommodation rate. What will be the procedure will be the individual is responsible for booking or they will arrange by you? What are the things that important to bring along with the participants? And the approximate cost of the seminar and accommodation? I’m very interested in attending your seminar. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon regarding to my inquiries. Yours truly, Cherry Lhev Mercado
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am Cherry
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Lhev
Mercado, an IT residence to
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Daanghari
technologies INC. located in the
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Navotas
City in the Philippines. I have heard that you’re conducting a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
seminar
regarding IT Industry to my colleague.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am writing this letter regards to the program dates, program
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details
and the accommodation cost.

Furthermore
, about the program dates and time. I
certainly
desire to know how the platforms work and other information corresponding what the speaker’s orientation to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
seminar
. I’m
also
looking forward if you have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
special benefits to a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
similar to my circumstances that need to travel abroad to attend your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
seminar
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
’m
also
Consider using a past participle here: "wanted".
want
to know more about the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
and the accommodation rate. What will be the procedure will be the individual is responsible for
Use a comma before 'or' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
booking or
they will arrange by you? What are the things that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
to bring along with the participants? And the approximate cost of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
seminar
and accommodation?

I’m
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
interested in attending your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
seminar
. I am looking forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
The phrase 'regarding to' is not correct. Use "regarding" or "regard to".
regarding to
my inquiries.

Yours
truly
,

Cherry
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Lhev
Mercado
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IELTS letter You would like to participate in a work-related seminar in another country. Write a letter to the person in charge of the seminar and ask for detailed information regarding the dates, program, accommodation and cost.

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
182 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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