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You would like to be work in a different city to be closer to your family. Write a letter to your employer to request a transfer to another office. In the letter: – Explain why you would like to move – Request that your employer place you in a specific city – Request that it be completed by a certain date

Dear Management, My name is Peter Mandelson and I have been a loyal employee of HMG Inc. for over twelve years. Currently, I am a floor manager working in the Urmston branch. It has recently come to my attention that my wife’s father now requires full time care, and I would like to request that I be transferred to a different office so that we may be more involved. I am aware that the company operates an office and factory in Devon, and working here would mean being close enough to my father-in-law. If my exact role is not available at the Devon site, I am willing to interview for other relevant jobs and consider them on a case-by-case basis. Unfortunately, this is a time sensitive issue, and so I would like to further request that I receive confirmation of the transfer within the next 30 days, or I may have to consider leaving the company entirely. Yours faithfully, Jeremy Paulson
Dear Management,

My name is Peter
Mandelson
and I have been a loyal employee of
HMG
Inc. for over twelve years.
Currently
, I am a floor manager working in the
Urmston
branch.

It has recently
come
to my attention that my wife’s father
now
requires full time care, and I would like to request that I
be transferred
to a
different
office
so
that we may be more involved.

I am aware that the
company
operates an office and factory in Devon, and working here would mean being close
enough
to my father-in-law. If my exact role is not available at the Devon site, I am willing to interview for other relevant jobs and consider them on a case-by-case basis.

Unfortunately, this is a time sensitive issue, and
so
I would like to
further
request that I receive confirmation of the transfer within the
next
30 days, or I may
have to
consider leaving the
company
entirely
.

Yours
faithfully
,

Jeremy Paulson
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IELTS letter You would like to be work in a different city to be closer to your family. Write a letter to your employer to request a transfer to another office. In the letter: – Explain why you would like to move – Request that your employer place you in a specific city – Request that it be completed by a certain date

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
160 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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