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You were hurt in a minor accident inside a supermarket and you wish to complain to the supermarket authority about that. Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your letter • say who are you • give details about the accident • suggest how the supermarket could prevent similar accidents

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing this letter to inform you about the small tragedy that happened to me when I visited your market last week. I am the regular customer of your supermarket, I have also a membership card and the number is 245879. Let me come to specific event. I went to your store to buy some vegetables and fruits as well as some baking items, When I was searching the baking product in the corner of the baking area section, suddenly one of the men had collided with me from the backside, It was not his fault due to the light intensity in the corner area is very low, In addition to that the floor was also slippery because of the detergent that used by your cleaners. Though it was a minor accident but it could be happen to your other customers in nearby future. I urge you to give instructions to electrical manager to fix the lights in the entire supermarket on urgent basis and do not use clean the floor during the shopping hours. Yours Faithfully Farhan Maqsood
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to inform you about the
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small
tragedy that happened to me when I visited your market last week. I am the regular customer of your supermarket, I have
also
a membership card and the number is 245879.

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Let
me
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come
to specific
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event
. I went to your store to
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buy
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some
vegetables and fruits
as well
as
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some
baking items, When I was searching the baking product in the corner of the baking area section,
suddenly
one of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
men
had collided with me from the backside, It was not his fault due to the light intensity in the corner area is
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very
low,
In addition
to that the floor was
also
slippery
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because
of the detergent that
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used
by your cleaners.

Though it was a minor accident
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but
it could be
Consider using the past participle “happened”.
happen
to your other customers in nearby future. I urge you to give instructions to electrical manager to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fix
the lights in the entire supermarket on urgent basis and do not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
clean the floor during the shopping hours.

Yours
Faithfully


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IELTS letter You were hurt in a minor accident inside a supermarket and you wish to complain to the supermarket authority about that. Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your letter • say who are you • give details about the accident • suggest how the supermarket could prevent similar accidents

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  American English
6 paragraphs
181 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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