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You use trains to reach office but the timetable of the train has been changed recently. Also, the train you take to work no longer stops at your station. Write a letter to the railway authority about it. v.4

You use trains to reach office but the timetable of the train has been changed recently. Also, the train you take to work no longer stops at your station. Write a letter to the railway authority about it. v. 4
Dear Sir or Madam, I am a resident of the Seven Hills area and I regularly use your trains to commute to and from my office. The recent change to the train schedule is causing great sufferings for many commuters like me and I am hoping you would consider a revision of the timetable. I work for an IT company in Denver and several other office goers have the same schedule that I follow to reach the workplace. I used to take one of your trains at 7: 40 am from Seven Hills Station and usually reached my destination around 8: 30 in the morning. The Denver Station, where the train used to drop me off, is only five minutes walk from my office. However, under the revised timetable, your train no longer stops at my station at 7: 40 am and I am forced to take a train from the Curberry Station at 8: 30 am which is almost a mile away from my residence. This revised timetable and schedule are inconvenient for us. A train takes passengers from our station, but only at 6. 30 in the morning and this is too early for us to get on the train. I have also checked with fellow passengers who are also struggling to get to the work on time. I request you revise the train timing again and reinstate 7: 40 AM's train to stop at our station, which will enable me or fellow passengers to travel to work on time. Thank you for giving the matter your attention and I hope to hear your reply soon. Yours faithfully Ravi Babu
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am a resident of the Seven Hills area and I
regularly
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use
your
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trains
to commute to and from my office. The recent
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change
to the
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train
schedule is causing great sufferings for
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many
commuters like
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me and
I am hoping you would consider a revision of the timetable.

I work for an IT
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company
in Denver and several other office goers have the same schedule that I follow to reach the workplace. I
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used
to take one of your
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trains
at 7: 40 am from Seven Hills
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Station
and
usually
reached my destination around 8: 30 in the morning. The Denver
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Station
, where the
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train
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used
to drop me off, is
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only
five minutes walk from my office.

However
, under the revised timetable, your
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train
no longer
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stops
at my
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station
at 7: 40
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am and
I
am forced
to take a
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train
from the
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Curberry
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Station
at 8: 30 am which is almost a mile away from my residence. This revised timetable and schedule are inconvenient for us. A
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train
takes passengers from our
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station
,
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but
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only
at 6. 30 in the morning and this is too early for us to
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get
on the
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train
. I have
also
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checked
with fellow passengers who are
also
struggling to
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get
to the work on time.

I request you revise the
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train
timing again and reinstate 7: 40
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AM's
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train
to
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stop
at our
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station
, which will enable me or fellow passengers to travel to work on time.

Thank you for giving the matter your attention and I hope to hear your reply
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soon
.

Yours
faithfully


Ravi
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Babu
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS letter You use trains to reach office but the timetable of the train has been changed recently. Also, the train you take to work no longer stops at your station. Write a letter to the railway authority about it. v. 4

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6.0
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