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You saw an advertisement requiring volunteers for an organization that helps children. Write a letter and offer to volunteer part time. Include the following in your letter: - Why are you applying for this position? - What makes you suitable for it? - When will you be available?

You saw an advertisement requiring volunteers for an organization that helps children. Write a letter and offer to volunteer part time. Include the following in your letter: - Why are you applying for this position? - What makes you suitable for it? - When will you be available? 2beGM
Dear sir, I am writing this letter in response to your advertisement to for volunteers atyour organization. to express my consent about the position of a volunteer teacher for local children. Firstly, I would like to explain to you why am I interested in your organization. I am a person who likes to help people, especially children because they are more needy than adults. Secondly, I think that I am the perfect person for this job because I am a psychologist teacher and I have the skills to work with children in order to help them. I can teaching any subject that they need. Besides, I know perfectly the feelings ofhow children feel. In conclusion, I would like to tell you my availability. On weekdays I finished my job at 15. 00 pm so I have the rest of the day free. However, on weekends I have the whole day free. I hope that I am a good fit with your organization. I look forward to receiving your response. Yours faithfully, Priyanka.
Dear sir, I am writing this letter in response to your advertisement to for volunteers
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atyour
organization.
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to
express my consent about the position of a volunteer teacher for local
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
.
Firstly
, I would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
to you why am I interested in your organization. I am a person who likes to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
,
especially
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
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because
they are more needy than adults.
Secondly
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that I am the perfect person for this job
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
I am a psychologist teacher and I have the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
to work with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
them. I can
The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: "teach"
teaching
any subject that they need.
Besides
, I know
perfectly
the feelings
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ofhow
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
feel.
In conclusion
, I would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
you my availability. On
The comma is probably missing here: "weekdays, I".
weekdays I
finished my job at 15. 00 pm
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I have the rest of the day free.
However
, on weekends I have the whole day free. I hope that I am a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
fit with your organization.

I look forward to receiving your response.

Yours
faithfully
, Priyanka.

IELTS letter You saw an advertisement requiring volunteers for an organization that helps children. Write a letter and offer to volunteer part time. Include the following in your letter: - Why are you applying for this position? - What makes you suitable for it? - When will you be available?

Letter
  American English
3 paragraphs
172 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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