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You live in a flat and you have a tenancy agreement which states that you must give three months' notice when you wish to leave. You have paid a deposit of two months' rent. Now a member of your family has a problem and you need to give up your flat and return home as soon as possible. v.4

You live in a flat and you have a tenancy agreement which states that you must give three months' notice when you wish to leave. You have paid a deposit of two months' rent. Now a member of your family has a problem and you need to give up your flat and return home as soon as possible. v. 4
Dear Mr Lucas, I hope that you are in good health and spirit. I am writing this letter because I am in a precarious situation, and I would need your favour. Very recently, I came to know from my father that my younger brother, who suffers from some mental problems from time to time, has suddenly disappeared from home. In fact, he has disappeared for almost a week, but my family and the police have found no trace of him anywhere yet. Not to mention, this incident has made my whole family, including me, very worried, and so I need to stay by their side in these tough times and leave my flat immediately. Now, I understand that I signed a tenancy agreement that says that I would need to give there months’ notice before leaving your flat, but I don’t think that I can actually wait that long. So, please feel free to keep the deposit of one month and return another month's deposit to me. And please also consider my situation and do me the favour of not maintaining the proper notice period. However, if you get a tenant in the meantime, I would expect that you would inform me and return my deposit amount. Yours sincerely, Henry Lionel
Dear Mr Lucas,

I hope that you are in
good
health and spirit. I am writing this letter
because
I am in a precarious situation, and I would need your
favour
.

Very
recently, I came to know from my father that my younger brother, who suffers from
some
mental problems from time to time, has
suddenly
disappeared from home. In fact, he has disappeared for almost a week,
but
my family and the police have found no trace of him anywhere
yet
. Not to mention, this incident has made my whole family, including me,
very
worried, and
so
I need to stay by their side in these tough times and
leave
my flat immediately.

Now
, I understand that I signed a tenancy agreement that says that I would need to give there months’ notice
before
leaving your flat,
but
I don’t
think
that I can actually wait that long.

So
,
please
feel free to
keep
the deposit of one month and return another month's deposit to me. And
please
also
consider my situation and do me the
favour
of not maintaining the proper notice period.
However
, if you
get
a tenant in the meantime, I would
expect
that you would inform me and return my deposit amount.

Yours
sincerely
,

Henry Lionel
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter You live in a flat and you have a tenancy agreement which states that you must give three months' notice when you wish to leave. You have paid a deposit of two months' rent. Now a member of your family has a problem and you need to give up your flat and return home as soon as possible. v. 4

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
210 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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